step 1. fix the fucking timing. many times the vocals and guitar are out of sync with the drums, guitar falls out of sync, and it just sounds amateur.
step 2. fix the mix, specifically how the vocals are so far forward and loud, whilst the actual instruments are lacking and almost sound like they're raw and acoustic compared to the plate reverb spacey vocals.
besides that very nice harmonies, very period. nicely done.>>104882565
the guitar intro sounds fine, but when we actually get to the A section, the mix falls apart here. the bass has too much room noise, and the noise gate turns on and off and random intervals, almost like you're chopping up the bass part. besides that I get the vibe, and its sounds fine. work on that and you'll be able to get a lot of it. also, speaking of vibes, find a way to include a vibraphone for peak lounge sound.