>>22165616>>22168819I really haven't been getting anything like that empathy twinge you've been getting.
It's just an engaging story that happens to feature themes of disempowerment in one of it's principal characters.
If there were to be a story, one of those from the "fuck the neckhole" school of thought, I wouldn't feel bad from it.
I'd just think it was juvenile, and maybe a little gross if they go far enough.
If I'm going to get any bad feelings from a situation like this, it'd have to be written such that we see Dash honestly and faithfully trying to help and change the Anon, and the Anon arbitrarily punishing her without enough justification, essentially on trumped up charges.
There would need to be absolutely no element of stockholm syndrome in it. Just an honest attempt at making a connection being consistently refused. Any hint of that would bring in elements of improbable fetish-y wish fulfillment, and would be like poking a hole in a balloon filled with the last vestiges of a romantic's soul. It doesn't really matter how small the hole is, it's going to kill the impact of the story. All the while, the story would have to portray the Anon as a real, but flawed character rather than an edgelord monster. That's a really hard balance to hit.
Now, I like Broken Bluebird. It's an exploration of an idea mixed with characters developing off of each other mixed with wish fulfillment mixed with political plotting.
That's a fun mix, and it's been a hell of a ride so far.
But it isn't a tragedy.
There's too much focus on what's happening, and not enough on immersive characters.
If it makes sense: This story's characters are like wearing a costume, whereas the hypothetical story's characters are like that warm feeling after eating some really good soup that gets right to the core of you and spreads to your entire body.
It's a question of depth. There's already plenty of immersion in the other stories here.
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