Hey, ComicAnon, I did go through:
https://soundcloud.com/user-759005115/feeback-for-indiemusicthingAnd thought about it more. I feel like I mostly agree. I'm rather unsure about going forwards, though. I want this to be 'for' someone, you know? There's also this feeling that the story-line is a piece of a larger, huge picture macro situation where different non-human cities and regions are existing in a planet doing their own thing. But I don't exactly know how to convey that.
And even though as a stand-alone story it rather has its own thing with characters that are just 'Non-human Creatures World', which makes sense since that's how it was originally conceived... well.. hmmm. I guess it's that it's not really 'Zootopia' in specific characters, it's something that has that mindset? It's hard to explain. I also still am wondering if you're interested in the Chapter 4, since in ending that is where it all got totally derailed in my mind.
http://pastebin.com/gGGVDDjPThanks anyways with everything.