ran out of characters and going to sleep now>>Someone was really set off by that stunt you pulled, since a girl has just lunged herself towards you.
This sounds quite weird. "someone was set off", it seems like it's not connected and "a girl" is unspecific.>>Backpedaling and dodging the torrent of punches and hooks, the golden ankh is stuffed into one of your pouches.
The first part of the sentence lacks a subject, as the subject of the second part, the ankh, isn't doing it.
You also combined active with passive here.>>Although it doesn't fit all the way, it'll have to do for now.
l-lewd>>The short split in concentration causes a fist to connect with your cheek.
"split in concentration", I dunno. I'd phrase it differently somehow>>Stumbling backwards, the throbbing pain gives a stark reminder about the dangers of super strength.
Once more active and passive.>As you stumble backwards, [...]>>Unlike her previous quips, this one was free of malice and more of teasing.
You contrast a noun with an adjective. Either way, her previous quips didn't seem malicious.>>“Can anyone really blame me for liking people that are more different?”
what?>>”If it wasn’t obvious to you, you need to land a hit to call it your turn. Since, you know, that one was off by the length of Nile,” she snarks, her newfound confidence showing.
the Nile. and why newfound?>>You hop onto the side of a support pillar to gain height, then pushing off of it towards Spider-Woman with your legs extended in a kick.
I'm not exactly sure how that acrobatic stunt works>>She rotates around you to dodge, maintaining a moderate distance from where you landed.
She spins [...]
Also, she needs to create a distance, the distance was almost 0 during the attack.>>Judgment tells you far enough to initiate a combination starting with a jab.
What?>>Hitting the surface, you shift your head out of the way of the anticipated punch.