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Some assessment and (hopefully constructive) criticism for you:
Pinkie being a sociopathic abusive rapist for her own enjoyment actually tracks (because even on the show, she'll keep doing what she wants until someone literally forces her to stop, like talking nonstop drowning out important life-or-death communications mid-situation)."
But RD having no loyalty toward a new addition to the group and the guy she knows (or at least STRONGLY suspects) her friend Fluttershy is crushing on is pretty OOC for her.
Also, Rarity is literally the embodiment of generosity, so "I don't care about him, just his cock" is a line of reasoning that her brain shouldn't even be able to parse properly, let alone create within itself. So that's also really OOC.
AJ's also less moral than her canon counterpart(s). Usually she's the "Captain America, do what's morally right, especially when your friends disagree" character. She'd never go along with flat-out drugging, torturing, and raping someone.
The cum-shirt-gag thing was nasty. Should have been Pinkie's panties.
I look forward to seeing where you go from here.