Can you buddies help me out here?
I wrote up a monstergirl unbrith story including transformation at the end, but stand before the issue that I’m not very accustomed with unbirth, this is the first time I’ve ever written it in fact.
I’m writing it for somebody who does enjoy unbirth greatly however, so I’m unsure if I managed to write it well enough. It’s not all that long (around 4k words) so if some of you could give it a read and tell me how you liked it, I’d be grateful!
Tell me if there’s something not to your tastes, or if I maybe forgot something important. This is my first time so don’t go easy on me, mistakes are there to be corrected!
With that being said contents are: >Unbirth >TFTG (Male -> Phoenixgirl) >2nd Person >Breastfeeding >Lamia (Echidna) >4k words
Here’s the link: https://pastebin.com/4jhhBHwQ
If you find anything else to give feedback on, it’s highly appreciated, as I said before: Mistakes are there to be corrected.
Thanks a lot and enjoy!