Look, I'm gonna be blunt, hyper isn't for everyone. Some people just don't like it, though you'll always find fans of it, like you will in ever fetish. Insecure channers who hate everything they deem even mildly "cringe" or "autistic" are gonna hate it no matter what you make or how hard you try. Just remember that these threads are filled with people who are going to hate it by definition, and don't let them discourage you.
Hyper is inherently silly as shit and cartoonish and that's fine, that's why I like it because I like dumb as hell cartoony nonsense. I don't see how you exactly plan on changing that and still making it, well, hyper, but your choice. Regardless, I'm glad an artist is actually trying to do hyper, so please keep at it, as I'm interested in seeing your unique take on it.