Anonymous
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Threadly reminder that OneTripPony should at least post that weird RP chat story thing that he accidentally posted a part of on his Pastebin the other day.seriously onetripwe mis you
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>>5924604 >Parking >Writing >Gonna post a one shot soon Anonymous
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tripfags in Equestria
lovelymuffins !loveonoRT2
Parasite Steve !sFDTLPh/As
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Reposting this one more time because I'd like some critique before I post Layer 2.
http://pastebin.com/Be8g1Yfk Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI Wed 21 Nov 2012 06:55:15 No. 5924667 Report Quoted By:
Passing out after parking. Night aie.>Picture is i don't know I choose it at random
CYOA_AiE !!YnnDOwczQiW
>Day Estrus in Equestria >Be chilling with Rainbow Dash at the lake >”Anon, we’ve been pals a long time right?” She asks finishing the sandwich you made for her >”And neither of us have found a special somep0ny.” She continues >”So I was thinking….maybe…we could be…buck buddies.” >”You know, get together and rut like there’s no tomorrow. Just…just go crazy.” She strains >”Really?!” She says perking her ears up and with a huge smile >”No way.” She says getting up and turning around to present herself to you “I’m just dying for a good rut.” She says lifting her tail and seeing her contract her vaginal lips in and out >You know, after 3 years here, a mare is actually looking pretty damn good, taking off your clothing, you walk over to her and place your hands on her side. >She slowly backs up into you and pushes you back up onto a tree, rubbing her flank; she raises her tail even higher and to the side. >”Hurry up Anon, I can’t take it anymore.” She says impatiently as she walks forward to let you free >Getting back into the groove, you inch yourself closer to her and line your dick with her entrance. >Suddenly a hot steaming flow of juice and piss flies out of her vag and onto you. >”What? This is how ponies mate, is this your first time?” >Rainbow sighs “Yes its normal for mares in heat to OCASIONALLY expel out fluids like that. You should be good for now.” >Really getting a good look of her moist marehood twitch and open up, its getting you hard again,
Aether !!mw/7+Tvxn6g
So Living the Good Life wins. More to come tomorrow.
Kyonko802 !kiDsejwBiU
Parking, playing vidya, working on Gadget and Moose's request hybrid abomination thing.
Lulzies
God fuck dammit, new thread.
>>5923987 ~Page 4~
Top:
-Tsarroman: People asked me to put an ushanka on a Roman toga.
-Nignog: As himself
-AlbertReginald: Sir Reginald Von Bartlesby
-CYOA: A cape wearing Anon
-Serrated: A racer.
Middle:
-DJ Anon: A DJ.
-Scooter: A Scooter
-AussieAnon: Saxton Hale
-Rune: A Rune
-Factioneer: Was it the Lady of Pain? With a pone face.
Bottom:
-NoLongerAnon: Don Draper taking of a mask.
-RedHawk: The Ghost Recon emblem.
-Shade: Self-explanatory
-Azathoth: A massive hulking mass of tentacles, and a certain poon at the centre.
Rest of the AiE Pals:
>>5923396 >>5923717 >>5923758 >>5923987 CYOA_AiE !!YnnDOwczQiW
>>5924694 >Getting your face up close and personal, you gently take in her scent and are pleased to find it’s a kind of hay like smell, only more feminine and arousing. >Slowly licking her lips, she moans out a little “You like that? Well try this.” You say as you go in deep with your tongue and explore her large cavernous tunnel.
>Moving it around, you flick something hard and she tenses up with a loud moan “There, right there!” She cries “Do it again.” She begs as you happily find it again and give her the pleasure she seeks. >Tasting her juices and smelling her wonderful aroma, all is going well, and when she is about to reach her climax, she breaks wind right as you pull away to breath. >A long wet fart flaps about in your face as she accidentally spackles on your face, some of the thick bitter shit got into your mouth, and you retch at the disgusting flavor. This is really NOT your fetish. >Getting back up, you fumble around for your shirt and run to the lake. Scrubbing your face clean of the shit, you clean out your mouth as well and throw up a little. >”Anon, oh my gosh, I’m so sorry.” She says trying to comfort you but you smack her away “Rainbow, no I’m done with mares. Fuck that.” You say getting up and walking over to where you left your pants. Putting them on you walk away
>The next day, you join the gay master race, and fuck Braeburn all day every day. >Feels good man Happy 501st AiE thread here is to 500 more Also
New paste is new
http://pastebin.com/NFDmKVdE http://www.easypolls.net/poll.html?p=50ac602de4b007bdc40af3ab
Bizzles
Reporting in and feeling the LOVE Spitfire the bipolar-sexy-bitch celebrity, Daring Do and the Quest for the Sapphire Stone, or Rainbow Dash... Gonna start editing tomorrow
Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
>>5924563 I'd rarely gouge stories for errors, I only point out what feels off to me. I should make a better habit of point out spelling/grammar errors I catch, but the story itself is more important, in my eyes. You know, unless the story looks like a facebook conversation.
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>>5924766 Fuck, forgot about you, Bizzles. I'm sorry.
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI Wed 21 Nov 2012 07:05:18 No. 5924858 Report >>5924694 http://vocaroo.com/i/s1CFptMq5bJo I fucked up and didn't even finish. The ending may make you laugh..
>>5924698 I'm scared.
>>5924779 WIMP!
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>>5924858 It'll be adorable and heartwarming, trust me.
Anonymous
>>5924776 You have no idea how happy this makes me feel.
I AM feeling the LOVE The more daring do the better
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>>5924728 I look....
fucking awesome Thank you Lulzies, thank you very much. I need to repay you somehow.
>>5924763 Glad somebody liked it, well time for bed. Gonna check on what I missed in the morning.
>>5924862 Speaking of, what ever happened to that guy who was writing blue balled in Equestria? I like that guy and I lost his paste when my pc crashed. Also sorry guy, but I was reading up on some of the more non romantic things mares do in heat, and thought it would make for a funny one shot. Might do more of them later if I feel the urge again.
Also to any anons whol liked that Caramel Sundae story, I can guarantee you that the long version of the story is NOT what you are expecting.
>>5924908 Glad you like it
Dare-anon , it makes me happy knowing it makes
you and maybe 3 or 4 people happy.
Knowing this, im gonna tuck my Trixie abuse story away now...
>>5925057 sickenedbutcurious.jpg
>>5925127 >implying Trixie isn't a hardcore masochist >implying someone putting her in her place wouldn't turn her on like crazy Anonymous
>>5925255 Hmm. Do pones, even kinky pones, wear leather?
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>>5925274 I'm sure they have pleather. Their cows are sentient.
Navarone !lMadManZXI
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>>5925274 I would say no. I don't imagine leather would exist at all in a world where almost everything is sentient in some way, even if not capable of speech.
Anonymous
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501st-aniversery-dose. Remember Alligheiri!
>>5925274 That's what they make Latex for.
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP Wed 21 Nov 2012 07:29:27 No. 5925376 Report >>5925274 Yes, because there are still carnivores and pones are the strict plant eaters people like to think.
Leather is just too useful and versatile for it to NOT be used.
>>5925255 >implying Gadget's fetish isn't hatefucking >implying the next chapter of TotT won't feature Anon and Trixie getting into an argument and ravishing one another He told me this himself... well after I suggested it a long time ago. Do we even have a story in AiE that features Anon and a pony going at each other after a spat and just wearing one another out sexually ?
>>5925127 Witty Anon uses Trixie's ego against her, making her look like a fool.
May or may not be an AnonxTrixie... >>5925255 Maybe...
Hehe...
LOVE is weird sometimes.
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>>5925376 >AREN'T the strict plant eaters people like to think. Anonymous
>>5925379 There are some stories in Mandroid's pastebin of in which Anonymous, rendered immortal in a magical accident, then accidentally married to Celestia while drunk, has extremely hawt hatesex with Sunbutt Hoers, who is best hoers.
(captcha = "muntail horse," even captcha knows)
Anonymous
wiz anon has that with anonXrainbow
Anonymous
>>5925384 >Witty Anon uses Trixie's ego against her, making her look like a fool. I like
>>5925255 idea ALOT more,
Because i'm a horrible person.
Anonymous
Waiting for Shin to post that daring do thing
>>5925376 Have we seen anything but the cows talk?
In my stories I have it so pretty much everything else but cows is free game. Anything that talks is a no go.
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>>5924696 >>5921117 Did.. Anon just get Discorded, or whatever people call it when he turns people gray? shit appears to be goin down. moar
Anonymous
>>5925376 using products of egg, milk and wool =/= killing animals and having kinky sex in their dismembered skin
Anonymous
>>5925507 Donkeys and mules. Goats may have their own language.
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>5925376 As much as i love you Vhatug,
I rewatched the over the barrel episode.
Pinkie pie pretty much says pone are strictly vegetarian.
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>>5925583 >>5925602 Also buffalo, I just remembered.
That doesn't leave a lot to choose from, but you can get leather from other animals as well.
PonyGone !RAGT.LOVE.
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>>5925502 Alright.
I'll consider it >>5925503 YOU HAVE NO IDEA >Also Someone asked to see my pastebin/stories ive been working on
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>>5925457 I thought Celestia was actually into Mous in Flanking Maneuvers. There is that 10000th hit special or whatever I guess, although I'm not sure there was much arguing and such in that. I may have to re-read some of FM yet again to refresh my memory.
>>5925485 Ohhh I remember that, too bad he implied the steamy depravity with the end chapter, which the next chapter began after the fact. Not implying it was wrong or anything, but I'm in the mood for something like what I mentioned now with details.
Anonymous
>>5925628 This. It's canon, all that say otherwise are head-canon fools.
Anonymous
>>5925507 Well they might not speak but you've seen that all animals in MLP are intelligent enough that the idea of killing them for leather kinda leave a bad taste in my mouth.
Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
>>5925379 >Next chapter Boy howdy, I wish. I've contemplated several different situations where Anon and Trixie finally fuck
>implying it won't happen and most importantly, I want it to be at the right time. Kinky impromptu sex is pretty much something that can't happen next chapter.
And here comes the bad news...
There probably won't be hatesex in TotT. I'd love to include it, but with Vinyl's interference, Trixie and Anon won't even be boning for a while. Oooooh, but she gon' get jel'usss~
I may write a Trixie cloppy oneshot just so I have a solid footing when it happens in my main story. I want it to be good, man. i dotn just want u 2 cum on th eoutside...... i want u 3 cumm onthe insid
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP Wed 21 Nov 2012 07:45:55 No. 5925763 Report >>5925507 Lets see.
Ponies, cattle, buffalo, dragons, minotaurs, zebra, donkeys, river serpents, etc.
>>5925602 They have pigs and sheep, but neither ever talked.
The goats at least behaved in a way consistent with intelligence.
But Fluttershy also had a pet one, so maybe they're just smart animals that can be trained for complicated behavior, or there's multiple species.
>>5925572 Because actual horses will eat it.
And I'm speaking of the general use, such as the under parts of the armor they've always had.
>>5925628 She also claims hot dog contests, or maybe it's just for the song, or just the writers don't know much about equines in general.
>>5925696 >implying we don't bend canon all the time >implying the show doesn't change it as they see fit
>>5925710 I'm not saying the ponies kill them for leather or eat meat, that's retarded.
What I'm saying is that Anon won't be SOL on stuff like bacon or chicken.
And besides, like I said earlier, there's always pleather.
Anyways, back to writing for me.
>>5925763 >or just the writers don't know much about equines in general Or maybe it's a cartoon for little girls, and you're all looking too far into this.
Anonymous
>>5925763 >She also claims hot dog contests, or maybe it's just for the song, or just the writers don't know much about equines in general. Writers metioned that the hot dogs were vegi-dogs.
It's okay vhatug, all your other head-canon horsey stuff is still fine pls don't be mad,
They can still squash soup, no one has disproved that.
Anonymous
>>5925789 Even if you assume they don't eat meat, which they would because them becoming intelligent would edge them closer to omnivorism, not further, the idea that they don't use leather is straight stupid.
And the idea that they would freak is stupid too, because there's other meat eaters, they have meat eating pets, and there's no reason to believe they have a moral opinion on meat eating instead of just a biological one.
lovelymuffins !loveonoRT2
That picture lovelymuffins !loveonoRT2 Wed 21 Nov 2012 07:52:52 No. 5925891 Report Quoted By:
>>5925789 "Pinkie pie! quit throwing paper airplanes at Rarity"
"Fluttershy I said to keep your birds outside!"
"Vinyl take those headphones off!"
"Derpy... please clean up your mess thankyou."
>"Mr.Anonymous" Twilight waving her hoof in the air "Yes?"
>"Trixie is copying me!" "Trixie switch places with Gilda, Rarity don't throw that..."
>Rarity throws the paper airplane back at Pinkie pie >"But she threw it fiiiiirst" "I don't care stay after class now."
Anonymous
>>5925763 Sheep talked in Sisterhooves Social.
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP Wed 21 Nov 2012 07:55:34 No. 5925934 Report >>5925842 When the canon is retarded, I'm going to ignore it.
>>5925838 You realize where you are, yes?
>>5925902 >>5925924 My mistake, I thought it was the cattle because I hadn't watched that part in a while.
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
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It's greentext time!
Anonymous
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>>5925719 Eh, probably for the best.
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
Oh god why am I posting this I should be sleeping fuck CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb Wed 21 Nov 2012 07:57:10 No. 5925956 Report Apologies in advance for any holes in the story>You push through the bar door, the autumn chill nipping at your heels >It's ffffffriday night >muthafuckas >And you're going to celebrate the only way you know how >By getting rip-roaring drunk >And having a great time doing it
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>>5925934 >You realize where you are, yes? Indeed. That's why I said it. You are literally the only person who cares about any of this, and you're trying far too hard to justify it.
NoLongerAnon
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>>5924728 I fucking love ya man
no homo CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5925956 >You stomp right up to the bar and claim a stool >Right next to your best drinking buddy >er, p0ny >mare >Whatever >She's nursing a mug of cider Awww come on Derpy! You started without me
>"Whadaya expect me to do, Anon? I can't help it if you're always late!" >You laugh Fair enough
>Then you turn and grin at the bartender Barkeep, I'll have the usual
>The bartender smiles back at you >Your... rather special requirements are a significant part of what keeps him in business >He reaches under the bar and produces a mug >And a bottle of AppleJack's finest >AppleJack Daniels Anonymous
I don't know, maybe i'm a huge faggot and my xenophilia gives me huge wood when i think of a alien race that has survived and thrived on such a different diet/philosophy then us,
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5925974 >The first time you came to this place you tried that cider, yeah >Shit's weak, yo >Way too weak >Even this AppleJack Daniels is weak, compared to the real stuff back home >But that doesn't mean you can't still get drunk off it >So you yank the stopper out of the bottle >And pour yourself a glass So how's your week been, Derpy?
>"Ah, the usual. Work's is fun" >She brightens up >"And I only had one job related accident for the whole week!" Derpy, that's great!
>"I know, right!" >She takes a swallow of her drink >"What about you, huh? How's your week going?" Oh, you know. Work's a bitch, Lyra won't leave me alone...
>you take a slug of liquor The usual
Anonymous
>>5925719 I love how you talk so casually about the idea of Anon and Trixie having a triple X throwdown. Especially in a story which in the beginning didn't really hint or suggest that clop would be in it's future.
>i dotn just want u 2 cum on th eoutside...... i want u 3 cumm onthe insid You underestimate how much clop I've been subjected to by this fandom. I enjoy clop stories, but I've never actually "enjoyed" them. I really want to assume it's just about seeing kid's cartoon characters engaging in adult activities that have nothing to do with death and the like. It's like wanting to hear them swear or something I'm actually curious to see what happens when Gadget does clop. I am very amused right now. Don't push anything though, if you really want it to happen then it's something to put some careful planning into.
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5925992 >A few more mugs later, and you're well on your way to being toasted >Further into the bar, there's a commotion >Tables and chairs are shoved roughly back against the walls >And a platform is hustled out by strong earth p0nies >They pile speaker after speaker on the edges >Oh no >Then the speakers boom to life >"Allright everyp0ny, I wanna see some dancing right here, right now!" >Then the music kicks in >You look down at Derpy >Derpy looks back up at you >"Come on Anon! Let's dance!" >You sigh and grab your mug, swigging deeply >She grabs your hand with her hoof and drags you off towards the dance floor >You splutter and nearly spray AppleJack's finest everywhere >"Woah Anon, What's the matter?" I cashuwasa...
>"You what?" I kanaanpatata...
>She stops dragging you and flutters somewhat unsteadily up to eye level >"I can't hear you Anon, what were you saying?" I can't dance, okay?
Anonymous
>>5925978 You're not the only one, bromigo.
The idea of a nonhuman, sentient alien race is fascinating to me, utterly fascinating.
and not just because I want to have sex with them CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926004 >"So? I can't dance either! You think that's going to stop me from enjoying myself?" she shouts over the music >This friggen mare man >She's right >Either her upbeat, shining attitude is infectious >Or this booze is getting to you more than you realize >You finish off the last of your mug and set it on a convenient table >Either way, you're going to have a good time >You take Derpy by her front hooves and head off towards the dance floor You're right. Let's dance
>"Allright, that's what I like to hear!" CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926025 >You and Derpy hit the dance floor like a sledgehammer >Literally >You wouldn't be surpised if they find holes in the floor tomorrow morning >The music is of the fast paced, techy sort variety where any kind of dancing is acceptable >And your dancing fits the bill >Just barely >You and Derpy spin and pirouette, dart and dash through the crowd, pulling off wild moves that can only be done with a drunk human and a none-too-sober, adventurous pegasus
>Sometimes you lead >Sometimes she leads >And sometimes you're not quite sure what's happening >Well, most of the time, actually >You're drawing eyes everywhere >Good eyes, bad eyes >You don't care >You're moving with the music >and it feels good CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926039 >When your face is red and you find yourself panting, you release Derpy's hooves >And head back over to the bar >There are several dissapointed "Awwwww!"s from the table section of the restaurant >A panting Derpy follows in your wake, taking advantage of the path you clear through the crowd >"Boy Anon, you really know how to show a mare a good time" No I don't
>You say, pouring yourself a fresh mug from the bottle still on the bar >"What?" I have no idea what I just did
>"Well, whatever it was, I enjoyed it" >good for her >You raise your arm and wave down the bar Hey bartender, can I get a burger over here? I'm famished!
>The bartender makes his way down the bar >"Comin' right up" >Then he addresses Derpy >"Anything I can get for you, miss?" >She makes a show of bringing her hoof up to her chin >"mmmmmmm, I'll have the tofu burger" Kyonko802 !kiDsejwBiU
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>>5925851 >Implying I think they would freak out >Day Omnivore in Equestria >You miss bacon so much. >You've been here for months, and you've been getting almost unhealthily skinny. >You're sitting in Twilight's library over a salad she made for you. Twilight is sitting across from you with her own meal. >"Anon, have you been alright lately? You've been looking kind of pale." "Uh... I'm alright."
>"Anon, if something is bothering you, then you can tell me." >You let out a sigh. You really don't want to do this. "I don't think I've been getting enough nutrition."
>"What do you mean? You're on a normal diet." "I know, but I'm an omnivore."
>Shit, she looks shocked, you knew it. >Why did you open your big mouth. >"Anon, why didn't you say so? I've been worried about you." >Well now you just feel silly. >Today was a good day. CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926047 >One burger and a few more mugs later, and you're definitely feeling the buzz >And from the rosy red shade of Derpy's cheeks, so is she >You struggle temporarily for a conversation topic So, how was your burger?
>"Tasty, same as always" Good, good...
>Christ, this feels like a date >The speakers saves you the trouble of searching for further conversation topics >The music stops, then the mic experiences some ear-rending feedback >Then a mare's voice comes up >"You all know what time it is?" >"NO!" Responds the crowd >"IT'S KARIOKI TIME!" >The crowd issues general roar of approval >Derpy flaps her wings and gets up off her stool Where ya goin'?
>"I'm gonna sing! Well good luck to ya then
>She flaps her wings and rockets off in the general direction of the stage Hazardus_Havard
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Late night parking, gonna try and write some stuff in the following Turkey Day festivities to follow.
Not sure how my one shot last chapter did. Regret a little doing it, only a little.
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http://pastebin.com/u/Hazardus_Havard >>5925978 That image inspires me to type more now, not like I needed sleep.
>>5926021 It really just does make more sense that a race of sentient herbivores would have evolved beyond whatever sporadic carnivorous instincts they might have once possesed. At best, I can imagine them importing leather, or making some out of animals that died of natural causes, but really, this argument is neither here nor there, as it is usually up to the authors discretion as to what the nature of such equines might be
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
Fuck spellcheck edition CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb Wed 21 Nov 2012 08:04:21 No. 5926104 Report >>5926065 >One rather bubbly rendition of "Poison" later, and Derpy wobbles her way back over the crowd >She lands rather hard a few feet away from the barstool, and walks the rest of the distance Ya did good!
>"You really think so?" Hell yeah! look out Fleur, here comes Derpy!
>She resumes her position at the barstool >"Heh, thanks Anon. You should get up there" Y'know what? I think I will
>You get up off your own stool and head for the stage Wish me luck
>"Knock'em dead Anon!" thanks
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926104 >By the time you get to the stage, a few singers of wildly varying quality have passed >You head have a quick conversation with the mare running the techincal booth >Then you head up onto the stage >The crowd quickly quietens at the sight of such a strange creature as it picks up the microphone >"Wasn't he that dancing stallion from earlier?" >"I heard he's from another planet!" Alright mares and gentlestallions
>The crowd quietens even further I appreciate this new techno stuff, I really do
>You smile But sometimes, you just gotta get back to your roots
>You raise your arm SO ARE YOU READY TO MAKE SOME NOISE?
>"YEAH!" ALL RIGHT
>you wave at the mare, who starts the song http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oVo8g7T39A4 CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926119 >The crowd is eating the song right up >Great >You sweep your eyes over it as you sing and gesture >And a smaller knot at the back catches your eye >You resolve to keep an eye on it >A smaller p0ny is in the middle of a semicircle of larger p0nies >He looks cornered >You'll speak up if he's reall- >OH FUCK >To your mounting horror, the p0ny seizes a metal folding chair >The only one in the bar >And heaves it towards the stage >The entire everything stops with the sound of a skipping record as it sails through the air in seeming slow motion >Then it lands, with the squeaky CLANG of doom >All is silent for a microsecond >Then IT BEGINS >"I'm mad!" shouts a particularly angry stallion >then somep0ny throws a punch >And the entire crowd turns into a roiling bar fight CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926130 >You would love to join in on this bar fight >The urge is almost overwhelming >But you've already used up all your barfight-related injury downtime for the month >You can't afford to get hurt too badly >You're about to make for the door when you remember your drinking buddy >Potential injury or not, you're not leaving Derpy behind >You use your temporarily safe, elevated island in the brawl to peer out to the actual bar itself >Derpy's desperately avoiding the advances of a stallion who looks even drunker than you >She's too drunk to fly >Damnit >You're going to regret this CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926145 >You plunge off the stage and into the roiling melee >In hindsight, a song about fighting probably wasn't the best one to sing >Oh well >The fighting's not too bad at the moment >It's still gearing up >So you reach the bar with minimal damage >The bartender scoots through the door to the back pushing a cart with the last of the booze, save your bottle on the bar >He kicks it shut behind him and you hear a wooden plank drop across the inside >Shit >That route's closed >Turning your attention to Derpy, you see the stallion almost has her >Not on your watch >You exicute a masterful flying butterfly kick on his ass >No >Not really >You do a running jump kick and knock him over, true >But you also land on your ass >Fuck >That's going to bruise CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926157 >Oh well, no time for that >You spring to your feet as quickly as your body will allow We're getting out of here
>Then you seize Derpy under your arm like an oversized football >In your other hand you take the bottle from the bar >You paid for that shit, you're going to finish it >First you take a nice pull straight from the bottle >Then you take off in a footballer's sprint for the door >You dodge >you feint >you jump >you punt >And eventually, through some minor miracle, you reach and make use of the door without major injury to yourself or your passenger Anonymous
>>5926088 For purposes of a thread like this, most nearly any position or possibility can be used to tell a good story, and in my opinion that's more important than trying to make everyone's headcanon consistent.
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926169 >When you're a safe distance from the bar, you stop and set Derpy down >She wobbles for a moment, then sits down on her haunches >"Tha wash one hell of a fight! How'd it get schtarted?" >Damn, she must have had a lot more than you thought while you were up on the stage Metal folding chair
>"Ah. That trick never failsh." >There's a brief pause, which you utilize to take another pull from the bottle >"Well, I'll shee you around, Anon" >She gets up more than a little unsteadily and flaps her wings Wait
>She stops >"Whasha matter?" You're in no condition to be flying, you can hardly walk
>The walleyed mare snorts >"You're not much better yourshelf" Yeah, but I don't live in the clouds, now do I?
>"nooo...." Come on, you can stay at my place tonight
>"Thanksh Anon" CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5926185 >Your assumption proves to be true, as half way back to your house Derpy wobbles, then almost falls over >You consider the bottle in your hand >Eh >It's empty anway >You pitch it off into the woods and pick her up >"Woah!" Chill, I got you
>"I wash getting tired anyway..." >You give a mental shrug and continue your journey >She's surprisingly light >Must have something to do with flying all the time >A few minutes later, and you're at your house >You stumble through the front door and place Derpy on the couch >Then you sit down next to her in companionable silence >You'd get up and go to your own room >But you're really tired at the moment >So you choose to remain on the couch next to Derpy >"Anon, I like you" >Christ, that was straight out of the clear blue sky Well sure Derpy, I like you too
>"You're one of the only p0nehs... people... whatever. You treat me like a real p0neh. You don't look at me funny becaush of my eyesh"
>Derpy shifts over and leans up against your left side, resting her head on your shoulder >"Anon, I LIKE like you You like like me...
>"Yeah. I do" >Oh >Well this is an interesting development >One you're having trouble caring too much about at the moment >You're just so tired >And warm, with Derpy practically laying on you >You could fall asleep right here... >A light snore to your left tells you this is exactly what Derpy has done >And you don't see any reason why you shouldn't get to as well... Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
>>5925998 >I love how you talk so casually about the idea of Anon and Trixie having a triple X throwdown. Especially in a story which in the beginning didn't really hint or suggest that clop would be in it's future. It doesn't feel like that because we're not very close to that moment. There will be a bit of a lead up, don't worry. And I've been talked into
and let's face it, I kinda want to writing this Trixie clop through peer pressure. When I first started writing, I thought I would never write clop. Yeah, well... I've written it three times now, and it's actually pretty fun. The best part about it is that several people get a particular type of enjoyment out of clop which leaves them feeling awesome. Why wouldn't I want to help these people feel awesome? No reason unless I conjure mental images.
>You underestimate how much clop I've been subjected to by this fandom. I enjoy clop stories, but I've never actually "enjoyed" them. I'm totally overestimating how good this scene is going to be. I'll just be somewhat proud of the lead up to it, and hopefully the execution.
>I'm actually curious to see what happens when Gadget does clop. I am very amused right now. Don't push anything though, if you really want it to happen then it's something to put some careful planning into. As I mentioned, I've done clop before. They're labelled on my pastebin, if you're interested.
http://pastebin.com/u/gadget And as I said, sex is cool and all, but misplaced, forced sex isn't good for the quality of a story. I'm no [insert famous talented writer here] but I want my stories, Trix of the Trade in particular, to have some semblance of quality through careful planning.
words words words
>>5926182 Exactly, so it's alright to have that viewpoint if it fits the bill for your story, but, even if you're Vhatug, don't try making everyone else accept it as well
CuriousAnon !!ll4qB/4+apb
>>5925956 >>5925974 >>5925992 >>5926004 >>5926025 >>5926039 >>5926047 >>5926065 >>5926104 >>5926119 >>5926130 >>5926145 >>5926157 >>5926169 >>5926185 >>5926232 I really need to figure out how to write shorter oneshots.
Anyway, that's the request from last thread
Derpy and Anon hit the bar scene
Please direct all burning hatred and/or constructive criticism to this post
thanks
Anonymous
>>5924604 I don't really go into these threads very often, but I love the comics. Is there somewhere where I can view them all?
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP
Sir Vhatug Esq III of Marehood Manor !!KiZRDoWmVOP Wed 21 Nov 2012 08:15:51 No. 5926338 Report >>5926273 I'm not, I was under the impression we were having a discussion on which is actually more realistic.
I'm absolutely not saying either won't work or that it makes a story bad.
Wiz-anon
>looked forward to thread 500 >wanted it to be my big comeback >sleep through it
Anonymous
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>>5926362 there is always 1000
>>5926362 It's okay Wiz. Post your stuff anyways.
Wiz-anon
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>>5926391 Problem is I can't get a proper internet connection on my computer so I can't post my stuff right now.
I'm on my phone if you were wondering.
NoLongerAnon
>>5926338 Then stop "Correcting" people whenever they say something about the nature of a pony
Seriously man, you're the only one that cares so damn much
Anonymous
>>5926338 >>5926430 stahp arguing
stahp it
and write us more clop, preferably with squash soup and winking
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>>5924728 The ESPN logo was an excellent choice. I'm going to use it everywhere now.
Anonymous
>>5924604 is there an AiE story this comic is based on?
i don't usually stop by AiE threads, but OP caught my eye.
>>5926430 Let me look that back over.
>Someone asks a question about their nature. >A few people give their opinions, mine among them. >People directly respond to me, I respond back. >Holy shit, I'm going out of my way to correct people not talking to me. I see things against my views all the time, if it's not talking to or about me, I almost always ignore it.
pls pay attention. Now, enough /soc/ before we use up too many of our precious finite posts.
>>5926521 I intend to man. Just gotta get some inspiration.
Will write a hoers when they premier.
NoLongerAnon
>>5926564 That's exactly it though. you've ALWAYS given your views, and at this point I don't have to remind how few people actually side with you on that. You state it as facts, and that's great, ponies are opportunistic carnivores, doesn't that it has to be that way in Equestria, you should know better than that
>>5926548 This gentleman raises a good point. Has there been a story?
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>>5926606 Umm.
>>5925274 The guy was ASKING for opinions.
Just saiyan
Who was it that was writing that fic where Anon was watching over Silver spoon and she was trying to learn about his world? I haven't seen it in a while.>No Silver pics so have a cool Gilda.
>>5926564 Hey Vhatug, could you do a one shot where your Anon magics up some happy meals to feed his herd and it gives them all horrible stomach problems.
Navarone !lMadManZXI
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>>5926548 >>5926637 http://pastebin.com/0nwQP3mB I know there were more, but only MD's comes to mind right now.
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>>5926663 >Day roach meat in Equestria. >You summon happy meals. >Everyone eats, but claim it tastes strange. >That night, a battle for the ages takes place for control of the bathroom. >Lesson learned, never eat McDonald's when Burger King is clearly superior. NoLongerAnon
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>>5926652 It could be CYOA, his is the first that comes to mind
Hazardus_Havard
>>5926606 ---
http://horsetalk.co.nz/2012/04/17/horses-as-meat-eating-killers/#.UKyS7oZNGtw ---
Interesting article on horses....eating meat.
Just thought I'd share this here.
Anonymous
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>>5926802 >http://horsetalk.co.nz/2012/04/17/horses-as-meat-eating-killers/#.UKyS7oZNGtw >not leaving the url on one line without all that other shit on it so i can't triple-click fuck you.
NoLongerAnon
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>>5926802 That's great, I don't give a fuck
Fetish Anon
Man I missed 500? That sucks... I was going to post my thread 500 Fetish request too...
Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
>>5926548 >>5926335 There are several artists who draw scenarios like this, some don't even go to AiE. This particular artist is KKaizer, who is actually one of our writers. He was SUPPOSED to be updating today but he fell asleep.
But seriously, poke and prod him enough, he'll do r34.
He ever said he would make a sequel to the OP image if someone requested it, besides me. Jerk. Anonymous
>>5926837 >consensual rape
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>>5926871 Somebody doesn't read Azathoth.
Thunder !THuNDEReLg
Fuck, did I miss thread 500 in my sleep?
NoLongerAnon
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>>5926868 Kkaizer did that? that isn't half bad
>>5926899 Dubs confirm man, you were asleep and thread 500 passed you by...
>>5926868 Hey KKaizer can you do a sequel to the OP image pls?
Kyonko802 !kiDsejwBiU
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Update so far. Didn't get any Sherlock Sparkle done today, sorry guys. It'll be worth the wait, trust me. Fatanon 13 is about halfway done.
lovelymuffins !loveonoRT2
>>5926837 >chant "Rape" instead of "Fun" I don't know why but I could just see Anonymous walking in all the pinkies turning around, looking at him then back at themselves and start chanting and walking slowly toward him.
Anonymous
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>>5927153 well, pinkie has to find out all the different kinds of fun she can have with anon's body.
those little fingers can go just about anywhere.
Thunder !THuNDEReLg
>>5926290 That was nice. I really enjoyed reading that. I find that far to often these stories are about "Anon the Marine/Theif/Werewolf/Wizard/ So on an so forth" and It's refreshing to read a story that is more about a normal anon, just having a slice of life situation were things don't get "Epic" all the god damn time.
All in all, even though I jumped in after a couple of posts I was able to understand the plot and enjoy it for it's simplistic nature.
This is also an open letter to all writers; If I could make a request it would be that there are more slice of life stories rather than epics. Also cut the romantic shit out as well, it's good for a few stories, although not everything needs a love interest.
That is all.
Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
You guys ready for the new OC pony on Saturday's premiere?
Anonymous
>>5927234 That episode doesn't air this week.
Anonymous
>>5926338 your headcanon doesnt mean shit. They're magic talking horses. MAGIC. THEY CAN DO SHIT WITH MAGIC. They more than liikely have made a substitute for leather.
Kornheiser !IYsWILbonQ
>>5927258 Still on this?
Yours doesn't mean shit either.
You seem kinda angry man.
Anonymous
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>>5927370 Sadly, it's
FUCK YOU I AM COMPLETELY CALM YOU STUPID LITTLE INSIGNIFICANT WORM I WILL DESTROY YOU *deep breath*
YOU WILL RUE THE DAY YOU MESSED WITH ME YOU LITTLE NECK BEARDED BASEMENT DWELLING SCUM So, yeah. That's kind of the gist of it.
Wiz-anon
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>>5927190 HERESY!!!
EVERYTHING NEEDS A LOVE INTEREST!
AND EPIC IS COOL!
(I secretly respect your opinion.)
Factioneer !tC66Aq26YA
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>>5924728 Dude that was a pretty fucking good effort on my request. Thanks.
Anonymous
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>>5926268 >Writes clop to make us feel awesome >Have already felt awesome to Rapeity 5 times If only we could cuddle afterwards.
SitOnBooks !ClURAye4xU
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4 hours sleep. How despicable. Guess I better write something then. Claw in Hand, Dota 2 shorts, the Hoity Toity thing, Undead Anon...where does the time go?
>>5923717 Love it. Dats now my pastebin avatar.
Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
God fuck damnit. I have like 5 half-finished updates/new stories/one-shots and I can't seem to get anything finished. Now 500 has come and gone and I'm STILL not ready to post any actual story. Any tips on how to crank this shit out? I know WHAT I want to write, I just can't sit down and WRITE it. I'll check back tomorrow I guess, I'm tired now and need my beauty sleep.
Anonymous
>>5928096 Listen to some music before writing. Good music. Always clears my head when I'm about to work on something.
>>5928096 Three things help me out sometimes. Jogging, drinking, reading a good book.
a real book, one of those archaic things made of paper and glue Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI Wed 21 Nov 2012 11:55:59 No. 5928800 Report Quoted By:
Ugh... Well I'm awake. I had a trippy balls ass dream that I might turn into a Transformation story. I also had an idea for a twist on an applerape story. I'm not sure if it's been dun so... Yeah. Imma get on that.Ever since I joined AiE my sleeping scheduled has been getting worse. Now I can't even get more than 3-4 hours of sleep. I need help
Anonymous
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>>5928096 >Dota 2 The King of Bones is pleased.
SitOnBooks !ClURAye4xU
>>5928096 Just for you
>You are Skeleton King >Canterlot is impressive, despite its lack of bone architecture. >Truly royalty lives within these walls, which means you are more than welcome here. >As you swagger down the streets, a couple of ponies halt your progress. >The stiffly ask who you are. "I am the King of Bones! Mighty ruler of the Empire of Bones!"
>With an aloof look, one of the ponies dares to tell you that you cannot be a King of an Empire. >You give him a short stare with your burning eye sockets before planting your armored foot firmly in his face. >As he crumples, you saunter on. "Good day peasants."
>>5924858 >http://vocaroo.com/i/s1CFptMq5bJo >I fucked up and didn't even finish. The ending may make you laugh.. >Wake up early in the morning >Feeling down cause of real world problems >Check on /mlp/ before I go to work >See link >Mfw Thank you for posting this, it really brightened my otherwise bleak day.
Lulzies
>>5927234 Good gracious what on earth is that monstrosity, Inspector Gadget?
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>>5928999 Tis no problem my good man, Nice trips and the what not.
I don't even remember what I said in there.
>>5929035 I think its in an episode called "Bad Apple" and its about Apple Blooms cousin who comes down and starts shit. If she teams up with the two most insufferable fillies, then it will make for an interesting episode.
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI Wed 21 Nov 2012 12:27:17 No. 5929080 Report Quoted By:
>>5927234 That thing should have been run by the OCG first. dear god.
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI
Spoiler Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI Wed 21 Nov 2012 12:33:46 No. 5929132 Report Okay, see this?\/ Yeah. That's a story. You want it? Look at it. You want to wait until I'm done with it all? Then do so. This is a moose version of
Applerape.It 's using my logic, and my reasoning to death with repeated rape attempts.
>Day: Applerapist hasn't been done in here for a LONG TIME.>Rainbow Dash is out of town for a while, and can't help if AJ decides to try and go to town on you. >But you had a plan. >One that you had to remove all your morals for. >You're going to rape the rapist. Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI Wed 21 Nov 2012 12:34:58 No. 5929145 Report Quoted By:
>>5929132 >and my reasoning to death with repeated rape attempts. and my reasoning to DEAL
Fucking sleep deprivation.
lovelymuffins !loveonoRT2
>>5929132 >Rape the rapist. I....what
>>5929182 Shhhh It's a secret. wink. Sexy pose. Anonymous
>>5929068 >CMC episode confirmed for shit episode. Only filly worth mentioning is filly twilight. Wouldn't mind watching an episode of her filly life in canterlot, including the ones where she got molested by celestia
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>>5929225 Confirmed for faggot.
pls go
>>5929225 >filly twilight >not filly dash or filly pinkie
>>5929270 >>5929225 No filly Applejack?
What's it feel like to be casual tier?
Anonymous
>>5924604 Dear sirs, I am new to ponyland. I seem to like this comic very much, however. Any of you got more?
MD !Tm27jGxpYk
>>5929283 Anonymous/DT or that comic in particular?
If the former... I've got some stuff.
>>5929281 Yeah I sure do like running away from home and my family to go live in a big city.
>>5929303 Where is buttbug loving?
Anonymous
>>5929303 Well, Anonymous/DT and that comic too. Please, can you post some?
>>5929309 Applejack was Icarus, she aimed for the sun, but was brought down for trying to aim to high.
But she actually did become fancy high society, but her love of the country brought her back. And we all love her very much.
>>5929321 Didn't he finish it already?
>Last time I read it Anon and the changeling both stayed in the hive. Anonymous
>>5929283 Think that might be a one image comic, but there's a bit of human in pone land images around.
Stick around AiE friend, we'll take care of you.
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>>5929341 I though he was going to continue it after that point?
Still can't believe one day I just went, "This is really hot now for some reason."
MD !Tm27jGxpYk
>>5929321 It's over unless I add an epilogue.
And really there's no need - they live happily ever after,
and Anonymous fucks all the changeling boys in the Hive as usual.
Speaking of which, I found this recently >>5929337 http://pastebin.com/0nwQP3mB If you like loli femdom and facesitting, check this out.
MD !Tm27jGxpYk
>>5929370 It'd be two thousand words of
hot sex Do ya want it?
Newfag
>>5929356 I'd prefer images, sir.
>>5929342 Sorry for my newfaggotry, what is AiE?
>>5929381 Do I want two thousand words of hot changeling cumdumpster action.
How is that even a question.
writeitwriteitwriteit Anonymous
>>5929382 Anon in Equestria.
Where you are right now.
It's /mlp/'s resident fanfiction community;
everyone here is a writer.
If you wanted comics, you'll have to look elsewhere.
Newfag
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>>5929397 I see. Very well, thank you. Have a good day.
Anonymous
Lulzies
>>5929281 >Applejack I suppose peasants just have to bunch with peasants. Come, other Anonymous, let us enjoy wine and laugh at the servants licking our boots and then go for a pedi.
Anonymous
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>>5929409 So when are you gonna finish her story, huh? You can't just leave Fleur hanging.
Especially not without her hard-earned dicking. MD !Tm27jGxpYk
>>5929393 >>5929405 Jesus H. Christ you people are weird
Okay, fine.
What I'll do is this - Anon and his changeling boyfriend's first night together,
and then... hmm, oh, oh yes, that would be swell...
Prepare your bodies, bug-lovers
>>5929281 >>5929281 >>5929225 >Talking about best filly. >Everyone leaves out best filly. Filthy casuals.
>pic related.
>>5929450 >Jesus H. Christ you people are weird Don't lie, you love it too.
>>5929486 Hot pony dick? Well, duh. But I write for myself.
Hive's persistent popularity is confounding.
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>>5929488 http://vocaroo.com/i/s1XL3US4zaWE I narrate images when I'm bored and stuck on a story.... So yeah.
Sure is fucking stories in here.
lovelymuffins !loveonoRT2
Anonymous
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ok, twilight wishes on a star for her special somep0ny
Anonymous
>>5924604 Where can I find more pictures like the op?
Anonymous
>>5930166 /r/, one of the comic threads on /mlp/ make a new thread and ask. Plenty of ways.
Anonymous
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>>5926868 So is there a story about Nightmare Moon's delicious flank?
Anonymous
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>>5930242 That specific comic can't be found through an image search.
Anonymous
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Can we have more AiE comics, pls?
So I'm picking up Anonymous and Filly trouble again. I have removed Chapter three from my paste bin because it was going in a direction I didn't want. But here is chapter one and two for those interested in Anonymous and filly mane 6 fun.
I am currently working on Chapter 3 now.
http://pastebin.com/4xyGDgHM 1
http://pastebin.com/APFFqJ3G 2
What the fuck is with all you retards.
>>5930411 I dunno, you tell us.
>>5930411 Lack of stories.
Anonymous
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Aanon
Anonymous
>>5930433 >>5930429 Not you guys, the fucking spazzes that can't search the thread for these posts:
Anonymous
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>>5930468 Why the fuck arent the posts showing up....
Anonymous
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>>5929397 >>5926868 These posts. Fucking 4chan.
Anonymous
As long as we're on the topic of images used in AiE threads, does anyone have that Neckbeard in Horseland picture?
>>5930536 I actually think that Kkaizer drew that one as well
If it wasn't him then my only other guess is Atlas
Anonymous
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>>5930536 I may have it in my folder somewhere, But I don't want to sift through thousands of unsorted pics...
Anonymous
Kyonko802 !kiDsejwBiU
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>>5930536 Good morning AiE. I'll try to get some work done since I woke up so early.
Anonymous
Who wrote the story where anon joins the diamond dog community and he plays music and cooks for them?
Anonymous
Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
>>5929342 I've got a ton of these laying around. I'll make an album or something after I get off work today.
Then there won't even be an excuse to have non-AiE related OP pics.
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>>5931174 Compile them all for download pls.
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So, as my lack of having posted during 500 suggests, my writing stalled out before I got my update finished. Gonna see if I can pick it back up.
>>5931174 Well, that pic just gave me a story idea. Backlog.
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Been stuck in airport purgatory since yesterday evening. Still haven't even boarded. Fuck, should have fucking landed 10 hours ago. Anyways,
>>5924554 Can ah get an amen-ah?!
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>5931595 HAH-LE-LOU-JAH!!
>>>5931827 Yo, guys, jffry's drawfagging, in case any of you are interested in reque sting things to annoy him.
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>>5931955 How did I fuck spoilers up THAT bad?
Azathoth !!47UJ0bBusVR
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>>5924728 >Me >Giant Mass of Tentacles with a vagina in the middle Amazing.
>>5931955 How about we not try to troll him? I really don't think there's any more humor to be gained, just drama and rage.
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
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>>5931305 Normally I have trouble finding fucks to give about Lyra, but that picture... unf.
Anyway, compretery missed thread 500, hammering out something to fit into 501.
Parkanwritandrinkanpostanbailanhaloplayan
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>>5932048 This. He'll just shit up the thread if we bug him.
An Irish Nomad !W4S24SXwCA
>>5931174 Please do, I felt bad for not not posting an AiE related thing for thread 500.
All three of my anon images came up as duplicate errors though. Anonymous
should ponies know what suicide is?
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>>5932157 We know you've got other shit to worry about for a while, it's no big.
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>>5932231 It's your story. Write it how you want.
>>5932231 I don't see why not? They aren't a utopia with no pain or suffering after all.
Anonymous
>>5932272 that is true, but looking at how the show makes it look, its not exactly a place of immense pain and suffering either, at least with what the show has shown, there is no reason to off yourself there... sure accidents where you off yourself like falling in the bathroom probably happen every now and than, but going out of your way to do it... i mean without changing the equestria world would it be a term they know?
>>5932333 It doesn't need to be grimderp. My Sherlock Sparkle has murder and it still manages to be pretty saccharine.
Anonymous
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>>5932378 ok, ill have to give it some more thought, i have to wonder how much anon will need to explain, i could make it easy, i could make them have no idea what either word or term mean...
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
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>>5932231 Hmmm... good question. I can see Celestia having a framework in place for state authorized euthanasia in cases of terminal illness. She seems like she'd understand.
Anonymous
>>5926290 more derpy does not get enough love
i liked the missed spelled words
it made it more convincing that they both were wasted
Anonymous
Anonymous
Wiz-anon
It looks like no-one else is going to post anything, so how about a story?
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>>5932999 Yes please. Nothing I have is ready.
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI
Anone Moose:Lord of the Tutu Brawlers !anonJ5wIzI Wed 21 Nov 2012 18:23:01 No. 5933062 Report Quoted By:
>>5932999 do it. I need sleep. again.
Wiz-anon
>>5932999 >”Anon.” >Not now, Roseluck. >”Anon, wake up.” >You swear to Luna, you will fucking kill her if you don’t get your beauty sleep. >Not that you need it or anything. >”Anonymous, you’re going to be late for work.” >You jump out of the bed. “It’s not Saturday?!”
>”It is, but you seriously needed to get out of bed.” >Fuck you, Roseluck. >Fuck you. “What is it then?”
>”Well.” She pauses and looks away for a moment as if she is trying to find the right words. “Today is your five year anniversary in Equestria.” >Like you’d forget. >If it was up to you, you’d stay inside all day and cry instead of having to go outside with the risk of meeting Pinkie Pie. >Not that you don’t like her, oh wait that’s it, you don’t like her. “And?”
>”And I thought the two of us should head into town tonight, it’s been far too long since we’ve last had a drink together at the bar.” >Yeah. >It’s been a while since you last got hammered with your roommate. “Okay.” You say as you put on some pants. “I have to do a few things first; I’ll catch up with you later.”
>You place your hand on her head and ruffle her mane. >After eating breakfast you give Roseluck a hug and head out. >You walk towards the outskirts of the everfree forest thinking about life and stuff. >Fucking existential crisis. >You’ve been here for five years now and you have done absolutely nothing productive. >You can’t do what you did on earth. >You spent most of your youth studying to become a scientist. >But normal laws of physics don’t work in Equestria. >You’ve been writing p0nified fairy tales from Earth for four years now. Wiz-anon
>>5933095 >As you reach the small clearing were you originally materialized you sit down on a log and think back. >You can still feel the same chilling atmosphere here as you could when you travelled between dimensions. >The p0nies were completely terrified of you. >Well, except for Roseluck. >Lyra was the second p0ny to accept you, but her ‘acceptance’ is more of a sick fascination than an actual acceptance into her society. >Twilight Sparkle wanted to cut you up to get a good look inside of the hairless primate. >You had to write a small book and repaint the Vitruvian Man just to shut her up. >Not that you have the same painting skills as Leonardo da Vinci but you made do with what you have. >When the mayor gave you permission to build your own house and work in P0nyville the rest of the p0nies followed and slowly got a liking to you. >Most of them still don’t trust you, but that’s okay. >Roseluck moved in with you when you finished your house. >A lot of p0nies think you are a couple but it’s not like that. >You are more like close friends. >She is the best friend you ever had. >You sigh as you look out on the beautiful clearing. >If it wasn’t because of the sinister aura radiating from the place it would be perfect for a picnic. >Normally you don’t like being here and frankly you have no idea why you still come here. >It’s probably because of the sentimental value of the place and the fact that nop0ny ever comes here so you have all the peace and quiet you could ever want. >Today though, there is something off about the place. >More than usual you mean. Wiz-anon
>>5933122 >You feel like you are being watched by something. >Something dark and uncomfortable. >The longer you stay in the clearing the stronger the feeling of being watched gets. >You slowly turn your head around to see if you can spot whoever it is that is watching you. >You don’t want to make rapid movements as you don’t want to look scared if it is another prank played on you by the local p0nies. >Sometimes those pranks can get a bit annoying. >There is nothing behind you. >It is only now that you notice the complete lack of sounds. >You can only hear your own breath. >No singing birds, no small critters going about their daily routine, not even the rustling of the leaves in the trees. >Completely quiet. >As if you’ve gone deaf. >You get up and walk away. >The feeling of being watched becomes stronger as you leave the place so you pick up the pace. >The paranoia becomes ever stronger the further you get away from the place. >You’re running now. >You stop and turn around but see nothing. >Whatever it is that is following you it quick. >You are getting odd looks from the nearby p0nies. >”Ummm, excuse me Mister Anonymous, is something wrong, you look really scared?” >Awww. >It’s one of those little foals Cheerilee teaches at her school. >You look around. >Whatever it is you can’t seem to spot it. “No, it’s nothing.” You say with a smile.
>You know it’s not true but whatever is following you seems to have stopped when you were approached by the foal. >You jog home, still unsure about your paranoia. >You try to calm yourself down on the way. >You are not easily frightened but that chilling sense of being watched really freaked you out for some reason. Wiz-anon
>>5933133 >You open the door to your house and bust in. >You slam the door behind you. >”Aahn~” >Your eyes go wide as your see Roseluck in your couch with a dildo far up her privates. >From the look on her face you can see she is climaxing. >She is shaking all over and her face is a shade of red you didn’t know existed. >With a little “nope” you turn around and go to your room. >This day just keeps getting better. >That is the fourth time this month you walked in on her masturbating. >What freaks you out is that she didn’t stop when you entered. >She was probably so worked up she couldn’t stop. >But still. >Ewww. >The worst thing about the whole ordeal is that her dildo is roughly the same size as your dick. >You don’t know if it’s on purpose or if it purely coincidental. >Frankly, you don’t want to know. >Well at least you are more freaked out now than you are scared. >This is why Roseluck is your room-mate, she always knows what helps on your problems. >Even when she doesn’t. >Helping may be giving her a bit too much credit but at least your mind is taken off the freaky experience you had earlier. >You’ve taken a liking to p0nies over the years but you are not masturbating to the thought of your room-mate. >THAT MEANS STAY DOWN BONER! >Confine these p0nies for they drive you crazy. >And sometimes horny. >The door to your room opens. >”Sorry about that, Anon.” Roseluck says as she knocks slowly a few times. “I thought you’d be gone for a little longer.” “It’s alright.” You say with a smile. ”We’re still going out tonight, right?”
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>>5933147 >The bar is not as filled as it usually is. >Not that it matters, the two of you are having fun. >You haven’t told Roseluck about what happened earlier today. >You don’t want her to get worried. >Still, you can’t help but feel you should tell her. >For reasons you don’t quite understand she knows a lot about supernatural things. >You order two new glasses of hard cider. >”You know, Anon.” Roseluck says as she picks up the glass. “I’m really glad you came to Equestria.” >You already knew that, but it’s nice of her to say it anyway. “I’m glad I came here as well.”
>You both now that isn’t true. >You left your life behind on Earth and had to start from scratch here. >But… that was actually whole-hearted. >You really are glad you came to Equestria. >At least right now. >”How come you’re always complaining about your life here then?” >Because you’d normally rather go back to Earth. “Does it annoy you?” You say in a rather playful tone.
>Roseluck takes a sip of her glass. >”A bit.” >You take her hoof into your hand and look her straight in the eyes. “Hey, if I had the opportunity to go back to Earth or stay here… I’d pick Equestria, you know that.”
>Even you don’t know if you are lying or telling the truth. >You are really fucking conflicted right now. >”Why? You had so much in your own world, a life, a special some-human and a very important job. Why would you possibly pick Equestria over Earth?” >She looks away. “Well, because of you…”
>Then you realize what you just said. >Roseluck’s head creeps closer to yours. >She has closed eyes. >You don’t know if you love her but why not give her a try? Wiz-anon
>>5933161 >Just as you are about to kiss the door to the bar swings open and four large guard p0nies enter the bar. >”Anonymous the human, we need you to come with us.” >So. >Close. >You and Roseluck are both beet red in the face. “Why is that?” You say as you try to regain your composure.
>”You are wanted for a murder.” >That sobered you up. “Wait what?”
>Before you know it you are incased in an aura of magic and is being dragged away by the guards. >Left in the bar is a shocked and confused cream-coloured p0ny. >You are thrown into a cell by the guards. >You decided not to say a thing until you get a lawyer. >”So what are you in for?” It was a grey p0ny in the other side of a room who spoke. “Apparently I murdered a p0ny.”
>The grey p0ny chuckles. “I can see why that is, you’re different and they probably need somep0ny to use as a scapegoat of they can’t find the real murderer. That is unless you actually did commit the crime and the detectives of P0nyville got incredibly good overnight.” >You drop down on a bed in the corner of the room. “What about you? What are you in for?”
>”I rape people while they sleep.” >That night you didn’t close an eye. Wiz-anon
>>5933187 >The next morning you are taken out of your cell by the same guards who put you in the cell with the rapist p0ny. “What is this about?”
>You are way too tired for this. >”We found the body of a small foal out near the everfree forest, a witness said he had seen the foal talk to you earlier. Since you were probably one of the last p0nies… errr people that saw him.” >You slowly nod your head. >That little foal had so much time left. “How did he die?”
>The guard-p0nies looks at each other and just shrugs. >”We have no idea.” >Palm, meet face. >If they don’t know how the foal died how could they even know if you did it? >P0nies rarely deal with murders. “Mind if I have a look?”
>At least you might give them a course of death. >They lead you into a white room. >There isn’t much in the room save for a bit of medical equipment and a table on which the body is lying. >You start by examining the child’s body… >Not in that way, you pervert. >On its back you find a few holes, all about three millimeters in radius. >Very difficult to notice in all that fur. >There is a little blood but you’d expect more from the, what you assume is, bite marks. >The white in the foal’s eyes is showing. >You feel bad for the parents. >You grab a scalpel and get to work. >It doesn’t take you long to find the course of death. >Unbelievable as it may seem all energy was sucked out of the foal‘s body. >Whatever killed the foal it is magical. >And with that your job is done. >You clean the scalpel and you clear your name. Aether !!mw/7+Tvxn6g
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>Be day 187 in Equestria >You're chilling out at home reading a book >A book called 50 shades of Pink >It's a book Pinkie Pie wrote that describes her marehood in over 50 ways >The book made the best sellers list >Pony Oprah has it as her book of the month >Pinkie insisted you read a copy, you got it for free >That mare seems to have a thing for you or something >She was REALLY insistent on you reading pages 60-148 >That described how her nether regions would react to monkey dick stimulation >Yeah mare wants your dick >Anyway you're sitting there on your comfy couch reading away when Luna decides to make her grand entrance >"ANONYMOUS THOU MUST BE INFORMED OF WHAT WE HATH PERFORMED THIS EVENING!" >You close your book and glare at her >"OH! Oh... um... sorry... hehehe..." >Luna goes into vivid detail about how she and her assistants tortured at least a dozen griffins today >Tearing off wings >Pulling talons off of hands >Skinning them >Draining their blood into containers >Luna describes it as her normal wednesdays >You're absolutely livid >You stare at her like a deer caught in the head lights >"We even brought some griffin back with us!" >Luna reveals that she brought you breaded griffin carcass >You and her eat in comfortable silence, after all you haven't had real meat in months >While eating Luna sees the book you have and the name of the author >She seems to know about the book judging by her look of shock >She sees the words "To Anon" with a heart drawn next to your name >Luna loses her shit >"THE PINK ONE IS A SPY FOR GRYPHONIA! WE MUST MAKE HASTE!" >Pinkie ends up tortured because she described her pony vag to you >Fucking Luna
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>>5933192 >You knock on the door to your house. >You don’t want to walk in on Roseluck again. >”Go away!” >You knock again. “Rose, it’s me.” >You hear shuffling from inside the house before the door opens. >And then you get a hoof across the face. >”Don’t ever leave me like that again, I actually thought you had killed someone for a moment.” >You didn’t really have a choice; the guards just took you with them by magic. “I would never kill a p0ny, you know that.” You say as you kneel down and hug her.
>”Another p0ny died while you were in jail, but the p0nies still think you did it.” >So that is why you were let out in the first place. >Those guard p0nies are probably the most incompetent assholes you have ever met. >You should probably go outside and make sure they don’t suspect you of being the murderer but you’d rather be at home and watch a movie with Roseluck. >You walk over to the television. “Termip0ny or Hug Hard?” >”What?” “What film should we watch? Termip0ny or Hug Hard?”
>”Now is not the time for that… Termip0ny is my favorite though.” >You smile as you start the movie. >You don’t want to tell Roseluck that you had to cut a foal up to clear your name. >You want to cuddle with Roseluck and pretend none of this ever happened. >But the movie doesn’t last forever and Roseluck wants you to come to bed. >You have had sex with a p0ny before but this is different. >You tell her you just have to take a walk and clear your head after all the things that happened to you earlier today and yesterday. >You open the door and walk out. Wiz-anon
>>5933210 >You fucking fool! >Why did you do that? >You had a mare hot and ready lying in front of you and you refused her? >She is probably the mare of your dreams… Actually she is, you’ve dreamt about her quite a few times. >You are walking down the street, it’s late and there is the same silence as there was in the clearing. >You noticed it when you first walked out of the house but you didn’t want to just run back in and take Roseluck right then and there. >Now that you think about it that would have been awesome. >You are about to turn around and walk back to the p0ny waiting for you when you hear a whisper from behind you. >You turn around but see nothing. >Only the corpse of a stallion. >Corpse? >Motherfucker. >Whatever it is that is killing p0nies is close by. >There’s a shadow quickly shifting at your side. >You turn around as quickly as you can. >There’s nothing. >The shadow moves closer. >Out the corner of your eye you see a hideous creature, roughly the same size and shape of a p0ny. >Keeping your eye on it you turn your head and you are now face to face with the beast. >It is a greyish black and completely without fur. >Its maw is long and full of needle-like teeth, around the same diameter as you measured the holes in the back of the foal to be. >It has four red eyes and long spikes protruding from its back that seem to be glowing with a bluish light. >How could you not have seen that thin earlier? “By Celestia, you are probably the ugliest thing I have ever seen.”
>From the look on the creature’s face it is taken aback by that. Wiz-anon
>>5933234 >Then it growls at you. >Time to run. >You are fast but the creature hunting you is still gaining on you. >You eventually end up in a dead end just outside of the local ‘power-plant’. >You try to open the door leading into the building but it is locked. >You should have stayed at home with Roseluck. >The beast has stopped. >It’s slowly creeping its way towards you. >You look around for something to use as a weapon. >Not even an empty bottle. >”Hey, you down there.” >You look up at the p0ny standing on the roof of the power-plant. >You didn’t see her either. >Is something wrong with your vision, Anon? >The mare jumps down and lands by your side. >She is brown with a black mane and with some kind of hourglass as a cutie-mark. >She pulls a long silver thing out of the thin air and gives it to you. >”Use it on the lock while I keep the vigoran busy.” >You have no clue as to what is going on so you take the silver rod and turn to the lock on the door. >There’s a small button on it. >It glows blue on the end when you press it. >Even an idiot can see it isn’t a key so you try aiming the blue light at the door. >Behind you the brown mare is talking to the vig… something. >You don’t listen to what she says as you are so caught up with opening the door. >The lock clicks open and you rush inside alongside the mare. “Who the hay are you?” You pant, trying to get your pulse down to normal.
>”I’m the Inquisitor.” “O-kay, but what is your name?”
>Instead of answering she starts looking around the place. Wiz-anon
>>5933254 “My name is Anonymous.”
>The p0ny stops in her tracks. “That is a thing, not a name.” >Like you haven’t heard that before. “Humans have weird names.”
>”So that is what you are, I haven’t seen someone like you before.” >Did she just say ‘someONE’? >There’s a loud banging on the door. >Holy shit. >The vig… vigorian is back. “You said that thing is a vigorian, what in the world is a vigorian?”
>You are starting to panic. >You are locked inside a closed power-plant with a p0ny making no sense and a vigorian trying to get in. >”A vigorian is a creature that feasts upon energy.” >Well that’s not that bad. >”It is also capable of leveling small cities when it has gotten enough energy.” >… >Motherfucker. “And I led it to a power-plant, great.”
>This is fucking perfect. >Not only did you leave your would be special somep0ny at home waiting you are probably going to be the course of her death as well. >This day just keeps getting better. >”Would you mind standing over there between those two pillars?” the ‘Inquisitor’ says as she points to a couple of metal poles in the middle of the room. >You stand between them. “I trust you have a plan.” >The p0ny nods as she follows a couple of electrical wires with her eyes trying to figure out where exactly they are connected. “Are you going to tell me about this plan of yours?”
>”Anonymous, was it? At my signal I want you to jump for cover.” >She is awfully vague about this. >The door is starting to fall apart. >You can actually see the vigorian through the holes in the door. “Are you sure about this?”
>”Just trust me, I’m the Inquisitor.” Wiz-anon
>>5933275 >The door is broken now and the vigorian has entered the building. >You are standing alone, unarmed, in the middle of the room. >The perfect bait. >With hungry eyes the beast moves towards you. >A little bit of droll drops from its mouth as it nears you. >Just before the vigorian is close enough to jump at you the Inquisitor yells out. >”Hold it right there.” >The vigorian looks up at the brown mare and gnarls. >”I can’t believe you actually thought you could come to this world, this peaceful planet, and think your mindless slaughtering would go unnoticed. Why do you think Equestria is as it is? It’s because I keep creatures like you at bay. How you caught sight of this human thing.” She points at you with her hoof. “before me, I don’t understand, but it doesn’t matter. What matters is that I have found YOU.” >You thought the Inquisitor was the quiet type. >Boy, were you wrong. >She’s smart too. >For the duration of her blabbering she has been fiddling with that silver thing and the power controls. >You were the bait, but she was the distraction. >Brilliant. >”Your kind always makes one huge mistake.” >The Vigorian, which by now is looking a little pissed, turns its head to the side to show its confusion. >It has both of you trapped in a power-plant, a feeding ground. >”You think you can just eat and eat until you bloat, but you can’t…” She pauses for a dramatic effect. >This bitch really loves her job. >”I’ve lived long enough to know what happens if you get too much energy too fast. You need to transfer them to those spike-reservoirs on your back, or else.” The Inquisitor takes a deep breath. In a lowered voice she says. “Kaboom.” Wiz-anon
>>5933292 >From where you are standing you can clearly see that the smug self-assure look on the vigorian’s face turns into a look of utter despair as it looks around the now fully charged metal cylinders around it. >”Now, Anonymous!” The brown p0ny screams. >You jump for cover just as you were told. >The vigorian wasn’t fast enough and was trapped in a raging storm of energy. >You turn your head just in time to look at the last death throes of the alien before it explodes. >Okay, you should NOT have looked at it. >Your whole face is covered in alien bile and intestine-bits now. >Fuck everything. >You wipe the goo off of your face and look over at the Inquisitor who has now come over to you. >”Are you alright?” >No. “Yeah, I’ve seen some shit, and trust me when I say that this isn’t the first time I’ve been covered in another creatures fluid.”
>Squash soup. >That wasn’t meant like that. >It was meant as a joke. >Wait… Is that a hint of pink on the Inquisitor’s cheeks? >Whatever, it’s not like you can take that back. >The brown mare shakes her head as if to shake away some uncomfortable mental image before taking that silver thing out again. >She… >Is she scanning you with her silver rod? >Fuck that. >Before you can tell her to put her stick away she is already done scanning you. >”Hmmm…” The Inquisitor looks down at her little gadget as if she is reading something. “Interesting.” “What is? Am I sick?”
>You try to get a look at the tiny monitor on the little silver stick. >”You are. I have no idea what the hay you are.” “I’m a human, I already told you that.”
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>>5933327 >”Yes but my sonic screwdriver doesn’t give me any readings. Where are you from?” >A screwdriver? >That has got to be the silliest looking screwdriver in existence. “Earth, but don’t worry about it I haven’t met anyp0ny who heard of it, not even Celestia.”
>You know that face. >It’s confusion! >The Inquisitor becomes quiet for some time and you are about to leave to go home and fuck the living shit out of Roseluck when she says. “Anonymous, I have something I want to show you.” >You walk up a staircase leading to the top floor. >In the middle of it all is a large red English telephone box. >”This is the TARDIS.” >Hehe, tard. “What exactly is a TARDIS?”
>”Time and relative dimension in space, the TARDIS is a time machine, but it doesn’t just travel in time, it can travel everywhere in space.” “And why exactly are you showing me your time travelling telephone box?”
>This day has become so weird you’re not even going to try to comprehend it. >Nothing in this world seems to stick to the laws of physic, why not have a fucking time machine as well?! >”I want to examine you.” >That caught your attention. “The last p0ny that wanted to ‘examine’ me was about to cut me to pieces, you are not laying a hoof on me.”
>That may have been said a bit too stern but you seem to have spent all your fucks. >”No, no, no, no, I want to see what you are like and get to know you as a… p0ny… what do you call yourself?” >Somep0ny actually wants to learn proper English? Hallelujah! “A person.”
>You just got a brilliant idea. “Say… Can your TARDIS send me back about thirty minutes near P0nyville square?”
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>>5933373 >”If you come with me on and adventure or two I can, I get awfully lonely.” >Stay here and walk back to Roseluck who is probably angry as fuck because you just left her hanging. >Or. >Go on an adventure through time and space, come safely back home and have your happily ever after. “Deal.”
That is everything I have for this time, I think I'm gonna do Wizard in Equestria next but until then...
Pastry-bin:
http://pastebin.com/u/wiz_anon Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>fall asleep while working on a story about an anon who gets rich writing doctor who novels >Wake up to see anon involved in a doctor who story >fucking WAT
TheAlcoholicAnon !WBeerFXUnM
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Parking.
Lurking.
Writing.
>>5923758 That's fucking awesome Lulzies, great job man.
>>5924696 Read Chapter 16 last night, you need to finish.. My feels man..
Wiz-anon
>>5925503 My creative spark takes about a week to recharge. Forcing this is slow going.
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>>5933437 *grins*
Good stuff! More. MOAR!
Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
>>5928147 >>5928254 Thanks for the advice. Will try sitting down and rereading Larry Niven's classic works on inter-species romances while listening to music.
>>5928959 A prince no longer!
Man, I've been loving those DotA2iE one-shots.
Have you done Shadow Shaman, Witchdoctor, or Batrider yet? I feel like those 3 would make for fantastic p0ny interaction. Anonymous
>>5933738 >Forcing Don't. I think it's safe to say people would rather wait for something of quality rather than get something shitty everyday.
Anonymous
ponescribe>be XXXXXXX
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>>5933373 >Dr Who crossover Jack_Black_Stop_Sign.jpg
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>>5933836 This. I had a lot of trouble with my Rainbro oneshot, but I didn't force it. Whenever I hit a wall I'd get away from the computer and do something else for a little while.
Getting a great story after a long wait is better than getting a mediocre story after a short time.
Anonymous
So how long does it take to get into the skype chat group? I added it a couple hours ago, but haven't been added yet.
Anonymous
>>5934019 The initiation process has only just begun.
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Half-Moon 38 is done, find it here.
http://pastebin.com/aekSzWir Opinions and critisizm is always welcome.
Next chapter is going to be a while, since its going to be BIG (Double to triple the normal update size, so about 6k+ words)
Anonymous
>>5934156 >>5934045 Oh my~
I've been following AiE since it was but Rainbro Dash and Flutterrape, if that helps.
How many people are in the chat anyways?
Anonymous
WHO DRAWED THE PIC OF OP ?! i wanna clop to the rest.
Anonymous
Does anyone know where the fuck this guy went?
http://pastebin.com/u/gasucorp or why he isnt on the master list?
Anonymous
An Irish Nomad !W4S24SXwCA
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>>5934440 Gaus got bored. A real damn shame...
Cormos !!5FfIyvKysyS
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>>5934274 over 100
but not everyone talks
and not everyone is awake
Anonymous
>>5929518 Well I for one Welcome out new Changling Overlords.
Ok time for another Star Ponies short. I swear I will rap this up some point soonish and start another film.
>Having survived her horrific night in the cold Hoth wasteland. Twilight Skywalker rests up in the med bay with Prince Shining Armor, Snails3PO and SweetieD2. >Snails3PO “Master Twilight its so good to see you fully functional again.” >SweetieD2 “Beep boop” >Han Rarity and Chewgilda enter the med bay. >Rarity “You don’t look so bad to me Darling” >Chewgilda “Rarrr” >Rarity “You look strong enough to….ew“ Rarity scrunches her face. “pull the… ears off a gundar…bleh” >Twilight “Thanks to you” >Rarity “That’s two you owe me junior.” >Rarity turns to Prince Shining Armor. “Well your worship looks like you managed to keep me around a little longer” >Prince Shining Armour “I had nothing to do with it. General Applejack thinks its dangerous for any ships to leave the system before we’ve activated the magic field.” >Rarity “That’s a lovely tale. I just think you can’t bear to late a gorgeous lady like me out of your sight.” >Shining Armor “I don’t know where you get your delusions Lazy brain.” >Chewgilda chuckles. >Rarity “Laugh it up Feather face but you didn’t see us alone in the south passage, he expressed his true feelings for me.” >Shining Armor “What?! Why you stuck up, half witted, scruffy looking…..Nerfherder!” >Rarity looking aghast her eyes brimming with tears. “Scruffy looking!?” >Shining Armor “Well I guess you don’t know everything about stallions yet.” >Shining Armor moves over to Twilight with a frightened look on his face. Inches himself closer to her face.
>>5933851 I think it kinda of takes away from the story, but I'll add explicit POV-switches anyway.
Glad you like it, and thanks for reading! I got behind on work writing it (and lurking these threads), so it'll probably be the weekend before chapter 1's done.
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>>5934681 >Luna “Why did you write this scene! They are siblings!” Anon “I know! Its just like in the film itself.”
>Luna “What?! Prince Shining and Skywalker are of the same blood?!” Anon “Yep! Making this scene perfect.”
>Luna her eyes glued on set. “You humans are revolting!” Anon just sits back and laughs.
>Twilight braces herself. Closing her eyes and turning slightly away as Shining gets closer and closer. >Only centimetres from incest Twilight is violently pushed out of the way by Chewgilda as she grabs Shining by the head and viciously kisses him. Shocked, Shining just stands there stunned. >Chewgilda taking this as a sign of consent pushes him off his front legs and his back up against the wall not once taking her beak off his lips. >Wide eyed and blushing Luna shoves her hooves over her mouth. Anon just laughs harder.
>Chewgilda just keeps making out with Shining who even joins in, putting his hooves around her back. >Gilda’s claw slowly starts making its way down Shinings body. >Luna “HALT! DECIST! THIS ISN”T THAT TYPE OF MOVIE! SOMPONY PULL THOSE TWO APART!” >Stage hooves rush the set and with a great deal of effort are able to pull the two apart. Gilda just licks her lips as Shining breathes heavily. Anon between fits of laughter. “Ok Everyone. Get ready for the next scene.”
>Shining Armor, face red with shame and embarrassment races his hoof. Anon “What is it Shining?”
>Shining Armor “I……I…….have to….” Seeing his problem sends Anon into another fit of laughter.
>The rest of the girls on set are looking elsewhere trying to ignore it. Anon “Go take a cold shower. You have 15 minutes.”
>Shining Armor does the walk of shame off set. >“Heh…. dweeb” Thanks for reading. There are more at
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>>5933823 Not done those yet but I shall get right on them. DotAiE...I like it, s'got a ring to it. In other news I've hit another slow day of writing,
partly oxygen deprivation (fucking jossticks) and partly nerves over a day out tomorrow. I did start UndeadAnon but it's wishy washy right now and needs refining. Shamefur dispray, I know.
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>>5934340 See
>>5926868 I'm afraid there isn't any more at the moment.
Jesus, KK. Am I going to have to whore out your art all day or what? Anonymous
>>5934681 >out >rap >its >Darling >Well your worship looks like you managed to keep me around >Switching between "Armor" and "Armour" >you can’t bear to late a gorgeous lady like me >More random words capitalized >Why did you write this scene! Might want to proof read before posting
I thought is was pretty funny though Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
Updating Sour Apples - Part Three - Desert Bloom Leucine !BX6hHNiz6. Wed 21 Nov 2012 19:59:42 No. 5934934 Report Continuing from:
http://pastebin.com/wag702BF >The last thing you see before you sleep are those soft green eyes and a warm smile. >Unfourtunately they're nowhere to be seen when consciousness returns. >You stretch an arm out, hoping to at least to feel something warm and soft. Something that might let out a little giggle if you press right- >Nothing? >Strange, she should be there, ready to be rubbed. >"Guldarn... lazy ol'..." >Ah, now there's the sweet sound of her voice. >"AJ." You call out in a sleepy, sing-song voice. "Come on back." >And then there's the sound of hooves clopping on the wood floor, moving around the side of the bed and approaching you. >You smile up at the mare looking down, a lock of her blonde mane falling over her face. >With a brush of your hand it's swept aside, AJ quirking an eyebrow down. >She quickly follows that with a chuckle, leaning in to give you a quick kiss. >"We'll have all the time fer fun we'll need." You start smiling, moving back to allow her room. >But it's for naught as the mare quickly leans down and whips the bedsheets off you. >"Jesus AJ!" >Bedclothes still in her mouth, AJ chuckles once more, motioning towards the washbasin at the end of the room. >"Get yerself cleaned up an' head on down fer breakfast. Ah ain't havin' Braeburn thinkin' us Ponyville folk are lazy." >Muttering a few choice oaths under your breath you get off the bed and prepare to clean yourself. >The washbasin sits below a window overlooking the greater part of the orchard. >A few ponies are already up and about, tending to various tasks. >So much for hoping to take at least some rest. 1/8
Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5934934 >Washed and dressed, you head on down for breakfast, only remembering last night's events when your eyes pass over the tan stallion seated at the table. >Braeburn makes no indication of anything having happened, offering a warm welcome and patting a chair for you to sit down. >Right next to him. >You glance to AJ but she just smiles back, nodding. >The chair's right across from her and she still doesn't know so of course... You'll just have to hope that stallion's got at least some sense. >Though almost immediately you regret sitting next him. He's like a tan-coloured Pinkie, yammering away at a pace that'd make her jealous. >Apparently he and AJ hadn't caught up properly yesterday and now he's giving her the rundown of events since they last met. >You try to settle yourself on the meal but he bumps against you a couple of times, offering a smile at each one. >Well... maybe he's just trying to be friendly. On the occassions you've met him this wasn't really any different. >"An' don't think Ah've forgotten 'bout you none, Anon. Now Ah know yer not used ta all this hard work-" >"Uh Braeburn?" AJ leans over the table, looking at him pointedly. >"So Ah'm gonna promise ta go easy on ya." >"Braeburn." >"An' when the week's out we can go have ourselves a few drinks and maybe a dance at-" >"Braeburn!" >"Uh... yes?" >The tan stallion glaces over to his cousin, eyes utterly innocent. >"You know darn well Anon's been workin' on the farm fer us. If anythin', I'd say he may just put you ta shame." >Braeburn looks to you, then back to AJ sporting a wicked grin. >"That so, huh? You feelin' like ya want ta put yer bits where yer mouth is? 2/8
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Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5934945 >The ponies assembled fall silent, all turning to Braeburn and the smug grin he wears. >Applejack frowns to him, sitting back into her chair and folding her forehooves. >"Ah dun' need to prove anythin' to-" >Her cousin waves a hoof dismissively, nodding. >"Sure, you already know he ain't gonna match up so there's no point in even agreein'." >For the briefest moment the mare sits there, glowering at him. A part of you hopes AJ might just set this aside and allow you to get on with the work. >"Fine then!" She slams a hoof on the table, putting an end to your hopes. A few plates and cups shudder at the force of the blow, while ponies now quickly turn to look at her. "-I'll- wager Anon's gonna be the first ta put you ta shame!" >Smirking, Braeburn leans over the table, spitting into a hoof and extending it. "Yer on!" >AJ follows suit, roughly pressing her own hoof to his. >Quiet murmuring erupts along the table, glances being passed your way now and then. >"So." AJ looks to you then back to her cousin. "What'd ya have in mind?" >"Shucks, it ain't nothin' complicated." Braeburn slips off his seat, motioning for you two to follow. >With some hesitation you do so, watching as he trots over to a window and raises a hoof out, indicating the orchard. >"We buck the orchard until lunch, whosoever's got the most done is obviously the better pony." >"Ah think yer forgettin' one thing." AJ stomps over to Braeburn, staring him down. "For all'a his excellent qualities, Anon here ain't a pony. Ain't got the legs fer buckin'." 3/8
Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5934954 >Braeburn nods, looking back over the orchard. >"True enough... how about this: we'll pick two even matches ta buck and go by who can carry them. Fair enough?" >A sharp grin replaces the scowl on AJ's face. "Just so long as you don't complain none about bein' beat." >Braeburn looks as if he's about to speak but another voice pipes up from the rest assembled >"I'll help!" >The crowd parts, showing that pony from yesterday - Toffee, you're sure her name was - standing proud. >"And Black Stone here'll stand fer Braeburn." >The crowd parts at another area, showing a dark brown stallion with a black mane looking about nervously. >"Darnit, Toffee, why'd ya hafta get me involved in this!" >The mare shoots him a wide grin, pointing a hoof at you. >"Oh hush, I knew you wanted to see what this feller could do. What was all that guff you were sayin' before? Just like those gryphons a human can't match a pony?" >Best to nip this in the bud. >You turn about, looking over the crowd eagerly watching Stone. >"He's right, I can't match you ponies. Not on everything." They fall silent, suddenly turning to you. "But I'll be damned if Braeburn's gonna get the better of me." >If this is how he wants it, you're not going to shy away. At the least you can get int out of the way, worse still if things got awkward and he used this to... >Goddamn Braeburn. >It's one of those days when there's not even a drop of moisture in the air. The ones where it's a cloudless sky and the sun beats down unmercifully. >Whatever about anything else, Brae's used to this kind of heat. >And you've got hours of hauling apples ahead of you, under the pressure of going against him. >But you can't back down now, if only for AJ's sake. 4/8
Lulzies
Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5934961 >The dusty fields of the farm are a far cry from what you're used to back in Ponyville and the mass of ponies gathered about, trotting stirs up a lot of dust. >Of course, that serves only to attract other workers to the source until you've got practically all of them gathered about to observe. >AJ does the honours of announcing the details of the contest, outlining distances and assuring the crowd the ponies to buck are evenly matched. >There's a few hoots and hollers, thankfully none in support of either of you. Considering who employs them, you couldn't really hope for much better. >With the group in tow, you're lead up ino the orchard, deep into a point somewhere near the centre of it. >The trees are all heavily laden with fruit and the thought of carrying basketfuls while competing against another doesn't seem quite such a good idea. >Still, Toffee and Black Stone line themselves up at trees roughly side by side. You and Braeburn are instructed to get your baskets and stand under the trees, awaiting the fruit. >The tan pony shoots you a grin, devoid of his earlier smugness at the table, though it's one you can't find a response to. >Maybe he's just trying to get back at you. Maybe he's just angry and taking out his frustrations... but then that doesn't really sound like the Braeburn you know. >Course, it could just honestly be a bit of fun. A desire to get away from the usual slog while competing for- >"Go!" >Caught in your reverie, you nearly miss AJ calling out the start. The apples hitting the basket do a good enough job of whipping you back to reality, though. >Now full, you shrug them about your shoulders and take off, Braeburn easily leading you. 5/8
Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5934975 >Much like any other kind of race, there's plenty of ponies along the way, lined along a rough outline of the most effecient route. >It's still long enough, with a good portion devoid of all but distant sounds of cheering. >Still managing to keep pace with Braeburn, he turns and grins, putting a bit more speed into his step. >You curse your lack of foresight in not taking up Rainbow Dash's offer of training with her. >You could sure use a sprint right about now... >Or... does he have the wrong idea? This isn't exactly a race, you've a long time of hauling ahead of you. >Might be better to let Braeburn wear himself out while you keep an even pace. >At least you console yourself with such thoughts, hoping to salvage some bit of pride from this lunacy. >Until you think of AJ, smiling and cheering you on. That's who you're doing it for, not yourself. She'd put her own word on the line by vouching for you. >She'd do her best if it were you. >And so you do, spending hour after gruelling hour hauling apples as Toffee and Black Stone keep an equidistance, moving about the orchard. >Between the weight of the baskets and heat of the sun you're slowly worn down, to the point where you're more dragging yourself back and forth than anything. >Somewhere along the way Braeburn comes back into line with you... did he lap you? No, surely not but you can't rightly be sure. >He pulls up, looking you over. >"Lookin' kinda tired there, Anon. Maybe you should rest up a second." >"I'm fine." You mutter, shrugging the buckets about your shoulders. >You feel a little bump, followed by Braeburn grinning widely at you. >"Ain't no shame in restin' a spell. Hay, Ah wouldn't mind joinin' ya." 6/8
PaleNarrator !.JT.7dRUrY
Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5934991 >You're deep in the orchard, far from the crowds. If you sat down with him for a minute it wouldn't do any real harm. >Braeburn takes the initiative, though, unloading himself of the baskets and setting down next a tree. >"Hoo! Been a while since Ah've had ta push so hard... fun though!" >Your mind idly turns to thoughts of him actually being a distant relative of Pinkie... seems about the only explanation for his ever-present cheer. >Looking him over a moment, you set down your own baskets and sit oppsite the pony. >"Yeah, real fun." You mutter, rubbing at a tired joint. >"Aww, c'mon now, big feller like you shouldn't have any real problems. Ah mean, anypony can see yer in the peak a physical fitness, what with all them-" >You turn back to him as he suddenly cuts off, his mouth scrunching up as he quickly looks away. >"What? All them what, Braeburn?" >It takes a moment more for him to look back to you. >"Ah... Ah think ya know what Ah'm talkin' 'bout, Anon. Darn well hard ta keep my eyes offa ya!" >He chuckles bitterly, shaking his head. >"Ain't no shame in it, ya know. Ya ain't gotta worry about that out here." >You straighten yourself up, more to hide how you tense at those words. >"What're you getting at?" >Look, Ah'm jus' sayin'... ya don't gotta lie none about havin' a marefriend ta cover up anythin'. Nopony's gonna judge-" >"You think I'm lying?" Anger rushes through you, giving you the energy to stand and glare at him. "You honestly think I'd care enough to do that?" >Braeburn remains seated, though shrugs. >"Ah've heard of it done, 'specially out near Canterlot. All them stuffy city types don't care for it." 7/8
Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5935018 >You'd laugh if it wasn't so bizarre. >"I've got a marefriend, Brae. A real one. Now you can either stop or I'll-" >"Does she make ya happy?" The pony stands, walking over to you with measured paces. "When she touches ya, do ya wanna pull back from it? Like ya'd... maybe prefer it was a stallion doin' the touchin'?" >"Yes, alright!" You don't care to reign in your anger, not right now. "She makes me happy! Damnit, Brae, I love her! I love her so much I've put up with shit you don't even know just to be with her." >You reach back, grabbing the baskets and hoisting them up. >"Was it worth it?" >It's strange how quickly his voice can turn so soft. You suspect the reason why he isn't looking at you. >"Was it worth breakin' mah heart? 'Cause-" His voice cracks. "Ah ain't so sure." >You try to find the words, anything to say in response to that. >But you can't. >You know as well as he does you screwed up. >One letter, Anon. >The thought stays with you as you set off, the idea of winning this contest now far from your mind. 8/8
That's all for now. A little pressed for time with this, coupled with trying to fill it out somewhat is hampering me. Just need to get back into it, I suppose.
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>>5934997 You.
Narrate it.
Now.
Anonymous
>>5935036 That was
ok You seem sort of rusty Anonymous
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>>5934934 Leucine, long time fan of Sour Apples, I must say and if you'll pardon my excitement.
FUCK YES!!!!!! OH MY GAWD!!!! THIS IS JUST TO DAMN MUCH!!!!! GAHHHH!!!! MUST READ NOW!!
Anonymous
>>5934932 Thanks. I'll try and prof read better in the future. Fixing it up before I pastebin it.
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>>5935118 and then I misspell proof. Fantastic.
>>5935094 I feel very rusty. Probably should've started with something else but I know people wanted Sour Apples.
I wasn't really feeling it, either. I've got a definite idea of where I want to take his but it's just getting there, without making pointless filler, that's the issue. An Irish Nomad !W4S24SXwCA
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>>5935036 So glad to see this being updated.
Cormos !!5FfIyvKysyS
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>looking around for a legit reason to comment >Leucine starts posting sour apples >mfw >MY BODY IS READY!
>>5935180 >Implying he won't disappear for weeks on end again Atlas !!slJz9yIlfQC
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>>5934934 It's.... It's finally happening.
Anonymous
>>5935296 Try months shitlord.
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>>5935322 I don't care as long as he posts within my lifetime.
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>>5935254 Leucine pls
stay
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>>5935296 YOU SHUT YOUR WHORE MOUTH
KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
What in the hell has been going on in this thread.
TheAlcoholicAnon !WBeerFXUnM
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>>5935634 please more nightmaremoon
Anonymous
>>5935036 >A little pressed for time with this, Does that imply a rush job? Look Leucine, I've always loved your work and everything, but that Anon who mentioned being rusty had the right idea. Each of your stories always seem to have a unique mark, and I can see it in this piece, but the feels present in it aren't as pronounced as usual.
I look at it like this, you have an axe used for chopping down trees. Felling the tree meaning pushing out an update, chapter, or finishing a story entirely. This axe has a special design that leaves a specific mark with each strike which would be that certain something that lets a reader know exactly who's writing the piece. Now you seemed to take care of that axe pretty well, missing strikes here and there, but overall it did a nice job. Over time without use this axe doesn't quite have the edge it used to have and it's not making cuts as effective as they used to.
There's no downplaying it though, you have a real impressive ability in regards to romance, but if you don't keep that axe sharp you're just going to stand out there all day and that tree will never come down. I love ya and I really hope this didn't come off as dickish or horribly bad in terms of "critique" as some might call it.
I tried to give it an honest effort, hopefully I showed you exactly how I felt about this. Nice piece, but your touch isn't as effective as it used to be it seems in my opinion. If it doesn't feel right or just sounds offensive and such feel free to disregard, all I can do is attempt to put my feelings into words. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:36:06 No. 5935748 Report >>5935634 Well anyway, time to post.
>There's only so much you can do with water to help scrub off all the gunk from your clothes. Ugh, you don't even remember getting so much frosting all over your crotch area. >Still, you feel a lot better after taking a quick shower. You tried to be careful and not wake up Celestia after you had to slide out from under her. >You sigh, looking over your clothes. Guess that's the best you can do for now. You slip on your pants, shirt, and whatever else before slipping back into the room, just before... >"Miss Shores? Miss Shores! It's time for your-" >You bolt over to the door, and jerk it open just enough to push your head out, a finger over your lips. The pone behind it grows wide-eyed in surprise, almost yelping. Shhh, she's asleep. What do you want?
>It takes a few seconds to register, but her expression soon changes to worry, eyes looking past you into the room. "But... it's four in the afternoon! Why in all of Equestria would cause somepony to sleep at this time?" You stare at her blankly. She's tired.
>"Oh dear. Maybe if she'd've had some of my tea..." You shrug, spotting an assortment of tableware with various softly steaming pots and cups resting on a large serving tray balancing on her back, as well as a few sweets to go along with the sweet smelling liquid. What's all that?
>"Oh this? Just my specialty blend of herbal teas! We have mint tea, green te-" Do you have any hot chocolate?
KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:37:27 No. 5935786 Report >>5935748 >She stops and looks at you quizzically. "Er... yes, but I that's usually only for winter times-" Fantastic. Could you bring up a few servings? And... ooh.
>You reach behind her to grab a couple plates full of treats. I'll take these. Thank you kindly.
>You pull back into the room and slowly push the door closed with your foot. When you turn around, you see Celestia yawning and stretching out over the soft velvet surface, legs and wings extended brilliantly. Oh. Crap. Did I wake you up?
>She smirks. "Yes, when you went to answer the door." You frown, but she softly laughs. "But I needed to wake up anyway." She folds her wings back to resting position and sits up on her royal mattress. Most of the bags under her eyes have lifted. You approach her with the silverware in you hands. Well... want some of this? I got it off of the snack table the host brought up here.
>You hold out the plates with what looks like a pile of assorted miniature frosted brownies and cupcakes surrounded by an arrangement of cinnamon sticks and wafers. And we have hot chocolate on the way, if you're interested.
KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:38:08 No. 5935801 Report >>5935786 >She looks at the plate, then you, then the door questioningly. "In the middle of summer?" You snort, laying a plate in front of her while you set yourself down beside her with your own. Please, it's never too soon for hot chocolate. Besides, pretending it's winter time isn't so bad. All the decorations are around, and the land is covered in white. All we're missing now is a fireplace we can all bundle up around.
>You shiver at the thought, smiling to yourself as you imagine being wrapped in the thick blanket in the middle of winter. Celesta gives you a white grin, softly chuckling to herself in response to your enthusiasm. "Is that what you like to do then?" Hmm? What's that?
>You toss a chocolate brownie in your mouth, they're small enough to chew on in one bite. "Bundle up by the fireplace, drinking hot chocolate?" You nod, mouth full of sweets. These things are practically melting in your mouth. "Alone?" >You swallow, and look at her, caught slightly off guard. Well... yeah, I guess.
>"You can't imagine anyone with you?" 'Anyone'. Not 'anypony. You pause again. Guess it just never crossed my mind.
>You look away for a moment. You've been here for a little over a month now. All the time you were here, your mind has been so preoccupied with adapting with this vastly new environment that you haven't even realized that... you just might be the only human in this world. Ain't that some shit. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:39:03 No. 5935823 Report Quoted By:
>>5935801 >You have mixed thoughts about this. You're not really sure that this place could even handle another human, since there are definitely some worst folks than you that could have been placed in this certain predicament. On the other hand... it'd be nice to have someone that you can relate yourself with a little more. Somepony. Sure, the pones here all have personalities similar to humans, but the cultures are vastly different. You sort of miss thumb-wrestling all of a sudden. >Damn these cupcakes are phenomenal. >"I... apologize," says Celestia, breaking the silence and pulling you away from your thoughts. "It's not my business to ask." You shake your head, laughing it off. It's... eh. Whatever. I'm just happy to be alive, you know. I can't worry about minor inconveniences.
>"Loneliness is never minor, Anonymous." I'm not alone. Not really, anyway. I mean, I'm the only human, but big deal. I have friends I can talk to about... anything, really. What else is there for me?
>"Companionship," she responds softly, with a hint of concern. You laugh again heartedly. What a ridiculous concept to try to grasp in your situation. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:40:17 No. 5935855 Report >>5935801 >A rattle on the door pulls you towards it, to which you quickly retrieve the unseasonal pot of chocolate resting on a silver tray with several coffee cups adorned with snowflakes wrapped around the lip. The host was even kind enough to thrown in a pile of mini marshmallows, or a few larger ones as an option for toppings. You place the set in front of Celestia, who giggles, you figure from how silly this seems. >A gentle steam pours from the spout as you fill a cup, and gesture to the white pone as an offer, which she politely declines. "As I was saying." Companionship, right?
>She watches you place a handful of marshmallows in your cup. "Yes. Someone to accompany you by that fireplace you mentioned. Do you imagine anyone with you there?" 'Someone'. 'Anyone'. It feels weird to have a conversation with a pony using your form of pronouns. You shake your head. But you shouldn't dismiss solitude so lightly, Princess.
KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:41:22 No. 5935880 Report >>5935855 >"I'm not a princess anymore, Anon. And I'm not dismissing anything. Solitude has its merits." You nod, sipping the warm liquid after blowing on the edge to cool it down. "In fact, it's been a long time since I've been away from the palace without any guards or escorts around me. It's refreshing, to say the least." She sighs, her face contradicting her words. "And I suppose... it's something I'll have to get used to now." She pauses and you feel relieved that the topic has shifted away. She brightens up suddenly, a thought popping in her head. "... Unless." Her face lights up, aiming at you. "Why don't you be my personal guard? Or escort. Or caretaker. Whichever title fits you." You eye her, holding the cup up to your lips, frozen in place. This sudden burst has caught you in surprise. Perhaps the other topic might have been better to pursue. You calmly gulp the little bit of chocolate in your mouth. Do you even need one anymore?
>"Oh yes, most definitely. Now more than ever." You hear her tone float with exaggeration, to which you respond with a well-placed eye rolling. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:42:14 No. 5935903 Report >>5935880 >"Well it's true! I'm a lot more vulnerable without any magic to aid me. And when word gets out that I've fallen from power... well... let's just say there's more than a few frustrated fiends that will want a little revenge." You sigh, rubbing your temples, irritated with yourself for even considering this. It's not like you have much argument, though. She did save your life. What could be a better way to repay her than to use the life she saved to be her personal guardian? However, you see a few problems with that. How the heck am I supposed to defend you from these alleged 'fiends'? I mean, look at you. You have WINGS. You can FLY. More than likely you'll be helping ME out of these situations than any protection I'll be worth.
>"Oh come now, Anon, don't be difficult. You just need to brush up on your... er... battle figure! What was it you talking to Twilight about... you know... gladiators! Surely you can summon up your ancient and fierce ...Roman?... ancestry that you have in you!" You can tell she's having fun with this, grinning from ear to ear from all the teasing. Despite your minor annoyance, you're glad to see the pearl-colored equine in a much better mood than earlier. "In any case," she continues, her voice dialing down to a more serious notion, "over the years I have grown dependent on magic to do even the most effortless tasks, so... I'd like you to help me adjust." KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:43:05 No. 5935916 Report >>5935903 >You ponder to yourself for a minute. Protecting her might be out of your league, but you can definitely help her in any other area. What am I expected to do?
>"Just some minor things!" A strange silence follows, expecting her to follow up on that. When she doesn't, you inquire. ... Like?
>"Well..." she stretches out her first word, hesitant. "opening doors, assisting me item handling, stand with me when we travel in public, escort me around the town, treat me to a little grooming-" You hold you hand up to stop her. This is starting to sound like bitch work. ... Wait a minute. Grooming? Seriously?
>"Yes? Is that a problem?" You mean like... brushing your mane and coat and stuff, right?
>"Er... generally. Does that bother you?" Of course it does! What little manliness you have left in your spirit will be all but sapped from you if you accept this. Being a pony princess's personal pet is a job that only six-year old girls would enjoy. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:43:59 No. 5935939 Report >>5935916 >But when you look at her... a loose off-pink fluff of a mane thrown together hastily, contained in a few almost out-of-place, flashy golden hairbands and wearing a face that, even at it's brighter stages, looks as if it could use a few days worth of resting... you can't bring yourself to reject the offer. And you hate that. >Your thumbs idly slide around the sides of the cup, frowning while you hesitate with your response. This is bound to eat up most, if not all, of your free time. Either that, or you're going to have your own little fallen princess follow you around. That's darkly cute, now that you think about it. You finally sigh out, and nod, managing a smile towards her. Okay, I'll do it.
>"Excellent!" You hold up a finger. But I expect some sort of compensation.
>"Compensation?" She seems lost at first, but then quickly realizes what you meant. "Oh! Hmm..." Her hoof taps on her chin. "I believe I can manage something for you. Monetary?" You nod, going back to your not-so-hot chocolate. She nods in response. “I will make some arrangements soon. In the meantime...” Celestia spins her head around slowly, examining the room. “Your first task will be to help me find a new place to reside for now." You eye her, quizzically. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:44:57 No. 5935964 Report >>5935939 What's wrong with this place?
>She clears her throat, looking aside. "It's... quite expensive." You snicker in response. Oh the irony. I bet that's the first time you've had to run into that kind of problem.
>She chuckles nervously. "Y...yes. I'm going to have to ask you for a favor." What's up?
>"Do you... have any money on you to cover for the second night?" She blushes a light pink at you, and you just stare at her blankly. A hard laughter gets shoved out of your chest, despite your attempts to hold it back. This just makes her even more embarrassed, cheeks flushing. "It is not funny!" You settle down after a moment, breathing out. Sorry, sorry. What ever happened to 'two nights worth of bits'?
>She frowns. "It costs more than that for just one. Beau was kind enough to let me stay... after some persuasion." You feel the residual laughter effects kicking in. Yes I can cover you. I expect-
>"Reimbursement. Of course." You nod. Alright then. What's the damage?
>She's reluctant to say. Oh boy. "Two... hundred... and fifty." >A hard, heavy silence follows. You can feel your eye twitch uncontrollably. ... The FUCK.
>"Reimbursement!" she hastily reminds you, pulling back after your outburst. That's not the problem! I don't even know if I have that much to my name, let alone on my person!
KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:45:53 No. 5935986 Report >>5935964 >"Oh... oh dear. That's not good." She presses a white hoof against her equally white chin. Then she looks down, and sighs, disheartened. "I was really hoping I would get to keep this." Her aforementioned hoof rubs against the bed she rests on, sullenly. What... oh, you mean the bed? Will that cover the costs?
>"Anon, this could cover three houses on its own." You're taken back. For just a bed?
>"It was made for me by three different master artisans from the finest..." she stops herself, shaking her head. "It doesn't matter. It's an obtrusive possession. It would only get in the way." She rubs the golden trimming along the edges, a reminiscent look upon her. She slowly rises from the bed, and walks to the other side of you, towards the door. "Come, Anon. Escort me to Ponyville." --
>Beau Blossom of Beau Blossom's Bed and Breakfast was particularly hesitant to take a bed for payment, but Celestia... 'Sunny Shores' proved to be fairly convincing. >The orange hues pushing through the cracks of the trees above indicate that the day is almost up, sun just about to park behind the horizon. The walk is mostly quiet aside from the occasional wind stirring the foliage above you. As you two head towards town, you feel an air of melancholy emitting from your partner. You make it halfway down the trail before finally asking. Did that bed mean a lot to you?
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Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:46:43 No. 5936006 Report >>5935986 >Celestia smirks, keeping her eyes on the road ahead. "It was fairly ancient, only lasting as long as it did by an enchantment of durability. My castle has been remodeled and rebuilt many times, but no matter what, my bed remained constant. I always let it rest in the same place; right in the middle of my room. I can't count how many times my quarters have been altered, it's been hectic." She laughed to herself, the view of the town coming into view. "This sounds silly, but... every night that I laid down on it, it filled me with a sense of comfort and familiarity despite the revolving surroundings. I... am a little sensitive to change, so it eased me through the more rougher nights I've had." Her smile slowly vanished as more memories stirred in her head. "Lots... of rough nights." You decide to keep your questions to yourself. She's probably seen some shit. >The trail reaches it's end, leading you to the edge of Ponyville. Business has started to slow, and some have even closed up for the night. You begin to walk forward, but Celestia touches your sleeve, indicating you to stop. "Anonymous," she starts, cautious, "let's avoid walking directly into town." Any reason?
>She twists her mouth a bit, reluctant to say. "I... haven't exactly told anyone else outside of my castle about this.” What? Not even Twilight?
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Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:47:29 No. 5936027 Report >>5936006 >She nods. “That's right. You must understand how sensitive she would be especially. I have to be very delicate. I only summoned you first because you were a major influence, and I felt you deserved to know beforehand." Celestia lowers her face, carrying an ashamed look on it. "Also... I wanted to see how you reacted; to see for myself what my choice led to, and to accept any negative feelings you would have towards me. After all, you could have hated me for what I forced onto you.” You frown, but you can understand what she means. You only met Celestia once before then which leads you to believe she didn't gather an appropriate evaluation. “The town currently has slowed down,” she reverts back on point. “and I might be a little unrecognizable, but... I'd rather not risk attracting attention." You nod and rub your mouth in thought, looking out past the town towards Sweet Apple Acres, where your shack of a home resides. How long to you plan to keep your cover?
>"I haven't decided yet. I want to make sure I'm ready and prepare my announcement, but also reveal it before the town, specifically the Elements, become too worried or suspicious of my absence." You crunch your brow as you analyze her plan. Hold on a second, Celestia. Don't you think the six of them deserve to know just a little ahead of time? You should break it to them before even considering anypony else. Especially Twilight.
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>>5935634 You keep samefagging to promote your own work.
>>5935706 Collab images like this are great, but using them as OP images make the threads feel like, well... Tripfags in Equestria.
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Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:48:43 No. 5936065 Report >>5936027 >Celestia looks at you for a moment, then down towards the center of town before nodding. “You are right." Her tired face gave hints of distress the more she thought about the future conversation, keeping her focus towards Twilight's library. She breathes out, shaky. "Escort me to Twilight's tomorrow, Anonymous. I believe I've had enough emotion for one evening." She walks up beside you, trying her best to keep a more positive mood, starting with that same warm smile you're getting familiar with. "Let's go to your quarters, and get a good night's sleep." You smirk to match her forced happiness. Alright, but just as a warning, I don't exactly have a lot of room in my little thing of a home.
>She giggles, shaking her head. "I'm content with just a spot on the floor, Anon." I can't have that now. I'll think of something.
>The two of you start walking along the edge of the town until you reach the fence making the beginning of the Apple family's orchard. We'll cut through here to avoid the main roads.
>"That's not entirely necessary..." But you're already over the fence, extending a hand back towards her. She rolls her eyes with a grin, accepting you assistance over the wooden barricade. You start leading her through the orchard, the thickness increasing as you delve deeper in the fruity forest. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:49:27 No. 5936082 Report >>5936065 So... why 'Sunny Shores'?
>The tall white equine stepped over a few fallen apples and roots closely behind you. "Hmm? Oh, it was something that I imagined on the fly that matched my sun mark. And.. I suppose I have a small affinity for beaches and the ocean during the summer. It was one of the first things that came to my mind." No surprise that princess of the sun would love the summer beach. You hardly believe that it's an after thought for a vacation spot for her. >You walk around the bottom of the hill to avoid the front of the house, keeping an eye out for any of the family. You nose twitches as it catches a brief, warm scent carrying with the small wind in front of you, and you smile. Okay, seems they're all inside getting ready for dinner. My place is just up here.
>Just between the barn and the main house is your humble little shack-home, a continuous work in progress. The entirety of it isn't much taller than you, with the area approximately fifteen by twenty feet. Behind it resides a pit just as large, a few markings here and there indicating an extension has been planned out, a shovel jammed into the ground at one of the edges. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:50:23 No. 5936101 Report >>5936082 >Applejack and Big Mac helped you lay down the foundation, but the rest was all your doing. Aside from a few slightly crooked support wall panes and misplaced nails, you're rather proud of your mini-cottage of comfort. You lead your follower around to the front door, and notice that the front hook has been pushed off. >Looks like you have an intruder. Or you forgot to lock up. Either one is equally likely. You decide to be cautious and hold up your hand towards Celestia for her to wait, gently pushing the door in enough for you to peek inside. The light is on, and in the middle your makeshift couch mat is a pile of familiar orange with a blonde topping, its eyes closed with a calm expression, with the token hat resting beside. You relax your shoulders upon seeing your friend, but angle your brow for further inquiry. Pushing the door further open, you step through the threshold. Applejack?
>The orange jerks up. "Oh! Aheh... uh, howdy Anon." Howdy. What are you doing here? I can smell your dinner, might be ready for you.
>"Eh... I ain't that hungry. Told 'em to eat without me tonight." She looks off. She's got something on her mind, a look that you've come to recognize. "I just was waitin' for y-... oh." Her gaze manages to land on the white and pink one behind you, and her eyes widen. "Oh shoot I, uh, didn't think you'd have company with ya. Sorry about that." She rises from the floor couch mat, and nods at the both of you. "I'll just... be on my way then." KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:50:55 No. 5936113 Report >>5936101 >Her hair shakes with her head. "Nah, 'snothin'." She shifts her way past the two of you, nodding at Celestia on the way out, tipping her hat before saying "ma'am", and walking towards the barn. >You frown after her in that direction. "Looks like she wanted to tell you something," perks the formal royalty. Yeah, I got that much. I'll catch up to her in a bit though, let's get you settled first.
>She nods and follows you in, observing your little nest you've got going. On the floor where Applejack was previously is a three foot square cushion elevated a little over a foot by a slightly larger wooden box. You could have just gotten a chair, but you could never get over how awkward that looks to you so you put this together for guests. You believe they appreciate it more. >A few shelves and counters float about here and there containing a small amount of books and other readables, and at the end is your humble bed and dresser, resting under a lit lamp. On top of the dresser are a few weathered notebooks stacked on top of each other, and a small pile of pencils. >Celestia shifts beside you as you try to think of sleeping arrangements, pondering through the few books that you have. "'Folklore and Creation Theories'," she starts reading the titles aloud, "'The Foundation of Equestria', 'Equestria History for Grade School. curious about our history, Anon?" You smile as you straighten out the comforter on your bed, brushing off any dirt and dust. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:51:39 No. 5936133 Report >>5936113 You could say that.
>"Hmm... Oh. Now what's this? 'The Sun and the Moon: The Lives of Princess Celestia and Princess Luna'?" It was the only thing I could find on a history of you two. Well besides Twilight herself, but I thought that she'd be a little too biased.
>You here a small sliding noise behind you, then a loud smack that shocks you enough to make you spin. "Ah... Sorry." The book in question landed on its spine, open to a random page in the scripture. You watch her head crane down to peek at the entry. Honestly I haven't taken a look at it, though.
>You turn back to your bed and fold up a thick blanket, letting it rest on the end before you step out of the way. Here's your bed for tonight.
>"Hmm?" She looks up at you, surprised, with the book in her mouth. "Whrr whl yhh slhhp?" You shrug. I'm gonna check on Applejack. Don't run off now.
>Celestia doesn't exactly acknowledge, she just watches you hastily exit the door with the book hanging from her jaw. She's all set for the night, so you don't concern yourself with her for the moment. Applejack supersedes her in importance. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:52:31 No. 5936158 Report >>5936133 >The sun has disappeared completely, leaving a trail in the sky, purple-pink reflections of what is left of the day. After a brief trot around the barn to check for your citrus colored cohort, you walk through the open door of the large building. Your head shifts left to right inside the low-lighted area. No sign of her on the bottom floor, but you hear a small rustling on the overhang above you, obscured by a piles of hay. You walk over to and head up the ladder to investigate. >Sure enough, as soon as you peer over the platform you see the brown of Applejack's hat in it's rightful place, setting on top of the owner who rests in the middle of a spread out assortment of hay, facing out the windowless barn window. You recognize this area for being the place where you slept for the first couple of weeks. You especially remember the scenery you captured from that window. Nice view, isn't it?
>The orange one turns to you and smirks briefly, before going back to the window. "Ayup." You plant yourself beside her, cross-legged, co-cooperatively soaking in the sight. KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:53:15 No. 5936175 Report >>5936158 >The first thing you always notice is the particular way the light shimmers off of the leaves the trees wear throughout the orchard. A little past that is the top of the buildings of the town, which is encased in the same violet hues as the rest of the landscape you can see. Just beyond the town is another stretch of forested trees, then the vague shapes of mountains morphing the rest. You lay back on your hands, smiling. This is actually the first time you've shared this view with anyone, but you're sure Applejack had seen this before. You look over to the pone in question. So, um... about earlier-
>"Ain't none of my business to know, Anon," she says without looking at you. Another silence. It's hard to tell if she's upset with you. "... She's really pretty though." You smirk and roll your shoulders. You knew she'd let her curiosity get the better of her. I guess so. She's well kept, at least... well, until recently.
>The hat nods. Pause. "... Goin' through some hard times?" Something like that. Just helping her out for a couple of nights until we can work something better out for her.
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Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:54:42 No. 5936212 Report >>5936175 >"Hope everythin' works out for ya, then." Her voice was weakly enthusiastic. >Okay enough of this. Come on, spill it.
>Finally, she looks at you, green eyes in full. "Whatcha-" Something's bothering you, AJ. Tell me what's up, let's go.
>Applejack breathes out, frustrated. "Yeah... alright." Her eyes vanish behind her orange lids. "My family up in Phillydelphia's comin' down to visit for a couple of days." You scratch your chin, a few bells in your head ringing. You may remember her talking about this branch of relatives before. Not the same family that you stayed with when you ran away when you were younger, right?
>She nods. "That's them all right." You cringe and stick out your tongue in disgust. "My thoughts exactly." No wonder you look all down.
>"Well... that's not all. I mean if was just that, it wouldn't bother me much. Family's family after all." Then what is it?
>She sighs. "They're taking over the farm for a while." You stare at her as you feel your brow bunch up below your forehead. Over? Completely?
>She nods. Why?
>AJ shakes her head, frustrated. "From what I hear there's a major demand for any kind of 'family grown fruits' or somethin', so all of our apples are gonna be shipped to a few cities up north to sell." You crunch your brow even tigher. ALL of them?
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Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 20:56:12 No. 5936266 Report >>5936212 >"All of 'em. 'Non-negotiable' is a word I kept hearin'. 'High profits' is another thing too, but... I dunno. Celestia knows we need the money but... all they did was spew some sorta lawyer mumbo jumbo and backed us up into a corner, bullied us with fancy talk until they made Granny signed somethin' she prolly shouldn't've." Oh no... when did this all happen?
>"This afternoon. They've convinced Granny that what she did was the right thing, the slicked-tonged little snakes-in-the-grass they are. She ain't as worried as the rest of us." Her head landed on the hay in front of her, hat shifting upwards to cover her eyes up. "I just hope nothin' bad happens." >You frown, unable to think of any consoling words for your small equine friend. You weren't really good at this sort of thing, so the best thing you think of to do is slide over to her side and set your hand on her orange back, running it up and down her spine to try to comfort her. She shifts under your palm a bit, but shows no sign of stopping you. You smile. Everything will work out just fine for you, Applejack.
>You feel her chuckle through your hand. "Thanks." You hear the smile in her voice, and you breathe out, pleased to hear her spirit lifted. You look back out to the view through the window. "Hey, Anon?" she pipes up suddenly. ElectricJetDonkey
>>5936082 >mfw Stricken is being continued KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw
Stricken: Chapter 2 KKaizer !!DMMn0VOowAw Wed 21 Nov 2012 21:01:01 No. 5936379 Report >>5936266 Mm?
>"Don'tcha got a gal waitin' for ya?" I can stay for a little longer.
>"You sure now? I dunno what's she's all goin' through, but-" She needs her rest. I'm here with you now, AJ, you ain't gettin' rid of me yet. Might as well accept it.
>She snickers in response to mocking her drawl. "Alright then." >A peaceful quiet follows the two of you. You're pretty sure it didn't take long for AJ to fall asleep, and your body seems to be telling you that you should be doing the same. >Eventually you oblige, the scenery pulling you into the comforting hay, your eyes shifting into a deep slumber. You've got a long day tomorrow.
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>>5936379 And that's it, will update my pastebin shortly.
http://pastebin.com/u/KKaizer Sorry about the massive amounts of text. You guys can return to your scheduled broadcast.
Any thoughts from the people that did read?
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>>5936456 I'm going to have to find earlier portions of Stricken. I
LOVE what I see here.
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>>5936456 Gonna enjoy reading this on the trip down south today. Good read, your characterization is really interesting. Celestia being put out of power is an excellent idea, and I like what you do with her personality. I also sense orange pone shenanigans later on. Always nice. I enjoyed it, and recommend it to others. Keep it up!
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>>5929283 I drew that, it was a one shot thing. It seems to be getting a bit of attention though, so I guess I'm obliged to continue this.
>>5926868 This picture is almost done, I'm working on it.
>>5926948 Okay fine. You guys will hear from me soon.
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>>5936456 yes what happened to the princess no home?
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>>5936618 >>5936557 Chapter 1 is in the pastebin, yo
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>>5933823 >>5934779 And done! Apologies, I couldn't think of a Shadow Shaman one right now. I'll post one, and you can find the rest on my pastebin.
http://pastebin.com/25wtmfAH >You are Batrider >Man, are you bored! >Sitting on the ground has never been so boring before. Was it always this less windy? >Still, even bats have got to rest sometimes. The poor girl is having her snooze in the nearby cave, which means you are out of the air for the next hour or so. >It has only been five minutes and it's driving you crazy. >You have tried running around, jumping up and down, even going for a swim in the nearby lake. >Nothing can stop the burning desire to fly. You need to be flying something soon, and fast. >With a groan you slam your face into the ground. As you do so, your ears pick up an odd sound. >Looking up, you spot one of them multicolored ponies lounging on a deck chair near the lake. It looks as if she's reading a book and giggling to herself. >Your eyes, however, are drawn completely to the beautiful pair of blue wings on her back. >Wings mean flight. >The poor thing only has a brief warning of your shadow blocking the sun, before you are open her. >In a quick scuffle, you manage to pin her on the ground. You make yourself comfortable and let loose a whoop. "Whooooo! Giddy up girl! Let's go for a ride through the air!"
>She flashes an annoyed glance at you over her shoulder, yet strangely she begins to grin. >Suddenly you are aloft. The brief rush of excitement hits you, but is soon replaced with fear as the pony begins to accelerate faster and faster, twisting and turning in the air. >You are completely unprepared for a barrel roll, which tips you off of her back and into the lake. >Coughing out water, you glare at the pony hovering above you as she snickers with laughter. >Better stick to bats for a while. Codz !!hfGwSkJc+gS
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Glorious story update.
http://pastebin.com/xj7MknqQ Enjoy.
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>was supposed to be writing today >coming home from work >drinking beer >reading Leucine >dozing off while listening to Swans on headphones >waking up in a cold sweat with the world ending in my ears >making tea >reading more Leucine
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>>5936456 Loved it. I remembered just enough of what happened in chapter one to be able to read this update without having to check your pastebin to refresh my memory.
Please tell me chapter three will be posted soon, because I'm hooked worse than a cheap prostitute on crack.
>Sorry about the massive amounts of text. Actually I think you nailed the size of the update.
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Oneshot incoming.>Year two in Equestria. >You wake up in your cushy bed, the dawn's light serving as your alarm. >Yawn. Stretch. Slippers. Bathroom. Coffee. Chair. >Just like every other day, you start work in your study, hammering at the keys of your custom typewriter. >You were Equestria's only human, and most published author. >Life was good. >But never good enough. >So every day, you filled the air with the tikkity-tappy of the only kind of magic you knew. >The magic of words.
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>>5938704 >For all that Celestia valued literature, and touted it's importance to the intelligence of her people, it was next to impossible to make a living as an author here. >Intellectual property rights were weak at best. A single book could net you thousands of bits, tens of thousands now, based entirely on the weight of your name in the industry. >But once the book was sold, it was gone. There were no royalties, no movie tie-ins, no merchandising rights. >At first the lack of legal rigamarole had been soothing. Everything became simple. Write, sell, relax, repeat. >Until writer's block reared it's ugly head. >It still might not have been so bad, but denial makes everything worse. >You knew it had been some time since your last check had come in. >Your tab at the bar had grown to record levels. >If Applejack invited you to dinner one more time this week, p0nies would begin to talk. >None of that set off any alarms. >But when the mailmare crashed through your window, each eye on a different page of one of YOUR books... >And you couldn't pull even 40 bits out of the bank to repair it... >Enough was enough. Integrity and pride meant nothing if you were left holding them tight in the gutter. >So you thought back to home, and took, instead of creating. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5938721 >You swore to yourself that if you were going to steal ideas, you would only steal the best. As ever, the world finds no joke funnier than the plans of man. >Hamlet got portrayed as a factual recounting of an ancient royal tragedy on Earth. The concept of fallible royalty was so foreign to p0nies, however, that a great many believed it to be a "dark comedy." >You got about halfway through ponifying Moby Dick before you realized that P0nies whaling simply didn't and couldn't make sense, and threw the whole mess into the fire. >The Old Griffin and the Sea received critical acclaim for broaching the relatively untouched topic of the plight of the carnivore, but only the intellectual circles ever bothered to read it. >Time wore on, and stories that were actually accessible by p0ny society dwindled. A world virtually untouched by war, madness, and greed has little use for stories detailing their consequences. >It turns out war, madness, and greed make up the vast majority of memorable human literature. >But still, you got by. >Then one day, you ran out of classics. Stumped for the fourth time in a week, you reclined against a gnarled trunk deep within Sweet Apple Acres' back orchards, awaiting inspiration. >Leaves rustled in the breeze. The drooping sun gleamed off of a nearby pond like molten gold. The cries of saddened fillies hung in the air. A perfect evening. >Wait a minute. Anonymous
Got any fics that'll make me do this?
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1ePqLljvNGU Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5938752 >You're on your feet in seconds. You knew the crusaders when you heard them, but hearing the cheery trio cry was completely new, and kind of scary. "Girls?"
>A choked gasp rings out before Applebloom's voice twangs through the air like an arrow. >"It's Anon! He'll know what ta do!" >You start walking in the direction of the cries, but only get a few steps before the galloping threesome almost bowls you over. >"Anon,wewereoverbytheclubhouseandwe-" >"-Scootaloowasdoin'atrickan'-" >"-SweetiebellecameouttanowhereandIhadto-" >"-Applebloomtriedtocatchhimbuthefellsofast-" >"-Ahthinkhebrokeawingand-" "GIRLS! One at a time!"
>Silence falls for but a second, before the fillies shout in sync- >"WE KILLED A BABY BIRD!" >"These things happen," you want to say. "The world is cruelest to the young," you think. >But six watery eyes are peering at you from another world. Looking at you like you and you alone can defy the natural order. >Three little girls stare up at you, expecting nothing less than miracles. >Confound these p0nies, they drive you to hope. "Show me."
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>>5938805 >Barely two inches high. >Scarcely a wisp of down on it's head. >A wing bent in FAR more places than it should be. >And shrieking like a banshee. >This poor chick was doomed. >"Anon, you can fix him, right?" >"Just listen to him, it sounds like it hurts so bad!" >"He'll be able to fly when his wing gets better, won't he?" >You knew it was almost hopeless, but telling the girls that would crush them. "I'm not a doctor, girls. I can't do anything for him on my own."
>They looked at you like you'd just cancelled hearth's warming eve. Your heart felt like it was in a vice. "That's why I'm taking him to Fluttershy's place right now, okay?"
>Their faces relax, and so does your chest. >"Why didn't we think of that?" >"Ah told ya anon would know what to do!" >"YAAAAY!" "Girls, shhhh. You're going to scare him worse than he already is. All of you get home, eat dinner and go to bed. I'll meet you tomorrow at Sugarcube corner for breakfast, and we'll talk about him then, okay? I'm buying."
>They all nod their assent, before trotting off. >Leaving you all alone in the fading light, with a hatchling whose remaining life could be counted in hours. Anonymous
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>>5938759 http://pastebin.com/jUTh1Jdi Anon, Gilda, and Rainbow Dash threesome.
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>>5938840 >You scoop him up gently, rousing a new round of squawks and shielding him from the chill of dusk. >It was already too late to get to fluttershy's cottage before she bedded down for the night, but you hoped she'd understand why you woke her up. >Two miles never felt so far. >You didn't dare run, for fear of hurting the chick more, or gods forbid DROPPING it. >Some time later, the cottage comes into view. Dim view. The sun is long gone. >You come to the door, knocking with one hand while the other cups the quiet baby bird. >Quiet. >Baby birds are never quiet. >Shit. "Fluttershyyyy!"
>Through the windows on her door, you see light come bouncing down the stairs, followed shortly by a slowly flapping yellow pegasus. >There's no time for this. You open her door and walk in. >"A-Anon? What are you doing here this time of night?" >She's getting that look again. "Not that, 'Shy. Come here, this is kinda serious."
>Her entire demeanor changes when you reveal the chick. >"Ohmygosh, Anon, table, now." [spoilers]sorry for sporadic post length, i cannot into field length errors[/spoilers]
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>>5938915 >Lights come on all around her dining table, giving it the same level of illumination as a doctor's office. >The sudden shine has the chick squawking again before you can even set him down. >At least he's alive. >You're soon knocked out of the way as fluttershy flits about the table, doing her checkup. >"Anon, this chick is way too healthy to have been kicked out of the nest, How did he get this broken wing?" "Well, the girls sort of knocked him out of his tree."
>You weren't even looking at her, but you could still feel her sudden stare freezing your blood. Defensive maneuvers! "It was an accident, 'Shy. You know how rambunctious they get. They came to get me as soon as it happened."
>"Oh." >A couple of minutes passed in silence, with you leaning uncomfortably against a wall as Fluttershy finished up her work. "Is he going to make it?"
>A small squeal escapes Fluttershy as she whips around to face you. Did she forget you were here? >"He's hurt pretty bad, but nothing internal, just that one wing. I'll have to keep a close eye on him, but the fact that he was so healthy to start with will probably be what saves him." >"That, and how quickly you brought him to me, that is." "Thank the girls for that. It's hard to say no when they give you those puppydog eyes. I'll be back tomorrow to check on him, and the Crusaders will probably be with me. Have a good night, Fluttershy."
>"Wait anon, are puppydog eyes your-" >You shut the door behind you, cutting her off. apparently i cannot into spoilers either Anonymous
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5938971 >You arrive at Sugarcube Corner the next morning to find the crusaders have already been there for an hour. >Mrs. Cake gives a sigh of relief when you walk in, though whether it's because you're there to remove the girls or pay their tab, you can't tell. >Seriously, how do three fillies eat two dozen cinnamon rolls? >"ANON!" >The impact of their voices only hits you a second before they do. >"How's firewing?" >"Is he ok?" >"Did Fluttershah put his wing in a cast?" >They already named it. >That little fucker had better have lived through the night. "Girls, DOWN. Fluttershy said he'd probably make it, but he's so young it's going to be a while before we can be sure."
>"Can we see him?" "It's still early, let me have a bite to eat and we'll all head out there, okay?"
>Dropping a couple of shortstacks of bits on the counter, you get a couple of rolls for yourself and a hot mug of cocoa, before sitting back down at the girls' table. >You did your best to keep your mouth full any time they asked you a question, so soon they went off on a tangent about all the things they were going to do with their new avian friend when he got better. >Years of cynicism were nothing in the face of the unbridled hope and enthusiasm your filly friends put out. Before long, your rolls were gone and you too were talking like the chick was already healed. >You four found your way to your friend's cottage with a new-found pep in your step. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939007 >The scenery on the way out to the cottage always entranced you. Everything outside of P0nyville proper was so lush it almost hurt your eyes to look at it. >You didn't even know how close you were to your destination until- >"FLUTTERSHY!" >If you weren't so busy recoiling at the force of their combined shout, you'd wonder how they synchronize like that all the time. >The trio is mobbing the rapidly-panicking pegasus by the time you come to your senses again. You rush over, hoping to catch her before she has another panic attack. >"Is he eatin' all right?" >"Did he stop crying?" >"How's his wing?" "Girls!"
>Fluttershy's eyes lock on you as the filly mosh pit dissipates around her. It's a look of relief, not lust. >Good, apparently having the girls with you curbed 'Shy's impulses like you'd hoped. "Hey Fluttershy. How is he, and can the girls see him? I think we'll both be beaten senseless if you say no."
>"He's... he's okay. He's in a cage in my room, resting. You girls can see him, but you have to be quiet. Any more stress could make him hurt himself worse." >A near silent chorus of "yes ma'am" rises from the girls, and Flutters leads you into her house and up the stairs. ...
>The fillies all gathered around "Firewing's" cage, whispering words of encouragement and pride. >From a ways back you stood, a small smile on your face, Fluttershy leaning softly into you. "He IS going to be okay, right?"
>"Yes," came the hushed response. "But it's a good thing they're so enamored with him, that wing won't support him for some time, and he'll never fly quite as well as he should." "It's terrible that it had to happen this way, but I think the responsibility will do them a lot of good."
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939051 >Back outside, the girls are practically hopping over each other in excitement. >"I'm so glad he's gonna get better!" >"Fluttershy, how long before he starts getting feathers?" >"What is he, a robin? OOoohh, maybe he's a bluejay!" >Fluttershy silences them all just by clearing her throat. You really need to figure out how she does that, sometime. >"Girls, while it is good that you saved the little critter, you need to realize that you were responsible for him getting injured in the first place." >The sea of smiles they wore moments ago evaporated, the cold bedrock of srsface beneath shining through. >"In fact, were it not for Anonymous here being at the right place, at the right time, that hatchling would have died before any one of you could have gotten him to me." >Now they were on the brink of tears. >"You can spend the next few years apologizing to 'firewing' by taking care of him when he needs your help, but right now I think you need to thank Anon for saving him." >She doesn't even finish the sentence before you're on your back on the grass, smothered by fur and feathers. >"THANK YOU SO MUCH ANON!" >"I DON'T KNOW WHAT WE'D DO WITHOUT 'YA!" >"COOLEST. MONKEY. EVER." >Even fluttershy ends up on you, calling you "really wonderful" before whispering something about fetishes and filly piles in your ear. >But you don't even notice. >Deep in your brain, cogs are turning. >Right place... >Right time... >Saving the day... >You sit bolt upright, and fillies go flying like some sort of technicolor grenade just went off. "Girls, do you want to come help me write about this?"
>"What, like a letter to Celestia?" asks Sweetie Belle. "We can do one of those too, if you want, but I had something different in mind."
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939077 >Year Three in Equestria. >In hindsight, this should have been the first thing you wrote. >Hell, maybe the only thing you wrote. >Your critics panned it, of course. Called it "Frivolous," and "Sappy." >And it was. >Didn't stop Celestia from making it into the first ever "Royal Recommended Read," though. >It only made sense that the princess would like it. It was almost written FOR her. >An immortal creature, from another planet. >Irrevocably different from p0nykind, even if he looks just like them. >Who has dedicated the entirety of his impressive lifespan to creating peace. >Adamantly committed to the virtues of non-violence and self-sacrifice. >Garnering assistance from equine "companions," so that he can accomplish more than he ever would on his own. >Always arriving just in the nick of time, because time is the one thing he'll never run out of. >He is The Doctor, and in Equestria at least, you are his voice. >Best of all, even though you borrowed the original concept, all the stories are your own, so you don't really feel like you're cheating. >Well, almost all. >Turns out pretty much everyone is terrified of statues that move when you aren't looking. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939131 >You'd love to say using the CMC as inspiration for the doctor's companions was a stroke of genius, but it was just luck. >Just like you being in the back woods of an orchard on a fine fall day. >The girls gave you a font of material to draw from, both from their personal foibles, and the intricacies of their characters. >Moreover, they loved to help you write, and the entire town was overjoyed that they had found a constructive outlet for their energy. >The only real issue you had with them was the constant bickering over whose Up-aged self-insert "companion" would be in each new book. >It turns out having Celestia recommend your story gets it purchased by every school, library, and private collector in all of Equestria. >Which in turn gives you a license to print money with each new book in the series... >But also means you have to decide if the Doctor will be travelling with "Bright Blossom," "Silversong," or "Hangtime." >Being the author meant you had final say in the matter, but trying to decide with each of them pleading their case simultaneously was tough. >Some days you wouldn't be surprised if they all got cutiemarks relating to pouty faces or teary eyes. >Luckily, you had enough bits now to just send them out for lunch when they couldn't make a decision themselves, and you had to make the final call. >Which is to say, pretty much every time. Murphy
>Ahh, the afterlife. Just as you'd hoped; colorful, inhabited by cutesy little critters of all sorts, and poisoned by your very existence. Grass withered and died as you stepped on it, and your robes, more in-tact than they were when you'd obtained them, seemed to blow forth a wind of chilling air. Ah, it was good to be a Lich. >A wild grin spread across your face- something you'd not been able to achieve since your joints started to decay- and you sped off into the forest before you, cackling like a madman all the way. >You'd earned this. >Twilight was awoken by a frenzied pounding at her door. In a haze of post-sleep confusion, she fell from her bed, still tangled in bed-sheets. >"H- whassah, eee! Who?!" she screeched, flailing her limbs in an attempt to fend off an unknown assailant. "WHOSSERRE?" >"TWILIGHT! TWI, OPEN UP! WE REALLY GOTTA TALK 'BOUT THIS!" shouted a drawling voice from the lower level, from which Twilight assumed the knocking was originating. >Finally managing to free herself from her cloth prison, Twilight got up, stumbled to the window, and glared at the orange menace below her. >"IT'S THE MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT, APPLEJACK- WHAT DO YOU WANT?" >"Somethin' ah've never seen before just made a nest in mah orchard!"
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939182 >Year five in Equestria. >The girls had been away for three weeks now. >Giving them co-author credit on the novels had not only boosted their self-esteem and given you an excuse to set them each up with some savings, but helped the world put a friendly face to the names on the covers. >And when bookstores had sent requests for release party appearances, you suggested they go without you, preferring to stay back and keep hard at work. >That was before you remembered how intimidating silence can be when trying to write. >You paced. >You stalked. >You lazed about. >You caught yourself looking morosely at the bed you'd moved into the spare room over a year ago, after Scootaloo had crashed on your couch for a week straight, still too proud to admit she had essentially moved in. >You lounged in the hammock out back, listening to the wind rustling through the leaves. >You made a third pot of coffee. >It's so damn quiet you can't hear yourself think. >Or maybe it's that knocking that's stopping you from thinking. >Knocking. >If anyone had been watching you, they would have seen a dust cloud rise from your feet as you shot toward the door. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939320 >Aww, it's just the mailmare. >Wait, the mailmare. >YESSSSS. >Between the realization that she had been the catalyst for your original bout of authorial good fortune, and the fact that her daughter had made a mission out of getting a signed copy of ALL of your books, you had warmed to the blonde. >Over time, her irrepressable snarky mood had made her one of your favorite sights here in P0nyville. >Not to mention the most dependable, being bound for your house no less than 3 times a week. "Well hello there, Ditzy! How are you today?"
>"Pretty good, mister Anon! Got another stack of fanmail for ya today." "Thank you, my good mare! Anything large or strange looking?"
>"Nuffin' ovver den 'oo," she mumbles, teeth occupied with the strings binding your bundle. "Miss Doo, you wound me" you say, gripping your chest in mock distress as your other hand grabs the parcel. "I have told you time and again, I'm perfectly average for a human!"
>"Which makes you about as normal as me, around here." >You'd scold her for her self-depreciation, but it would fall on deaf ears. You just run with it instead. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939348 "Let us two run away then, we aliens and outcasts! I shall buy us a home in the mountains, where we can be free to be the freaks we were born as, away from judgement and shame!"
>"Yeah yeah, can it, loverboy." >You shoot her a harsh glance, then pivot and begin walking back into your house, holding your fanmail high in the air. "Fine then, if even you won't have me, I guess I'll have to go to the only ones who truly understand me. My hordes of raving fans!"
>You turn back around to shut the door, only to see her standing in the way, a large-ish hardback wrapped in a hoof. >"You know the deal, mister. This fan comes first, got it?" She says, waggling her daughter's copy of your latest release. >You let out a laborious sigh. The things you do for hoof-made muffins. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939383 >Back inside, you snip the ties on your package, sending fan-mail spilling across your table. >Immediately, you notice a dark brown envelope with a wax hourglass seal holding it shut. >A letter from the girls! >Despite your excitement, you manage to open it without breaking the wax, and whip the note inside loose. "Hey anon... great time... tons of fans... miss you... Important news... coming home... TOMORROW!
>It is an effort not to dance in your own living room. >You suddenly remember you are all alone, and quit holding back. >A minute later, dance complete, you notice a postscript. "Please meet us for lunch at the Corner, One'o'clock sharp."
>You glance at the clock. >Twenty one hours remain. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939402 >The next day finds you clean shaven, dressed in your best clothes, and waiting at Sugarcube corner an hour and a half early. >Pinkie tries to chat you up, but you're so preoccupied looking around for any hint of your co-authors that she actually takes a hint for once and leaves you be. >Before long, Mr. Cake comes out with a mug of chocolate milk, and refuses to take a single bit for it. >"They'll be here soon, anon. Breathe deep and relax, okay? >The look on his face says volumes. Species and actual parentage aside, he recognizes an impatient father figure when he sees one. All dads do. >You force yourself to calm down, and damn if that chocolate milk doesn't do wonders for your nerves. >You've finally gotten truly involved in picking at your cuticles when the bell over the door rings out... >And Cheerilee walks in. >"Oh, hello Anon! Are you here waiting for the crusaders too? "Too? They sent you a letter as well?"
>"Yes, it was very vague though, they kept mentioning a surprise, and that I needed to be here at- "One o clock sharp?"
>"Yeessss..." A mixture of annoyance and concern comes over her face. "Is everything alright, Miss Cheerilee?"
>"Fine. Just don't accept anything they offer you to drink, alright?" >Your eyes meet, and you both end up gazing at your mug. >Her nervous chuckle puts you on edge all over again. Anonymous
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>>5934701 no problem, but the most important thing is to get that paste bin account. otherwise it will be a royal pain in the ass to follow you.
and as far as the pov switch, it may take you out a bit but not as much as wondering whos eyes you are looking through at the time.
>be XXXXXXX that is a bit looked down on when useing in a more... serious story.
but ---- XXXXX pov ----- is a bit more accepted.
keep in mind that the readers arent in your head where you aalread know everything that is happening and whos eyes, we learn it as we read, and when you went to the 3 of them in one area, it took 2 or 3 likes for me to figure out who exactly was thinking.
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939419 >"ANON!" >FINALLY >You look up to see your favorite three fillies trotting toward you, dragging a... something, on scoots' ride. "Girls, it's great to see you! It feels like you've been away for ages!"
>"I know, right?" Chimes in Sweetie Belle. >There are lots of things you expect from the CMC. >Smiling silence isn't one of them. >You feel yourself start to sweat. >"So girls, what's this big announcement you have for Anonymous and I?" >You silently thank the universe for cool-headed schoolmarms. >The girls however just smile bigger and bigger, until finally Scootaloo realizes their error. >"Guys, they can't see them! TURN!" >With a look of realization, the other two turn ninety degrees in sync with Scootaloo. >Revealing three shiny new cutie marks! >An orange and purple lightning bolt. >A branch with a white flower and a red apple hanging from it. >And a stylized quarter note... >Each on a backdrop of an unfurled scroll. "Girls, this is great! I'm so happy for you!"
>You can't help but come out of your seat, scooping up an armload of filly, even if it's a much bigger armload than it used to be. >"So what was it, girls?" Inquires Cheerilee. "How'd you figure out your talents, let alone all at the same time? "What are they, anyway? I could guess, but I want to hear you guys say it!"
>They look at each other carefully, before Scootaloo makes the decision to speak up. >"Well, it's kind of your doing, old man." Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939438 >"See, you sent us off, all on our own, for the book tour!" >"And before you'd always been there with us, and the attention had been on you." >"An' it seemed like it was all big important ponies that wanted ta meetcha!" >"But when they put US on the headline as the authors visiting, the crowds changed overnight!" >"All the dumb stuffy newsponies quit showing up, and the fancy richy-rich types, too." >"But every one that didn' show got replaced by a filly or colt! Or two!" >"And nobody talked about the writing style, or the 'voice' of the book, or any of that stuff." >"They all just wanted to tell us what parts they liked, an' what parts were most importan' to 'em!" >"And you wouldn't BELIEVE how many foals got inspired by our books!" >"These two sisters decided to be nurses after reading the first aid scene in-" >"And a colt got his cutie mark right there in line when he corrected us on the use of a-" >"A filly in MosCow wants to start a printing press so she can-" "Girls, FOCUS."
>They laugh at themselves and their excitement. It's been so long since you heard them do that that your eyes start to flood. >"Anyway," says Applebloom, "We were having dinner one night at a hotel and were talkin' about it, and we realized somethin'." >"We'd been spending so much time trying to figure out what we were good at, we couldn't see that we were already doing it." >"And that is?" asked Cheerilee. >"Guiding." says Sweetie Belle. >"Helpin'" says Applebloom. >"Teaching." says Scootaloo. >That's when you lose it. >Your loose grasp tightens. >You've never been prouder. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939460 >From behind you, Cheerilee's voice wavers. You see why she was the only other one they invited. >"Girls, that's a wonderful story. I'm so happy you've found what really makes you feel right. I'm even more happy that it's teaching! Celestia knows the world never has enough teachers. But I still have one question." >"What's that, Miss Cheerilee?" gasps Sweetiebelle from inside your bear hug. >"What's on the scooter?" >The trio gasps in unison, before evaporating from your arms, and dragging the item in question forward. >"Here's the gymnasium!" shouts Scootaloo, pointing with a hoof. >"And the amphitheater faces west for evening performances!" squeeks Sweetie Belle. >"The library's gonna have three whole floors!" explodes Applebloom. "Wait, girls, wait. What are we talking about here?"
>"Well," starts Sweetie, "We all know our talent is teaching now, but we're best at it when we work together!" >"An' if we just took teaching jobs, we'd have ta go ta all sorts of different towns just to find jobs!" >"And that'd just be lame!" >"So we were thinking, what if we could teach together, and bring all the foals to us?" "That's a nice idea, girls, but there's nowhere that could hold that many kids at once around here."
>"We know, anon." >You suddenly register that Scootaloo has been pointing to the big arch at the front of the model for a few seconds now. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939504 >You lean in close, seeing a small placard on the gate. >The print is tiny, but after a second, you make out the words just fine. "Crusader's Academy?"
>They're all just looking at you, smiling again. >You set your jaw, and stand up. >Their eyes follow you, their smiles faltering a bit. >They almost collapse when you walk slowly to the door. >"Anon, wait! What's wrong?!" >You turn back to them. "The bank's going to want to know why I'm emptying my savings." You say with a smile. "Would you girls care to come help explain?"
Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
>>5939524 final post, i still feel kinda ambivalent on this, so feel free to disregard it as you see fit >Year 53 in the Equestrian kingdom. >Approaching your house is an elegant threesome. >For years you've shared lunch, weekly at the least. >Until, that is, you joined the deceased. >When their knocks go unanswered, they pay it no mind. >They could not know what they were soon to find. >At long last they enter, as they feel their worry rise. >They find you at your desk, all limp limbs and grey eyes. >Their throats become tight as their tears start to flow, >And Applebloom thinks 'you WOULD be first to go.' >Your last will and testiment is shockingly clear >Personal effects go to those you held dear >But all of your savings, every last golden bit >Goes to the job you never could quit >Scootaloo made plans for your final donation >A memorial halfpipe (and first aid station) >And Cheerilee, the only one not startled >Commissions a monument of iron and marble >As the pallbearers put you in a hole in the dirt, Sweetie Belle sang you softly back into the earth. >Not a dirge writ of tears on a parchment of hurt, but a lullaby, to summon dreams of sugar and mirth. >In a glass case, your typewriter, your final thought still inside it. >"A life's story's always better when you've got friends to help you write it." Leucine !BX6hHNiz6.
>>5935739 You've certainly not offended or insulted me in any way. In fairness, you're not going to last long on the site with a thin skin, anyway.
Whatever about your praise, I do agree with your point on writers having identifiable styles.
As for my writing lacking in quality, I have no hesitation in agreeing.
I rushed this, I didn't like it but I told myself I had to just get something done and get back into things.
I do feel like I've written myself into a corner somewhat but there are still far more elegant ways of extricating myself.
I'm most likely going to update Even Nightmares End next, seeing as that has a tighter focus than some of my other fics and shouldn't prove quite as troublesome to write.
But thank you for coming straight out and saying what you did. It's refreshing to be told that your writing is lacking.
Polite sage.
>>5935739 You've certainly not offended or insulted me in any way. In fairness, you're not going to last long on the site with a thin skin, anyway.
Whatever about your praise, I do agree with your point on writers having identifiable styles.
As for my writing lacking in quality, I have no hesitation in agreeing.
I rushed this, I didn't like it but I told myself I had to just get something done and get back into things.
I do feel like I've written myself into a corner somewhat but there are still far more elegant ways of extricating myself.
I'm most likely going to update Even Nightmares End next, seeing as that has a tighter focus than some of my other fics and shouldn't prove quite as troublesome to write.
But thank you for coming straight out and saying what you did. It's refreshing to be told that your writing is lacking.
Polite sage. Metanon !5/Bvl5ikHE
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>>5939658 I would love It If you updated Even Nightmares End.
Honestly, over 500 threads and almost no stories with Anon x Nighmare Moon...Is there something about NMM that makes people not want to write about her or what?
Murphy
>>5939301 >APPLES! This forest had APPLES! What a delight! You nestled yourself tightly into the naturally grown seat high in the branches of one tree, and started picking the rotund beauties from their perches. In five minutes, you'd eaten ten apples down to the core, and a pile of them was slowly growing at the base of the tree. As you thought and observed, the trees were too precisely spread and cropped out for this to be a forest. Perhaps a farm? Orchard, that was the word. >Wait, an orchard? An APPLE orchard? If this was the afterlife, there wouldn't be any signs of civilization anywhere. And these trees would be growing PEARS. This... Was this the afterlife? You suddenly became very wary of the goings-on around you, aware of the all too familiar thump-thump of horse hooves upon soil. Oh, just fantastic. The only ones rich enough to afford horses were of authoritative positions, and they weren't too fond of you and your collegues. >And you'd already put up a big red X, in the form of the pile of apple cores below you. ---
>"Applejack, are you sure it wasn't just your imagination?" Twilight grumbled, still upset about the sleep she'd been denied. >"I'm sure, Twi! It was like a big, hairless Diamond Dog, but with some kinda fancy clothes!" she replied, picking up pace. "What if it's after mah apples! What if it's after mah family!" >A genuine tone of voice. Twilight recognized it; her friend was telling the truth, and this was a real fear she felt. Which meant... there was something out there- maybe not exactly what she thought it was, but something large and something dangerous, nonetheless. >But what?
>>5939839 Yeah, she's an evil bitch.
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>>5939839 They get intimidated by the character they are writing and daren't push on any further lest they draw her ire.
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>5939618 You know there are other evil ponies who could use some lovin.....
Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
>>5939874 But all antagonists have 10/10 asses.
>>5939931 Discord didn't have an ass.
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>>5939931 I would personally give them 6/7 asses
Also I'll try to get into that robot anon story possibly I doubt it Gadget !!hdKi+APGN/w
>>5939965 My statistic was made from a sample size of 2
Anonymous
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Hey guys you guys I just watched the first 2 episodes of that new cartoon My Little Pony Friendship Is Magic and i got the greatest idea...
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>>5939658 Oh I'm not really worried. I've lurked 4chan for several years, ever since 5chan disappeared if anyone remembers, and I began posting with frequency after /mlp/ opened it's doors. My politeness actually provides entertainment sometimes when I display calm benevolence in the face of adversity. Hilarious stuff.
You might remember me when I came at you with a "bone to pick" about "For the Sake of a Lady" that one day. I just lack the devil may care attitude and general disregard for others that seems to be the case with Anons from places like, for example, /b/. If Nether saw what I said to him in the TF thread he knows who I am even more in regards to AiE. Brew, Violin, and WNrite might be able to shed light on my identity too.
The thing about not being offensive is that I wanted the post to actually serve a purpose. If it came off as dickish or anything than I might as well have just said "ur story suks dik kil urself" or something unhelpful like that. Criticism isn't too difficult if I managed to do it properly, but wording it so the writer would actually take you seriously can be painful.
It has to be brutally honest, but at the same time provide a constructive piece of information on where the writer is lacking. Be honest, if I had just said "that piece really lacked a lot of your usual flare. What the hell happened to you man? Get back to your notepad and do it over so it gives me the same amount of feels I'm used to seeing from you. Faggot." then you would have glanced over my post easily.
Fair, honest, and helpful is the game, but you can't sugarcoat it OR bash the writing mercilessly caked with hate.
I normally post as Anon in AiE, but using my write trip served an important purpose I think. With that I'm going back to lurking. Polite sage for non-story related posting.
Bastinator !!TsN5GKrg++f
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Parking and trying to finish up Chapter 2. Not much to go. I'm heading close to my usual limit so I don't know exactly where I should end this chapter.
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>>5933437 Awesome... Awesome to the max.
>>5935036 Leucine...
Slightly below average... But it will suffice for now... >>5936456 FINALLY, YES! >>5939839 http://pastebin.com/WNUncNP7 Kyonko802 !kiDsejwBiU
Okay, now that I'm stuffed full of turkey and other assorted foods I'll get writing.
JazzTeeth !nzpAbPYVzs
*sits down and stares patiently*
Anonymous
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>>5940881 With you and Leucine around, now all we need is a token appearance from OneTripPony to really make this thread something special.
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>>5940879 That picture always screams that there is a story behind it that I do not know. /sigh
Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I
Still stuck on Lady's MAnon Ch8, so have some Daring Do instead
Anonymous
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>>5939575 Holy shit Met.
I dont fucking know why, but this hit me right in the goddamn feels. My keyboard is fucking drenched in teats of bittersweetness.
Amazing story as always Anonymous
Murphy
>>5939858 >Panic filled your mind; so soon after your supposed passing, you had no idea of how reliable your magic would be. Even if you could test them, you wouldn't- you still held out hope that those pursuing you wouldn't notice the incredibly conspicuous pile of apple waste nestled below you. "Roll a one, roll a one!" you pleaded softly.
>The horses got closer. Thump, thump, thump, thump. You couldn't tell of that was the hooves or your heart making that noise. You were nervous, but you couldn't pin down why; you could, most likely, take on a few adventurers hand to hand, if the moment required it, and your magic, should it work, could take out a town. Why did two wandering heroes worry you? You'd put 'em in a whirl and sprint as far as these renewed legs could carry you, and hope to any god willing to pity you that they wouldn't give chase. >"Applejack! I think it's in this one!" >Well... Show time. ---
>As the pair neared the tree Twilight had indicated, a hulking creature swooped forth, body blazing in energy and looking to be something straight from a nightmare. "DROP YOUR WE- horses?"
>The thing's imposing form diminished, and the energy receeded into it. It looked... puzzled. "Horses?" it repeated. "And... no riders? What an oddity."
>All the ponies could do was look on in horror as the monster advanced upon them, crouched, and scrutinized them carefully. With a decisive motion, he thrust forth one of his upper legs, then smiled comfortingly. "Hello."
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>>5940022 Yes and
absolutely. lovelymuffins !loveonoRT2
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I have awakened from my slumber. I will begin immediately on writing cute little mane 6 fillys
Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I
So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 00:59:17 No. 5941305 Report >>5941074 Dropping
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http://pastebin.com/dE8CeHx5 “Did we have to get up this earlyyyyy?” you whine tiredly as you walk along side Daring on a road leading through the noisy jungle
>The sun has hardly even made it over the horizon and you’ve been on the road for an hour now >And by god do your feet hurt… >Daring rolls her eyes with a sigh before looking back up at you >”You know, we could have left at noon maybe? When it’s hot enough to fry your brain and make it nice and humid, want that next time?” she asks with a condescending look >Heat? >Fuck that noise >But there has to be a way to get the better of this argument >Right? >Right..? >…You just can’t win can you? >You cross your arms in irritation and grumble while the beige mare grins triumphantly, putting a bit more spring in her step >So far, this whole “Live an Indiana Jones movie” thing has been boring and tedious >The heat… >The jungle… >The effort… >The spiders that are so big that they can eat dogs… >Oh wait, they had those at home in Ohio >Still hate them, hairy dickweeds >Almost half an hour is spent with no talking, the crunching of the gravel road and the sounds of the jungle wildlife providing background noise while the sun rises higher into the sky >Time to break that 1/x
Murphy
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>>5941118 Should I end the chapter here, or should I get the ponies' reactions in there, too?
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:00:34 No. 5941326 Report >>5941305 “Say Daring” you say, not breaking your stride
>”Hmm?” “Where are we going anyway?”
>”To mount Kracontonis of course!” She exclaims as if the fact were as obvious as the wings on her back >Oh >Now if only you knew where that was >You let out a short laugh “Where?” you repeat with a grin, knowing it’ll get on her nerves
>Daring groans >She takes off her pith hat and pulls a slightly crinkled map from it >Replacing her hat, she opens the map >You bend down some to get a better look and to hold the map for her >”We” Daring points a hoof near the green printed middle of the map ”Are here.” >”Kracontonis,” she drags her hoof up to the top of the map, where the land was brown and mountain filled, one standing taller than the others “Is here” >That’s… >You look at the distance scale on the map >Oh wait, you can’t read p0ny >Funny writing it is, flowing script and what you swear is hieroglyphs blended together seamlessly, at first glance one would think the spoken language would flow like crystal clear water and sound melodic from whoever spoke it, unlike the english that it’s really associated with >Still SOL when it comes to reading it however ”What’s the scale say?”
>She glances at it “About 10 miles an inch” >You take your thumb and measure the distance on the map with it 2/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:02:34 No. 5941363 Report >>5941326 >1 >3 >6 >8… >9… >She’s joking >She’s joking right? “We…are going to walk 90 miles to this place?”
>”Mmhm at the rate we’re going it should only take, don’t give me that look!” she says when she sees your disbelieving face >Walking 90 FUCKING miles? >In the jungle no less? “You really expect us to make it there on foot?”
>”Anon don’t be such a wuss. It’s not like we’re going to do it all in one go, we’ll stop once or twice” >No >What sort of fresh hell is this? “Once…or twice?” you squeak out “Across 90 miles..?”
>Daring looks up at you, annoyed “Didn’t I already say that?” >She did this for a living, you didn’t >And she expected you to do this? >The nerve >But you are out of options, leave the mare and you’re on your own in an unfamiliar world >You sigh, pinching the bridge of your nose as you hand her the map back, which she stuffs back into her hat >Here we go… ~~~~~~~~~
>Nearly 6 long, grueling, sweaty hours later at high noon, you and Daring have come to what seems to be a turbulent river crossing the road >…With no bridge >Ahead of you slightly is a brown earth p0ny stallion with a map cutie mark wearing a full pack eyeing some rocks sticking out of the rushing water >He’s not going to do it is he? “Hey buddy!”
>Both he and Daring look at you “There are easier ways to kill yourself you know.”
>The stallion frowns >“I was going to jump it!” he calls back “Exactly”
3/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:03:58 No. 5941388 Report >>5941363 >His frown morphs into a scowl while Daring facehoofs >The stallion trots up to you >”Look buddy I don’t know what your problem is but-Daring?!” you cuts himself off mid sentence, looking wide eyed at your travel partner >Said mare looks at him confusedly >”Urm, do I know you?” >”Yeah! Don’t you remember? It’s me! Land Mark!” >Daring blinks, then looks around awkwardly >”Oh, hey Mark…” >He trots up and nuzzles her, happy as can be >Daring just forces a smile and bears with it >Ha, who is this guy? A fanboy? >You stifle a snicker at her discomfort >He pulls back and looks at you “So, who’s your weird friend?” >Weird? >No Anon, no kicking p0nies in the face, that what got you in trouble last time >Daring glances at your now frowning face “Mark, this is Anonymous. Anon, this is Mark” >Land Mark sticks out a hoof “Nice to meet you” >You smile and take the hoof in your hand, giving it a shake “I almost wish I could say the same”
>The small smile on his face dies >He pulls his hoof from you and looks back to Daring, twiddling his hooves >”So erm Daring? I was thinking…um, maybe you would want to get back together sometime?” Mark says, practically tripping over his words >Wait, get BACK together? >That’s too fucking rich! 4/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:05:48 No. 5941432 Report >>5941388 >You turn around with a hand clamped around your mouth, trying your hardest not to laugh >Turning back around, you’re just in time to see Daring give him a sympathetic look so fake that she may as well have been wearing a mask >”Mark, you’re sweet and all but it just won’t work out, you know that” >He falters but bounces back quickly “Please?” >Wow he sounds pathetic >Reminds you of yourself in junior high… >Never again did you go to prom… >The pegasus mare drops any pretence of kindness, giving Land Mark a glare >”I said no, why don’t you go try your luck with the river rocks?” >Ow…poor guy… >What a crock of shit, you really didn’t think that “OOOOHHHHHH! REJECTED!”
>Land Mark reels back, looking almost ready to cry >Turning around, he raises his nose and trots back to the rocks >Out of the corner of your eye, you see a large shadow in the water lethargically making it’s way to the rocks >With surprising deftness, Land Mark hops several of the rocks, landing on one near the middle of the water before turning to look at you and Daring >The shadow is getting faster… >You nudge Daring and point to the water >She raises an eyebrow >”I know you’re just playing hard to get!” Mark yells from the rock, oblivious to the danger heading his way >”And when I discover all the stuff in the mountain, I know you’ll- SPLASH!
CHOMP!
5/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:07:36 No. 5941468 Report >>5941432 >In a fount of water a fish the size of an SUV jumps out of the water and swallows Land Mark whole before diving back into the river >Holy shit…did that just happen? >Face frozen in shock you look at Daring to see… >Her looking like nothing had happened? >Whoa damn “Um Daring? Your ex just got eaten”
>She gives you a deadpan look >”Trust me, He’ll be back… now, let’s get across the river” >What? “Whoa whoa whoa, you’re not serious”
>”Anon this river runs across the whole continent, we’re going over it” she says in a tone that leaves no room for argument >… “Ooooooh ho ho hoooo, how about no?”
>She raises an eyebrow, smirking “Scared?” “Well…”
>You give a clap of your hands and point at the rocks in the river “After watching your weenie ex boyfriend get wasted by a fish, yes I am”
>”Wuss!” “I thought we went over this?”
>Daring lets out a noise of frustration “It’s not even hard!” >Without waiting for a response, she runs to the riverbank and jumps halfway across, landing on a pointy rock and hopping the others to the opposite die of the water in hardly a second >”Come on!” She yells over the sound of the rushing water >Fuck >Walking to the edge of the water, it almost seems to be going faster now… “Aaraha haaa...! I don’t wanna do this!”
6/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:09:39 No. 5941503 Report >>5941468 >Calm down Anon, you can do this…” >Taking a deep breath, you hold your hands up face height and psych yourself up “It’s cool, I’ve got this, the only thing that can happen if I mess up is a watery grave…shit”
>Well that backfired >Time for plan B >Just do it >With a running start, you jump to the closest rock, flailing like plucked chicken >You land and almost slip on the slippery thing >You watch the water rage around your rocky perch, carrying away anything unlucky enough to get caught in it >Damn this water is menacing up close… >Ok, one down, a whole lot to go… >”Comon Anon! you can do it!” >Nice to see that one of you thinks so >Slowly, you make your way across one jump at a time with all the grace of a retarded kangaroo, almost taking a permanent drink more the once >Halfway, another shadow down the river begins making it’s way to you… “Oh shit!”
>It get larger, and larger, until a crocodile the size of a small apartment breaks the surface, it’s beady yellow eyes trained on you >It opens it’s mouth, showing off sword like teeth and growling loud enough to make your bones rattle >”ANON HURRY!” >Don’t need to be told that twice >You practically fly across the rocks as the croc thunders through the water at ridiculous speed, determined not to let it’s exotic meal escape >Then the worst possible thing happens >You slip… 7/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:13:07 No. 5941564 Report >You let out a short yell as you fall into the cold water >Vision at almost zero, you latch onto the nearest rock, your fingernails being ripped back from the force of your fear induced grip >The croc sees you in the water and doubles it’s pace, eyes gleaming with hunger >Oh dear god… >You’re going to die >”ANON GET OUT OF THERE!” Daring screams as she rushes to you >On your rock in a flash, she reaches out a hoof >You grab it and hold on for dear life >Face screwed up in concentration, Daring pulls with all her might, bringing you slowly up out of the water >You look over your saviors shoulder to see the croc jump out of the water in a titanic torrent of water, mouth turned to the side to snap both of you up >She looks and sees, her eyes widening in alarm >With one final pull, she bring you to the rock and you both jump to the next one >The croc’s jaws close around the old rock, pulverizing it in a cloud of stone shards and dust >It lands back in the water in a huge splash, surfacing and glaring balefully at you both before swimming away unfulfilled >With another jump. You and the beige mare land on the gravel road, Daring landing heavily on her side right before you both collapse, panting
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:14:02 No. 5941585 Report >>5941564 >You sit for a moment and shake, the harsh reality that you almost died making you think >This…this is no game >Those were real teeth that almost killed you >That water was fast enough to take you away >But did you have much choice on where you could go? >Not really, traveling with Daring is probably your only chance at making a life here >You bring a hand to your head, grimacing as your broken nails get jostled >And to think… first near death experience and you hadn’t even gotten to a temple or something yet >Fucking Christ man… >You turn to Daring, who looks just as worn out as you >She’s known you for hardly 2 weeks yet she saved your life… >You scoop a surprised Daring up into a hug “Holy…shit, Daring you’re the best you know that?”
>She chuckles “Oh I know, but could you let me go?... I think I messed up my wing…” >? >You release her and she steps back >Flexing her left wing, Daring winces and puts it back down >”Sprained… Comon, lets find a town and rest,” >”Gotcha” >You smirk “Wuss”
>You get a hoof to the head for that 9/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:15:24 No. 5941611 Report >>5941585 ~~~~~~~~~~~~
“So what’s the damage?” you ask as Daring walks into the small and rather bland hotel room you both rented in some small border town
>She shows you her wrapped up wing “Sprained, like I said, the doctor seemed a little unprofessional but this was pretty basic” “That sucks, oh well! Looks like we can’t head into any dangerous temples, cursed tombs, dragon dens, or the lairs of eldritch abominations any time soon huh?”
>Ha, beat that one >She snorts with a grin “You act like I haven’t done this stuff while injured before” >Dammit >So much for that >You sigh “So still going to the mountain place?”
>”Yup so you better rest up” She says cheerfully as she hangs up her shirt and hat, before heading into the bathroom, where you hear the shower start >You fall back onto your bed, hands on your face >After today you’re still on the fence about this >Pulling your hands away from your face, you look at the bandaged ends of your fingers >This is nothing compared to what could have happened >But… >The adrenaline…it felt good >And the chance for treasure and fame, a childhood dream of yours, it all just fell into your lap >What to do… >You need some time to clear your mind >Getting up out of the bed, you head for the door “Daring! I’m heading into town!” you call through the bathroom wall
>”Alright! Don’t get lost!” >With a nod, you head out 10/x
Fuck, I'm out of Daring Do pics Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I
So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:16:46 No. 5941626 Report >>5941611 >Out of the room and though the lobby, you walk out into the small, currently twilit town >Walking about at a sedate pace, you look at the various shops and such, seeing some interesting items and other things among the exotic shop keepers >A black plumed griffin selling “Dominion specialty” mead >A zebra giving a demonstration on his many colored potions >A pair of bipedal dogs hawking well made jewelry in rough speech >Always something new here >Passing one of the few shops with an actual building though, you see something in the window that catches your eye >Getting close to the window, you see a large kukri knife on display “Ohhhh, so…edgy”
>Looking down, you see the price tag and wince, 100 gold bits >If you remembered right, there are 10 copper bits to a silver, and 10 silver to a gold >Digging in your pockets you find… >2 silvers and a U.S. quarter >Shitballs >Wait… >You look at the quarter and think…could you get the knife for almost free? >…Yes, yes you could >With a face splitting grin, you walk into the shop >Dodging around shelves of curios and other customers who give you looks, you come to the end of the shop where a zebra stallion decked out in gold jewelry is looking over a p0ny statuette with a magnifying glass >He looks up at you and puts his things down “Something I can help you with my tall friend?” he asks with an airy tone 11/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:18:00 No. 5941645 Report >>5941626 >Ok, bullshit time >This is what you went to law school for >You school your face into a mask of udder indifference “Yes, I saw the curved knife in your window and found my interest piqued, care to tell me about it?” you say in a droning monotone voice
>He nods with an oily smile “Yes, fine thing it is, griffin work, high grade steel, very durable and it even come with an upkeep kit” >Interesting >You glance back at it “I see, but there is one problem…I do not have 100 gold”
>The zebra shakes his head “Then no sale can be made” >You raise a hand “I’m not done, I do believe I can offer something more valuable however”
>”Go on…” >You pull the quarter from your pocket and offer it to him >He looks it over with a scrutinizing eye >”A well struck coin no doubt, but what is it?” >Here we go, time for some improvising “A token from my lord, he owes anyone who owns it one favor, no matter what it is”
>”Oh really? And just who is this lord?” >Think fast! “Fortinbras Ophelia Rosenkranz, high sovereign of the nation of America” you say, thinking of the most complicated name you could
>Now the shop keeper seems interested “And what is within his power?” >This could be a stretch, but… “Anything” you say, still remaining monotone
>”Anything?” >You nod 12/x
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So Very Daring Ch 2 Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:19:18 No. 5941673 Report >>5941645 “Riches, power, America is the most powerful nation in the wartorn human world, and for good reason”
>”Human world?” >Home stretch, here we go! “Indeed, I was brought to this world by accident, and when a rescue party arrives, I can direct them to you”
>He narrows his eyes “If you suspect me of lying then ask yourself this, have you ever seen something like me?”
>He sighs, looking between the coin and you >“Anything…” he mumbles >”Why would you trade something like this for a knife?” >Easy “Immediate survival, supplies don’t get more basic than a good knife”
>Again he thinks >Comon take it… >Then a grin comes to his face >”Deal” ~~~~~~~~~~~~
>You make it back to the hotel room with your prize strapped to your belt to find Daring drying herself >”Hey Anon what…where did you get that?” she says, pointing at your belted knife “Well I may or may not have conned some shopkeeper
>She blinks >“Anon?” “Hmm?” you ask, heading to take your own shower
>”P0nies get strung up around here for that” >You stop dead “W-what?”
>”No joke” she says, her voice even >Silence rules for several seconds, then “So, up and out first thing tomorrow?”
>”Sounds like a plan” 13/13
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So Very Daring Ch 2 feedback Shinobi !0T26gAhS8I Thu 22 Nov 2012 01:21:12 No. 5941711 Report Anonymous
>>5941711 >Fortinbras Ophelia Rosenkranz >mfw Onimusha Nostalgia for ps2 and Indiana Jones at once.
I would love to see more of this
Anonymous
>>5941711 A whiny jerk adventuring with DD? Sounds cool, waiting patiently for more
Anonymous
>>5941711 Very well done, I've never read anything that had anything to do with Daring, but I liked it.
Moar I say!
Anonymous
Murphy
>>5941118 >Trying to be diplomatic got you what you'd only been able to achieve before through thorough showcasing of your powers; having those in your presence run screaming like frightened children as you reached out to shake their hands- hooves, rather. No riders in sight, examples of speech between one another, and the blatant showing of casual clothing- the hat that the orange one wore. Intelligent, if nothing else. "So much for first impressions." you sighed.
>Getting to your feet, you began to walk after them. You didn't try to call them- the only purpose that would serve was alerting others. That was, assuming that the girly screaming hadn't already woken up half of the closest settlement. With another sigh, you picked up your pace to a hasty jog, and, with a barn in sight, you heard the familiar sounds of a door slamming and civilians blubbering in terror. Yeah, being a Lich was just fantastic, all the time. ---
>"It's gonna eat us!" Applejack sobbed, huddling into a ball in the corner. "It's gonna skin us, cook us on a spit, and eat us!" >"Calm down, AJ, we don't know that! Maybe it's friendly?" Twilight tried to calm her friend, failing utterly. >Applejack started to shiver and rock, mumbling to herself, something far too quiet for anyone to hear. As the seconds passed, the sound of the creature outside became apparent. Hoofsteps came close to the barn door, a quick "thump-thump-thump" across the dirt. And, as she silently prayed that the thing would overshoot them and go anywhere but the barn, the steps stopped abruptly. A shadow slid under the door; that of the monster chasing them. Twilight closed her eyes, waiting for the door to splinter and crack away, and- "Okay, I know this looks bad, but let me explain."
Brew !!uj2g/ow68AK
>>5941711 Nice, I'm enjoying the way you've characterized Anon and Daring and the situation they're in.
>>5941711 SHINOBI I
LOVE d it SO much! DaringDo IS best book pone, after all.
Kinda makes me wanna write more Daring Adventure...
Shinobi, you magnificent bastard.
LOVE Murphy
>>5941997 >You sighed, then clicked two fingers together. With that, the door ceased to be, revealing the purple horse from earlier. You took a seat on the ground, smiling a muted smile. "I'd like to preface this by saying I'm not from here- though, that's obvious, isn't it?" you said with a soft chuckle. "To be honest, I'm not precisely sure why I'm here; I was under the impression that I was dead."
>"Dead?" "Indeed. I had allowed myself to pass on, and I had thought I would be allowed into the afterlife; either this is a Hell, of sorts, or the gods saw fit to extend my life. Again..."
>The purple one looked like she was about to say something, but, instead, she looked behind you, eyes wide. Turning to meet her gaze, your vision was filled by red fit for a demon, followed by black you'd seen only when reviving the dead. >"Nnnope." Anonymous
>>5941711 I'm not as big a fan of DD as most, but putting cocky expertise next to human naivete and arrogance works really freaking well.(seriously, a lawyer in the jungle? what is this, survivor?)
I'm waiting with bated breath for Ladies MAnon, but Do is a damn fine stopgap.
Murphy
>>5942801 Alright, that's the end of Chapter 1. Comments and criticisms are greatly appreciated.
Pastebin will be up in a bit, if anyone wants it.
Murphy
>>5941807 >First response >Got the Onimusha reference Mah nigga
>>5941911 This is taking SaP's updates slots for a while, so more to come
>>5941949 Then you've never read P0nygone, check his pastebin out sometime
>>5941989 Thanks
>>5942029 Thanks as well
>>5942484 LOVE you too P0nygone
In a not sexual way ? >>5942827 Thanks, I thought the contrast worked well too
Working on Lady's MAnon, don't you worry
>>5942484 >>5943025 ShinobixPonygone OTP?
>>5943356 >ShinobixPonygone >Not AetherxWuten Pls
Anonymous
>>5943445 inb4 AetherxWutenxShinobixPonygone gangbang fic
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>>5939699 whether or not you're dissatisfied to how it came out, know that I found it enjoyable.
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>5943445 >Aether x Wuten >Not Aether x Nether Tulpa x Wuten Do I need to throw that story out of Wuten's paste and into thread?
>>5943445 >>5943511 >>5943694 Guys, guys! Let's not worry argue about
LOVE !
We all LOVE each other. Some of us just LOVE more than others...
Also 3 hours until leaving until Saturday. Will try to get some work done on things. AT LEAST some narrations, those are backed up pretty badly...
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>>5943814 >Let's not worry argue ...I need to step away from the computer right now. Too wired...
Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
Hey, can I get a post count on this here thread? I'm posting from a public computer so I don't have 4chan X to help me out, and I'm thinking of posting a little one shot I may actually have completed. Thread seems kinda long, so if we're overdue for a new one I don't want to have to cut the story in half.
>>5943631 >You will never live a hectic day with Shinobi, that ends with everything being ok and you both crawling into a large bed for two >You will never get to snuggle up with Ponygone and feel the raw unbridled LOVE he has for you feelsbadman
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>>5943858 433 posts. 133 images. Post it.
Anonymous
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Alright, here goes Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:10:58 No. 5943975 Report Day technology in Equestria>You were lucky the day you were transported to Equestria, any other day and you might have lost everything, but instead? >You were accompanying your family on a camping trip that fateful day, so you had packed almost anything you could ever need for an extended stay outside civilized America. >Hell, you were only going as a favor to your little sister, you had moved out of the house years ago and didn’t have the greatest relationship with your parents. >In any case, one fall into a magic cave later and you found yourself in the magical world of Equestria with your laptop, electric razor, portable TV, a few game systems, iPhone, MP3 player and solar charger. >Basically you weighed down your backpack with enough electronics to blackout a small country. >It’s been several weeks since then and your integration into this new world was surprisingly easy. >You met the natives, multicolored p0nies with the gift of human speech. >Though you were clearly a being unlike any other the p0nies had seen before, they took your appearance in stride. >Theirs was a world with many unexplored regions left in it, strange and unknown beings were still being discovered daily. >With the help of several locals, you were quickly situated in the small town of P0nyville. >Life was pretty simple here, so you didn’t really have much desire to go back to your own shitty life. >Here it was easy to get a job, and you were working on paying off a new house within the month. >One p0ny in particular had taken an interest in you when she heard you were from a different world, Twilight Sparkle.
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Need to time my posts manually, this is hard Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:11:59 No. 5944001 Report >>5943975 >This world was possessed of a miraculous power, that of magic. >When you first saw it you were incredulous, when you saw Twilight demonstrate it for you, you were curious, when you saw a p0ny princess raise the sun on command, you gave up. >It was fucking magic, what did you care as long as it worked? >But when Twilight helped you move into your new house, she reacted similarly to your technology. >It was love at first sight. >You turned on your iPhone and Twilight fell in a trance. >Mesmerized by the lights and colors, she dropped everything she was doing to just observe the device, intently watching with a scrutinizing gaze as you played Angry Birds and Cut the Rope. >Then she asked how it worked. >You didn’t have any idea how it worked, you had worked in construction back home. >So you gave her the best answer you could think of, “Magic.”
>The first time she heard it, it gave her pause. >”But, how?” she asked. “I dunno, fucking magic,” was your response.
>”Then what kind of spells power this... machine? How can it perform so many functions? What makes the lights?” she asked. >Man, motherfuckin’ p0nies could move the fuckin’ sun, and she’s asking YOU how an iPhone works? “It’s magic, I ain't gotta explain shit.”
>Honestly, you probably could have just told her that you didn’t know, but watching her squirm was actually pretty funny. >She cringed, and in this moment you had set something off in the little purple p0ny. >Little could you know how important your moment of impertinence would ultimately be. Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
Oh wait nevermind, there's a built in post timer now? Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:13:08 No. 5944024 Report >>5944001 >In the following weeks, she began visiting you almost daily. >Your work paid well, and you only needed to show up every other day or so, so you found that you had quite a bit of free time to yourself here in Equestria. >For the first time in your life, you were developing an active social life, p0nies were just so easygoing you found it hard not to hang out with them. >Still, you often found yourself spending plenty of hours at home, either alone or with your new p0ny friends over hanging out. >THEY never questioned your technology, simply enjoyed it. >Rainbow Dash visited often, you guys played video games all the time, and watched movies every Friday night. >Applejack would join you two for movies on occasion, although she would usually leave early. >Life of a farmer or whatever, back home you had to get up early pretty often for work, so you knew how it was. >Rarity was a bit surprising, but she apparently enjoyed your music. >Every once in awhile she’d show up for tea and ask to hear some of the Jazz or Blues you had on your computer. >Pinkie Pie would just show up and do whatever, she never had trouble finding ways to occupy herself at your place, one time she actually found your razor and somehow managed to shave her entire body. >You didn’t ask how, but the two of you had a pretty good laugh over the incident. >Fluttershy never visited you. >You didn’t particularly care, Fluttershy was boring as fuck. >Also, she smelled like shit all the time. >Took care of animals or something, you wouldn’t have given a fuck unless she decided to give some to you as an offering. >Meat was hard to come by. Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
Alright, let's eat up these last few thread posts Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:14:21 No. 5944055 Report >>5944024 >Twilight however, showed up more often than any other p0ny. >When someone else was visiting, she’d come by and ask to hang with you as well. >You didn’t particularly mind, but you could tell she wasn’t exactly showing up to partake in the fun. >She would watch everything you did. >Never played any video games with you. >”I’m fine just watching, Anonymous, really. I’m happy just seeing my friends have fun.” >Then she’d steal glances at the controllers, watch Rainbow mash buttons on your arcade stick, glare at your small TV with enough intensity to set it on fire. >When you played movies on your laptop you could catch her looking at everything BUT the screen. >Trying to decipher the secrets of the “Qwertyuiop” on your keyboard. >Puzzling over the lights on your external hard drive. >Sometimes trying to touch the wires without anyone seeing, as if they might spring to life and reveal their secrets. >She even disappeared from one of your “tea-parties” with Rarity. >You found her in the bathroom staring down the business end of your electric razor, which you promptly took away from her and hid. >Then before going home, every time, she’d turn to you and ask, >”So really, how do all these things work?” >And every time, you’d respond, “Fucking magic.”
>>5943631 Any reason for dropping your name and trip shin?
We can tell it's you by the greyed out name.
You didn't forget to reapply when you were *gasp* samefagging, did you now?
I kid, but this intrigues me. Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
So how about that there local sports team? Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:15:14 No. 5944075 Report >>5944055 >Today she’s pressing the issue. >”But that makes absolutely no sense Anon!” “It’s magic, it doesn’t have to make sense.”
>”But that’s... it’s not... magic DOES make sense. It’s governed by a strict set of laws and rules, any magical act can be easily explai-” “Don’t care, magic.”
>She fumes silently for a second then grunts in frustration. >”UGH! FINE! Have it your way Anon.” >As she storms off into the night, you almost feel bad. >It’s not like you don’t like the little purple assburger or anything, she was incredibly cute in a socially-inept-nerdy kind of way. >It was just WAY too fun to tease her like this. >Also, this world broke so many laws of physics from your perspective that you felt she kinda deserved to feel a little bit of your confusion. >Wasn’t HER fault that this world made no sense, but seeing as how she was the most magical thing this side of Canterlot, you weren’t letting her off the hook. >And besides, tomorrow was Friday, movie night. Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
Man, the internet is so damn unreliable here Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:16:24 No. 5944100 Report >>5944075 >You were planning to marathon the original Star Wars trilogy, and you even told Twilight how you’d be hooking your laptop up to your TV just for this night. >The spare batteries on everything would probably be completely dead by the time you finish, but everyone was going to be there to watch for once, so it would totally be worth having to take a day off from technology to let everything charge up again. >Pinkie was crazy excited to show up, Rainbow never missed bro time, AJ had no work now that winter had started, and even Rarity had agreed to give movie night a go. >You had assured her that the costume designs in these movies would be nothing like she had ever seen before. >When you told Twilight what you were planning, you could just see the glint in her eye. >She was amazed enough to see your little gadgets and gizmos interfacing with one another, now you’d be connecting your laptop, mouse, monitor, speakers, and external drive all at once. >There was no way she could possibly resist. >You close the door behind you and go to turn in early for tonight. >Tomorrow was going to be a busy day, there were so many things you would have to prepare. Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
Aw shit son, this shit's about to get REAL Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:17:09 No. 5944115 Report >>5944100 * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
>You are Twilight Sparkle. >From afar you can see Anon close the door of his house, a yellow rectangle of light snuffed out by the surrounding canopy of black night. >He isn’t a bad... ‘person’ and you know that, but all his aggravating responses to your patient queries have finally worn you down. >You have had enough, and now you had a plan. >You WOULD discover the secrets of Anon’s technology. >Whatever the cost. * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
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But wait, there's more! Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:17:51 No. 5944129 Report >>5944115 >Day technology+1 in Equestria. >You wake up early, the alarms on your phone and DS going off simultaneously help rouse you since you normally don’t get up until noon at the earliest. >Dressing quickly and skipping breakfast, you head for town. >Walking through the market, you strike things off of your mental checklist as you make purchases for tonight. >Chips and dip, alcohol, guacamole, alcohol, salad, alcohol, tonight is going to be a hell of a night. >Stopping by Sugarcube Corner, you grab your order of cakes and pastries, as well as your first guest Pinkie. >”Ooh I’m just so excited! Anon are you excited? Tonight is going to be SO MUCH FUN!” >You laugh and Pinkie jabbers away into your ear the entire walk to Sweet Apple Acres. >Applejack greets you at the door to the farmhouse. >“Well howdy there Anon, gettin’ ready fer tonight?” “You know it AJ, how’re those pies coming along?”
>“Jes’ finished with ‘em, I’ll bring ‘em out in just a sec.” >As you wait, you pull out your DS and show Pinkie another one of the many, many games on your flashcart. >It isn’t long before Applejack returns. >”Ah made some fritters too, in case anyp0ny wants ‘em.” “Awesome AJ, can you help carry some of these bags? They’re killing me here.”
>Your party now three strong, you head for Rarity’s. >Not that you needed to pick anything up from the Carousel Boutique, you just thought it would be nice to meet up with Rarity so she wouldn’t have to walk to your place alone. Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
I'm pretty happy to be posting some damn story for once Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:18:54 No. 5944155 Report >>5944129 >You see a bright, many colored mane hanging lazily from a cloud up above. “Hey Dash!”
>Calling out to her you see the colorful tail twitch, then stir as the cyan p0ny awakes from her nap. >“Hey guy, ‘sup?” “Just heading over to Rarity’s then we’re all going to my place so we can start the party. Wanna come with, or are you too busy with your nap there?”
>”Nah, I’ll go with you guys. What about Twilight? We going to pick her up too?” >Another laugh escapes you. “You know Twilight, she’s probably already there, looking through the windows trying to figure out how my stuff works.”
>Everyone laughs at that as you close in on the boutique. >Rarity must have seen your group approach, as her door opens and she walks out to greet you as you come up the road. “Afternoon ma’am, I trust the day finds you well?” You speak with a slightly exaggerated but still sincere tone.
>Rarity titters, “But of course darling. Let’s be off then?” >With a nod you and your companions tread onwards to your place of residence. >As you walk, AJ speaks up. >”So Anon, now I don’t mind if’n ya don’t wanna tell me, but ah’m a might curious as well. How DO yer fancy contraptions work anyhow? “That’s an excellent question Applejack, I have no idea.”
>She turns to you, a look of confusion on her face. “The technology of my world is pretty advanced, but I don’t know how it works exactly. Most humans will just learn about the stuff they specialize in, and we don’t really care about how things work as long as they do. I just bought this junk, I had to get help just learning how to USE most of it.”
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>>5944070 Shit, 4chan ate my trip.
But if I could be with any of you fags, Pony would be it
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Also, I'm sorry Anon, I can't stop being mean to my Anons Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:20:10 No. 5944193 Report >>5944155 >Over the hill ahead, you can see your house come into view. >You quickly notice that something is a bit off. >The door is open, though you certainly locked it before you left, mostly as a force of habit. >Twilight probably let herself in, you think. >No real point in locking your door when magic horn-headed horses could just swing it open at will you suppose. >It isn’t until you cross the threshold of your doorway that you realize what has just transpired. >The ground is carpeted with cables. >small metal components are strewn about on almost every flat surface. >In the midst of it all, standing in the middle of your sitting room floor, is Twilight Sparkle. >Before her, floating and enveloped in a glowing aura, is your laptop. >Or what’s left of it. >As you watch, she uses her magic to pull out the screen, screws all slipping out simultaneously, a speaker pulled apart into its individual parts before your very eyes. >She finally notices you, standing slack-jawed in shock as your friends look past your legs and in Dash’s case over your shoulder. “Oh Anon! This technology is amazing! I’ve finally figured it out, it just so advanced.”
>Her eyes glitter with excitement, but she wears a half-crazed look that is rather unnerving amidst the carnage that was once your trove of electronics. >“The way your computer stores information, the way the television makes images, its far more impressive than the simple projectors and machines we have here. It was so difficult to figure out how they all worked, but I did it! Why, in a few years I could start making some of my own! And all without magic at all! You had me going there Anon, I thought you had pulled a trick when I started testing your gadgets, and I couldn’t find any trace of magic at all!” Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
Well, it was fun while it lasted Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ Thu 22 Nov 2012 03:21:04 No. 5944213 Report >>5944193 >All you can do is sputter while Twilight continues raving about her discovery. “M-my things...”
>Twilight just chuckles, a bit frenzied in her mania. >”Oh it’s alright Anon, I kept all the pieces, I even organized them for you. Now that I’ve learned what I wanted to know, you can just put everything back together. >She gestures to the floor, where you can see wires, cogs, circuit boards, and glass from all your technology grouped together in neat rows. >You still can’t find it in you to form actual words, simply working your mouth in silent despair. >Applejack speaks up from just beside you. >”Now ya said ya had no idea how all a’ this here technobabble worked, right?” >You turn to face her silently, your expression one of pure despondency. >”Does that mean th’ party’s off then?” >Your only response is a single shuddering sob. >Pinkie Pie bounces over to you, her hooves crushing tiny bits of metal and plastic as she goes. >”Aw, cheer up Anon! It’s okay, we can still have a good time without the movie. And look, you still have this!” >She holds out your DS in her hooves. >It’s bent the wrong way and the stylus is going straight through the top screen. >You weep openly. >Today was a bad day. Anonymous
>>5944187 >not using 4chanx Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
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>>5943975 >>5944001 >>5944024 >>5944055 >>5944075 >>5944100 >>5944115 >>5944129 >>5944155 >>5944193 >>5944213 And that's what I had hoped to post in thread 500. We probably need a new thread now yes? I hope I can get some feedback in it.
Or if I somehow really messed up posting this, maybe I'll just delete it all and repost the fixed one in the new thread. Anonymous
>>5944213 >No guilty Twilight Aww... Butchered it...
Nah, I'm just messin' with ya', but I really did want to see Twilight at least regret what she did afterwards.
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>>5944238 >Have chromium >4chanx won't work half the time >Go back to using normal 4chan Full pleb but I hate IE, FF, and chrome is botnet so I'm kinda stuck.
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>>5944187 Who wouldn't with ponygone for an hour
or life Hatebit !!8FC5lRlbeuJ
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>>5944298 That's the epilogue. Twilight realizing what she's done, offers to make it up to Anon with
hot sweaty sex. Then their combined juices coat all the electrical components and love magic makes them all reform into a kickin' sweet rocket car. Whenever anyone asks how it works, they respond with, "Fucking magic, ain't gotta explain shit."
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