Just read the kid Icarus uprising story.
Did you play the game? These character interactions and banter are pretty damn good and almost represent their game counterparts, save for of course phosphora's increased desire for angel dick. The face sit quick scene amused me the most, as if she was marking her territory on his face.
Although the belly centered story has me questioning whether an average woman's belly is soft to the touch (fat) or tight to the touch (muscle), assuming she does a few exercises to keep fit, but not so much as to develop abs. Had some difficulty picking it up throughout the story (soft/firm, tight/relaxed), even in the amazing details being put in, so perhaps some clarity can be added there, somewhere.
I saw this being made in the thread, so the difference in quality between your early stuff and now is really evident, so you definetly came a long way.
Also apologies for late review. Sickness got the best of me and spent the day sleeping.