so, writefag's guild, first time posting in this general. been writing for Tech Isn't Magic and, over there most the feedback over there is "punctuation, otherwise keep going." and not really getting any pointers, this is my first green that wasn't called shit so i think i broke a barrier here, but im still not getting any feedback, so i came here to see what i can get out of this general.
here's the story
Synopsis, anon in equestria, teaching twilight how to understand the world deeper than just "magic."http://pastebin.com/KvQKUKGi
reading this isn't important, just a context- ramble.
i kinda started writing this story after reading a bunch of Tech Isn't magic fics (one by PeteQ) and saw that in all of them, twilight was out of character, she was; well, indescribably harsh, probably the nature of the general. but if you've read some of those stories this is being written as a "breath of logic and fresh air" kind of slice of life bit with anon as the insert.
pic sortof related.