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>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kj56IEmCeHczi8lB1LWsuWlbvkWl3C_kIadH08TS1tE/edit?pli=1 >http://derpy.me/PonyTF I kinda wonder how they got the derpy link. I've also got 3 1/2 posts for part 8 done with Celestia and Luna pick on humans for fun.
It needs more before I can call it finished, but I have had a bout of inspiration on how to get into where I want to go with it.
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Who's ready for more "Celestia and Luna pick on humans for fun"?
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>The walk home was pretty uneventful, even the monster seemed to have calmed down a little >That made you a little nervous >You know it never sits still or calms down for anything >Not wanting to question a good thing, you and Joe give each other your good byes, and you return to your apartment >It was 9PM now, that wait really lasted a while >You take a look at the note, thanking the royal sisters for things like this >Setting it on a stand near the door, you make your way to the one place you almost dread going to >The one place that's supposed to bring you the most piece, yet only gives you pain and suffering >Your bedroom >The bed wasn't anything amazing, but you always loved it before the hallucinations started >It was just the right level of comfy without being stupidly expensive >You would think that those snobs about town would get in on stuff like this, but after listening to the salespony, on the day you got it, you have to wonder just how proficient with bits they are >Oh well, you have your own problems to worry about, and worry you do >The monster sits in a chair in the corner of your room pretending he's smoking a pipe of some sort >Forget it, you'll sleep on the couch tonight >You have absolutely no energy left to deal with this maniac
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>>6409378 >Fixing a space on the couch you're out in seconds >You don't even check to see what dumb thing that idiot is up to now >Another night, another nightmare >This time that freak appears to be in an argument of some sort with others of his kind >You're beginning to feel a little uneasy, as if you know what is about to happen >Much to your surprise you don't even flinch when one of the other creatures punches yours to the ground >The one still standing appears to be pointing >Off in that direction stands... a rather tall pony, but it's just casually munching hay as if it has no clue what's going on >You can't quite hear the argument, but it seems your monster has done something to upset the other >For some odd reason you feel like something important has been taken from you >Ripped right out of your hooves, and it hurts >You don't want to feel any sympathy for this creature so you trot up in front of him >For the first time ever you see tears in his eyes, and not tears of laughter from one of his cruel jokes >NO! You will not feel sympathy for this... thing, he is the enemy >You start shouting at it, screaming obscenities you've heard it utter, and overall insulting it like the pathetic worm it is >That made you feel good, really good >Wait... you aren't feeling good from shouting, what's going on? >You don't get another thought as light floods your vision 2/5
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>>6409401 >You slowly open your eyes and feel pain from the light, but at the same time your mid-section is sending you waves of pleasure >It feels amazing, and you can't really fight against it to wake up >Giving up you just let it continue, whatever it is feels too good to stop >Involuntarily, you let out a sigh of contentment >You think you hear a knock at the door, but you can't get up to answer, not now >The door opens and when you look you see Joe standing there >His jaw has dropped to the floor >Confused for a second you finally check yourself over >Your eyes cannot get any bigger than this when you realize just what has been giving you those sensations from earlier >That beast is giving your belly a rub >That THING is touching your stomach and rubbing it! "Get off me you freak!" you shout as you scramble to your hooves
>You glare at it with intense anger as it just responds by making odd noises, not unlike the ones a pony would use on their pet >"Shiner, what the hay is going on?" Joe asks stepping in front of you "That thing had it's claw on my stomach and was rubbing it! I'll rip it to pieces!!" you shout as you circle around Joe to dive at it
>You don't get far as Joe clamps down on your tail and holds you back >The struggle continues for a few moments as Joe, even while muffled, tries calming you down 3/5
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>>6409420 >Finally settling down you don't release that thing from your fearful gaze, not that it is phased >"Shiner, knock it off for a second, it's just a hallucination. Are you listening to me? Look at me!" Joe shouts at you trying to help you get a hold of yourself >You finally look over to him and he continues trying to convince you it's not real "B-but it felt so real, I could feel those disgusting claws on my body. I...I-I actually enjoyed it!" you cry out before slumping onto the floor defeated
>Joe just rubs a hoof along your back and sighs >What could he say? He doesn't really know what you've been going through >A little bit of pep talking and convincing later the bo-three of you are on your way to the castle >It was about 9:30 when you two left the apartment >Your usual bright demeanor has long since faded away >Anyp0ny seeing you now only sees the husk that monster left in it's wake >Stressed, frustrated, and generally tired of everything has destroyed most of the life within you >It's winning, you don't want to admit it, but it's true >Very soon you are going to succumb to this insanity and not even this specialist will be able to save you >Glancing up you catch a small reflection of light and begin to squint your eyes >The royal sisters! >They're... watching you? >Something nearby must have their attention, but you're curious as to what since nothing notable is nearby your location >Why are they waving? >Looking around once again you still do not see what they could be waving at >You decide to shyly wave back to them and what happens next surprises you >The princess of the night seems to blow a kiss to you 4/5
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>>6409436 >Joe whistle and looks at you "Since when were you on such friendly terms with the princesses buddy boy?" "I-I never have been. I don't understand." you say still looking up at the two royals
>They continue to eye you, but make no effort to do anything else >You look back at the monster, yet he's only asking the guard something about inches >Sparing them a glance once more you see something that nearly stops your heart cold >They've taken on the form of one of the female of the monstrous species that plagues you >Nighty night Shiner 5/5
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>>6404797 >Old thread is dead. Oh, come on; link it anyway!
They're automatically archived and this helps me keep shit in order.
>>6140504 old thread TechnicolorShortie !!ixQQ+plJZ8m
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>>6409378 >>6409401 >>6409420 >>6409436 >>6409484 So ends part 8
I got real lucky today because I didn't want to just skip them home and into the next day without any detail.
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The ground sloshed as you moved through the swampy march of the everfree forest. "I swear..." you mumble as you follow behind Luna
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>>6412490 "Well now you're just trying to play dumb" She says "You're denying feelings that you've been having"
"No I'm not!" you're voice sort of raises an octave as you get defensive.
"And you're defensive" she says keeping her smile as you look at her beside you,
"Alright." You say to her a moment "If you know so much then prove it."
"You've had dreams about me and Trixie"
You stare at her.
"And twilight"
You point your hoof a moment
"And one nightmare involving Ms. Shines."
"How?!"
"Princess of the night, I can waltze through others dreams when I'm not attending to my own duties"
"Now that doesn't even make sense!" You gripe.
"Well, you could perhaps try and admit you have attractions to those around you"
"And what get shut down? Like every time I ever admit to liking anyone?" You're getting brief flashes of memories from high school..bleeuu high school...
"I'm sure you'd be elated to know more than one has some reciprocations toward you."
"You're bullshiting me now" You laugh.
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>>6404797 Hey, did the guy who made OP's picture ever do anything else?
I fucking love TF art. I need more of it but have no pony related tf stuff. :(
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>>6412872 YOu finally find a solid piece of ground as you stand oun it, the nagging itch of curiousity getting you "Who?"
"That I'm not at liberty to say."
"Tell me!" You say looking her in the face now from your perch.
"It's not me" she tells you with a straight face.
Damn it!
"One night we'll have to sit down so you can explain all these profanities to me." She says
"I said that out loud didn't I?"
"Very loudly" She tells you. "Alsoo That isn't a log you're standing on."
You're suddenly aware that the ground has been moving up slowly as you've been gradully looking down at Luna.
"I'm standing on some sort of terrible monster aren't I?"
"Yes."
>>6412490 >>6412872 >>6412934 Whoopps I cliffhangered you all.
What is the beat Anon is standing on? Who is the Mare with feelings for him? WHy am I asking all these questions when I'm sure you all already know!
Stay tuned, Same Batmane Time Same batmane channel.
As always critiques and comments welcomed.
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>>6414000 blackbox is butthurt because you ended on a cliffhanger
ignore her
cliffhangers are the *only* way to end
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>>6414000 i believe that's supposed to be anons response
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1:52 a.m. bump
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>>6413343 You fiend, a cliffhanger is fighting words. I may just have to change up my assignments for this so that I can... "torture" you for it.
You've given me quite the reason to change my viewpoint on Luna's regard of Anon now. If you recall in our e-mails I had stated she was more or less acting as though he was naught but a guard. This was pretty interesting to see.
>"Implying; That word shows up in your memories a lot." >You walk besides her as the growth get's thicker andharder to manuever through. "It's a good word." Hah, cute.
>What is the beat Anon is standing on? Doesn't sound like a fresh beat nigga, shit sounds real.
I do so enjoy that Luna put up with Anon's shenanigans throughout, even when he stood upon a new foe. Despite being regal it seems she, at the very least, enjoys his comical dialogue and misfortunes. She cares, maybe not in that way, but she cares.
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>>6413152 >"It's not me" she tells you with a straight face. Poor thing. Desperately lying to herself won't make it any better.
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Do you guys know where I can go for the inverse? I like ponies becoming humans
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>>6436005 You might want to check the PiE (Ponies in Earth) thread for that kind of stuff. I think every so often the ponies become human to blend in for some stories.
This one is mainly about Humans transforming into ponies, and not necessarily being involved with the show or in Equestria.
There have been a couple AiE stories that had ponies being human for at least a moment or two, but offhand I can't recall which ones.
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>>6434932 Everyone wants Anon.
No expceptions. Though I'm not sure where things are goinf to go romantically.
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SDamn we need some content.
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End of shift, beginning of the day BUMP.
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>>6446863 The last time I visited the chat Zephyr said he'd be updating tonight. If nothing else we've got that to look forward to.
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>>6446863 Well if you want I could give you the link to the latest Cuddle Buddies entry. It's clop though, and this time Master isn't involved. It could serve as a light snack until the good stuff gets posted; i.e. what this guy mentioned
>>6451586 Took me 5 hours to write due to the implications involved with it. I also haven't had the time to fix all the mistakes I've found with it recently, and I don't really have the time right now since I have class.
tl;dr If you don't mind the Cuddle Buddies story, nor the clop involved; I have the next part ready if you want.
http://pastebin.com/FRrgEaAm Hopefully it could sate the need for content until the real content shows up.
I always worry that I'm being bad by posting such a story, even though it more or less is a transformation story at a basic level. At least I'm not posting the entire thing post by post though right? I just get a little proud of how they turn out in terms of cuteness and such. Anonymous
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LIKE A RAINBUMP IN THE DARK!
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"Hey! Quit laughing at me!"
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>>6465472 And like all creations it shall now destroy the master! BWAHAHAHA!
No but seriously WUAH is never gonna let any of us get finished writing.
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>>6466116 With the current break, I'm almost done with the first chapter of my story.
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>>6465472 >>6466116 >>6466672 Suddenly I'm really glad my ps3 doesn't support Stinto.
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>>6413152 You hear a guttural growling under you as suddenly the 'Log you'd been standing on snaps it's mouth open quickly, your reflexes barely keeping you from getting killed as you manage to stay out of it's jaw's.
Suddenly you fly to the ground as you look at the creature. Yellow scaly wood like skin, long legs that seem to stretch as long as a human's. The beast was longer than anything you'd ever seen, it's teeth shining as it stared you both down with soulless wrath.
"That is the most terrifying aligator, I just completely forgot my stupid joke."
"Monsgator" una stated simply as it growled and hissed in yuor faces.
"I don't know what that means, but okay." you suddenly have a slight idea on what is was like for Trixie back at the NightMare's temple.
"So...uhm, any idea's on what to do?" You ask Luna trying to sound as calm as possibly.
"You're my body guard." she states "You handle it" and with that she suddenly vanishes in a flash of dark blue light.
Fuck.
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>>6468782 >>6468782 So for now I think this is gonna be it until I can get some of the research I want to get done for the next part,
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Alright, here I go. Warning: I'm a terrible writer.
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>>6468902 “Yes, we’re looking for books on how to draw.” Wonderbolt replied.
“Ponies, mostly.” Fluttershy added with a creepy little laugh. “Do you like ponies?”
Yes, quite a bit. “Not much.” I turned, headed down the aisle. “Please, come this way. We have several art books; if you’re planning to draw ponies, you’ll want to start with basic shapes…” I pulled a book from the shelf, handing it to Wonderbolt, and added another book “As well as techniques. I’d also recommend studying art you’re fond of, really try to understand how it all fits together. A lot of detail goes into a drawing.”
Aaaand I was losing them. I knew it would happen. See, that’s the thing with these people; they want everything right now. Why work for it? Mommy and Daddy paid the bills, after all. I watched as they shuffled through the art section, putting up a façade of interest. They would check out two, maybe three books on drawing, and return them two weeks from now, unused.
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>>6468928 Deciding they would be best left alone, for now, I went back to my shelving. As predicted, they left soon after; my shift was coming to a close, too. I’d quickly learned that a prolonged farewell led to more work being piled on my plate, so I stopped by the main office for a quick farewell before throwing on my coat and headed out. Damn, it was cold. I shivered as I started my walk home. Those guys had really gotten to me.
I should clarify, it’s not that I’m some kind of hipster or anything. I don’t think I could afford the attitude to be a hipster. Nor was I some kind of brony purist. What really got me was the entitlement, I guess. Them thinking that liking ponies set them apart from everyone else in the world.
I reached my apartment as I had that happy thought, unlocking the door and throwing my coat down on the floor. I tapped the power button on my computer, then headed to the kitchen to make something to eat. I poked around in the leftovers from various meals, and decided to fry them up with some rice. The whole thing took about twenty minutes to cook, and by the time it was done, my computer was all powered up and good to go.
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>>6468955 I sat down with a glass of water and looked for something to watch during dinner. Didn’t really feel like a comedy today…why not ponies? I’d actually never gotten to watch Too Many Pinkie Pies, and so I clicked over to the episode, settling down and starting to eat. A strange episode, to be sure, but it wasn’t as bad as I thought it would be. Actually, I was impressed at how well the story was told, even if I happened to have the opposite problem as Pinkie.
I set my plate aside, checking my email. Four new messages; three junk, but my heart leaped when I saw I had a message from one of my online friends. I had made a few friends interested in My Little Pony, but this was the only one I had given my email to, someone with an OC named Starlit Skies. I didn’t know his real name, but he had reached out to me, and not a lot of people did that, even online.
I opened the message
“Hey, Angel Grace. I got something really, really awesome to show you. Come to this address tonight, and prepare to have your mind blown.” Wait, that didn’t make any sense, Skies told me he lived in another state; why would he send me an address in town? And actually not far from where I lived. It would be incredibly stupid to meet an online friend alone, but I had to know what was going on. I put my coat back on, and took an umbrella for good measure, heading out into the late afternoon. Still very, very cold.
The address from the email was only about a mile away, and it was an old, abandoned warehouse. Gripping the umbrella I held tightly, I stepped forward, my heart pounding so fast that the cold was forgotten completely. I approached the nearest window…when someone grabbed me from behind, covering my mouth and dragging me into the bushes.
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>>6468902 >>6468928 >>6468955 >>6468974 Now this shows great potential. I will be watching this.
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[DotP - 2] Genetic Promenade NetherPony !!9xA7ChTWpWi Tue 11 Dec 2012 04:31:50 No. 6470224 Report Continuing from line 176 on the paste>"Ever since last time, no probably not." >You sat down, looking at your hooves. >You'd become a monster. Something parents tell their children about to scare them. >Shining walked over to you, standing a few feet from where you were sitting. >"I wish I had an answer for you, Anonymous." >"If there's a cure, she'll find it." >"It can't be all bad, can it? Sure the changelings invaded, but you're not one of them. You're anonymous." >"Give us some credit Anon, we're more friendly than you'd think." >"I thought--" >Shining looked down at the ground. You could tell he was searching for something to say. >What do you say to someone who's changed species? >It'd be like your best friend turning into a xenomorph. How do you explain that shit to other people? >You don't. >Your friend gets taken away, if not shot on sight. >"...Did you think that when you first got here, Anonymous?" >"That you'd be feared because you're different?" >"But eventually it crossed your mind, didn't it?"
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[DotP - 2] Genetic Promenade NetherPony !!9xA7ChTWpWi Tue 11 Dec 2012 04:32:27 No. 6470245 Report >>6470224 "Yeah, what's your point?"
>"My point is, you shouldn't worry about being different. You're an alien, and you're courting a princess. Give ponies some credit, Anon." "A complete alien with a clean slate. But now I'm a changeling. A familiar species, and not in a good way."
>Shining didn't back off though; he was determined to find a silver lining. >"If you're so worried about being feared, why not mimic a pony?" >He had a point. Why not just run around as a regular pony? "I'd love to, but there are a couple problems with that."
>"Really? Like what?" "For one, that requires me knowing how to use magic. Two, I'd eventually run into the pony I mimicked, or someone that knows the real him."
>"You can learn magic, it's not hard Anonymous." "Maybe I can. But what about running into my doppelganger?"
>"Your what?" "The pony I mimic? Eventually our two reputations would start to clash, I'm sure."
>He was once again searching the recesses of his mind for something, anything to prove that it wasn't all bad. >But he couldn't find anything. It was all bad; there was no way of getting out of it. >"So maybe it's not so great being a changeling. So what? I'm sure ponies would get used to you!" "Maybe. And what happens when another changeling is caught or tries to do something in the city? It's back to square one."
>"But we ran the changelings off, along with their queen." "Who's to say they won't return? Or that they haven't already?"
>"Now you're trying to make it all bad." "I don't have to try very hard, Shining. Like I said, I hope Luna finds a cure soon. I'm starting to get cabin fever."
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[DotP - 2] Genetic Promenade NetherPony !!9xA7ChTWpWi Tue 11 Dec 2012 04:33:08 No. 6470265 Report >>6470245 >"Now that I can take care of." "Really?"
>"I don't see why not. So long as we keep you in the castle, ponies shouldn't question your being with me." "Yeah, just like you didn't question that the changeling queen was your wife, right?"
>"C'mon Anon, stop being so negative." "Try saying that when you swap species."
>"I haven't swapped species." "My point exactly."
>You both sat there, each coming up with counter arguments for rebuttals the other would surely utter. >Your awkward silence was interrupted when the doors to the medical hall opened. >"Anonymous, are you-- big brother!" >Shining turned to just in time to get a purple unicorn to the face. >"Hi Twiley." >"What's going on? I thought you were on duty?" >"I was, but Princess Celestia sent me to see Anon here." >She looked from her brother to you. >"Hi there Anonymous! Remember me? My name is--" "Twilight Sparkle. We met earlier, I think."
>"That's right! I'm going to help you learn to control your magic!" "So I've been told."
>"Be careful Twilight; his pessimism might rub off on you." "Oh ha ha. There's a difference between pessimism and being realistic."
>"You should try optimism sometime Anon. It could do wonders for you. Anyway, I'll be back to check on you later. I've got to get back to duty." "Yeah, sure. See you around."
>He shook his head and left you with Twilight, who promptly unloaded her saddlebags full of books beside you. >"Let’s get started!" >You looked from the overly enthusiastic unicorn to the pile of books she'd procured. >It's gonna be a looooong day. NetherPony !!9xA7ChTWpWi
>>6470265 That's all for now. Been having the worst case of writer's block recently, but managed to get this out without too many problems.
Anywho, I know it's not much, but any and all feedback would be appreciated!
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>>6468974 >>6470314 >Struggling to write my next Clop challenge for fun >Wracking my brain for several hours tonight >See these two stories posted >Feel it is my duty to offer some love in the form of feedback >Presently exhausted and horribly defeated I'm sorry, both of you. Tomorrow, after class, I shall sit down and give you both a dose of feedback, especially since I enjoy letting a writer feel loved by letting him or her know just how their story is being received in the eyes of this reader. As with all my feedback, you should only expect my opinion on the matter, and it may not reflect the feeling of others.
I will also delete this post at such time because it will become moot by then.
In the meantime Nether, I was curious as to whether or not I could contact you on something I want your opinion on some time. I would do it in the thread, but it's rare that I ever see you. However you wish to do so I would not be opposed as I'll only be taking a few moments of your time. Something you once said to me stood out once, and I want your opinion on it if that's acceptable. Feel free to decline if not, It's mostly a matter of curiosity. Zephyr Writefag !!e3ActqGNipi
-Charlie time, motherfuckers!
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>>6475088 That's... deeply troubling. The forces at work when Master transforms someone are still very much beyond your comprehension, but you know enough to respect them. What does a bad ending to the transformation process entail? Autumn went nuts, you freaked out, but the uncertainty in his voice conjures visions of a half-human abomination in the playroom. Oh god, now you're afraid. Maybe not afraid for Charlie, but afraid of an uglier Charlie for certain. The knot in your stomach, though, that's fear of what your Master will do in that case. Does a good pet have to help hide a body?
His eyes meet yours, and with a small nod the two of you steel your resolve and open the door. For a second you wish you'd stayed upstairs and joined Autumn's reading. A little over three weeks downstairs has not treated him well. The ugly patchwork bruises on his face from the bat impact have mostly healed, but the rest of him...
He's dropped a lot... Quite a lot of his bulk. Small folds of excess skin hang from his limbs, creating a ghastly appearance. His neckbeard has aged into a full-blown hobo beard, which matches nicely with the most godawful smell you've ever been exposed to. It's just too much, you feel like you really are gonna hurl now. UGH! You know he can get a hose in here, why the hell didn't he?!
You're honestly too busy recoiling from his frightful physical state to evaluate his mental state, until you realize he's struggling madly against his bonds, a frenzied, pleading panic in his eyes. This is the monster you were so scared of? He's a beast, beasts don't break down like this!
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>>6475126 ... But it occurs to you now that since David became Opal, he's been down here alone. For over two weeks. Two. Long. Weeks. In the hole. You hate the rush of empathy you feel, but it's just that... you've slowly been coming to realization that Master doesn't understand what this place does to a mind. In total darkness, the brain gets active, trying to impose order, discernible shapes, on the blank pitch around you. Sure, once your eyes adjusted you could make out some basic shapes, like hooves right in front of your face, or wings fluttering in the dark, but beyond that, your imagination started to fill in the blanks. Shifting shapes in the corners of your vision, sometimes even faces. There were sounds, toward the end.
"Master? How long was I down here?"
"Four days."
Oh good heavens.
"D-did you feel him at all?"
"Enough to keep him going."
"Do you feel bad about this at all?"
"I really would, but then I remember sedating Autumn because she wouldn't stop screaming while I was trying to keep you alive. All through the daze of a concussion."
"I can see how that would happen."
Once Master undoes the gag it's clear how bad things got down here. Barely intelligible begging and sobs emerge, and you're actively trying to crush down tidal waves of sympathy. This isn't right. He's terrible, awful, a frenzied animal that wanted to tear you pieces. Master seems less sympathetic, even when faced with unmistakably human suffering.
"Alright Chuck- Hey! Charlie! Look at me! Alright Chuck, it's go time."
He seems to sober a bit when he hears it, focusing on Master as requested. At first you dare to think he's calmed down. That was a mistake.
"FUCK YOU! WE HAD A DEAL!"
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>>6475155 Your ears had already folded back under Charlie's verbal assault, but they swivel back to attention following the loud slap that follows. Yeah, Master doesn't seem to take yelling very kindly.
"The deal was I would sell you a pony and you would keep her in health and love for the rest of your lives. Now you're going to shut the hell up and listen to me. I found your little stories, too."
"Y-you said you couldn't do that!"
"Yeah, more like I 'wouldn't' do that. It's a little creepy, even for me. Hey, it could be worse. I'm not using your fluffy stories."
"Y-you said you wouldn't hurt Dave when you took him!"
"You're properly afraid now. Good. No, I won't abuse you. None of the awful things that happen in your story will happen to you. Your family, if you have any, will survive. You won't go hungry. No one's going to cut on you daily for a few months. You really are sick, you know that?"
"W-where's Dave! I want to see Dave!"
"You mean Opal? She got carried off in the arms of a kind, loving man she'll spend the rest of her days in hopeless love with. She said she forgives you. She said to tell you 'Goodbye'."
He's almost in tears now. He opens his mouth to speak, but Master cuts him off.
"And now I think I'll say goodbye, Chuck."
His needle slips into Charlie's arm before he even knew it was coming. Charlie's eyes bug out when he sees the plunger in the enormous needle begin to sink.
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>>6475205 "And it is goodbye, Charlie, because either you'll come out of this as Sunflower, or I'll have to put you out of your misery."
He's just screaming now, without words. Your Master unbuckles him from the chair he's in, and half carries, half drags his latest tranformee to the playroom. Charlie's atrophied limbs leave him ill equipped to resist, and he collapses in a heap when Master unceremoniously drops him on the floor.
"Well, have fun."
"You put Dave under! Put me under!"
"Where was that mercy when my pets were screaming while you tried to kidnap them? No, you're gonna feel it. See you when you're done."
You didn't even go into the playroom. You just sort of sat by the door, incapable of going any further, or looking away. Master scoops you up without a word, locking the door behind him after ascending the stairs.
"Master? Who is Sunflower?"
"The sweetest little filly I've ever read about. Of course, Charlie wrote about it, so she ends up dead. Of course, because Charlie wrote it, death is a mercy."
"You're going to have tiny filly that wants to break my wings?"
"We'll worry about that when she lives through it, because I have no idea what's about to happen down there."
- It's not quite what I wanted, but I was seriously blocked with this. I might make revisions in the paste. But now we're on Charlie!
>>6470314 Anon's commitment to being unhappy endears him to me.
>>6468974 Moar, ASAP.
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>>6475275 Glorious, absolutely glorious.
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>>6475275 OHHH Yessss I'm going to enjoy the next updates, watching Charlie break.
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>>6474502 However you see fit to contact me is fine with me.
I've got email, skype
netherpony , Private Messages over fimfiction
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Nether , and the threads.
Whichever you want to use is fine by me; I'm not a complete hermit, I'm just never online. Rest assured though, you use one of the above methods and I'll eventually get the message!
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>>6475205 >not using the fluffy stories. Oh, thank the Sun!
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>>6475275 >Of course, Charlie wrote about it, so she ends up dead. Of course, because Charlie wrote it, death is a mercy." Someone should get the Dark Equestria guys to write this up.
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>>6468974 You got a good hook here. We know next to nothing about our protag beyond working at a library and liking ponies, so there is appropriate room for growth. You also ended on a cliffhanger which, although it's a dirty trick for a hook, works wonders in making me curious as to the current plot. You have a reader in me.
>>6470314 Transforming into a changeling seems to have given Anon a real sour mood. He can call it being a "realist" all he wants, but he wasn't acting that way when he could possibly die or infect others. A good and interesting psychological shift is occurring and it's keeping the story at quite the enjoyable level of readability.
>>6475275 Two words Zeph: Absolutely delicious.
Master lets Charlie know, in no uncertain terms, that payback has finally arrived, but he also shows restraint which further enforces his domination in the situation. If Charlie had any spirit left to break, then he doesn't now.
>>6478579 Logic dictates I go with Skype considering you're from AiE, but I've been using e-mail for a while and I'm unsure about fimfiction to be honest.
I shall decide in the meantime, and you will see my message in one of the formats soon. Thanks for agreeing to communicating with me regardless.
Now, as promised, I shall delete that earlier comment.
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>>6468782 The Monsgator hisses at you as you stare into it's wide open mouth.
"You know...you're teeth are really white" You're dumb joke came back "I'm sure you get that alot but DAMN they are clean!"
The beast just let's put an angered roar as it lunges. it's teeth snapping down as you leap up flying in the air as you look down .
"HA!" You have no earthly idea why you're laughing at something that has intent on eating you.
You quickly turn and speed off wings spread and flapping as fast as you can make them.
The Monsgator's feet boom as the make contact with the wet swamp ground, it's s[eed keeping it on your tail as you try to weavce through the forest.
Soarin says rely on reflexes, you remembe that much. You look up quickly noticing the canopy of the forest making an aerial escape impossible.
Just keep going! you repeat in your head as you fly at break neck speed.
You make a quick duck through an arched set of trees, the monsgator following,
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>>6490163 Suddenly you hear a loud thump followed by a loud screaching hiss behind you.
You look to find the arched set of tree's having collapsed as a giant boulder lay a top it.
You walk forwatrd toward it seeing one of the gator's legs laying limply from the heap of.
Well, congratulations Anon, you killed it." Luna speaks up as she stands beside you now
"Where the hell did you go?" You ask in slight surprise from jumping, having not noticed her before
"It's not quite relevant is it?"
"Well it would help me not feel as mad for you abandoning me."
"If it helps...I went back to dryer land. not far but just enough to not get in your way"
"I question your need of a body guard when you can just teleport with out delay" You quip.
"There are magic disruption spells you know, next time I might not be as lucky."
"Who's in my swamp?!" A suddenly loud and depp pitched voice calls out nearly making you crap yourself.
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>>6491348 >>6490163 And I think this may be it for the night...again... inspiration is sort of running low lately.
As always, comments and critiques welcomed.
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>>6488297 I'm overly fond of cliffhangers. Chapter 3 actually ends on a note intended to make you go "Oh crap" but I feel like it stops needlessly
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>>6488297 Forgot em trip
>>6491699 Hah, silly Batmane. Your ever continuing streak of bad luck, sprinkled with a dash of fortune apparently, brings me such joy.
>not far but just enough to not get in your way She says this with a straight face I bet. Gotta love the dynamic going on between those two at this moment.
>inspiration is sort of running low lately Once again I'm going to assume I'm to blame for this. Considering everything going on behind the scenes it seems likely.
>>6491770 Well, you haven't posted chapter 2 yet, so you still have time to get 3 done how you want it.
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>>6492573 I'm actually working on four at the moment, and getting some strong feels myself as I write it. I'll post two and maybe see about editing three here in a bit. I'm horrible at editing my own work.
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I kicked and tried to scream, but the hands holding me were too strong. I was dragged several feet to a clearing, then released. I dropped to the ground, panting. I did not know my heart could go this fast, but god, I wished it would stop. This was actually painful… “What the hell?” I asked, looking up at my captors. Hunched over was an older man, looking like he was in his late twenties. Behind me was the person who had grabbed me, surprisingly lean for being able to restrain me so.
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>>6493330 This just got way weird…I started gasping for breath, the world spinning. The older man guided me down. “Deep breaths, girl. In through your nose, out through your mouth. I know this a lot to take in, but if you keep this up, you’ll go into shock.” He looked over at the impossible pony. “Did you really have to come out?”
“She was going to the warehouse. She’s already involved.” The pony said, still impossibly calm. I got a better look at him as I tried to get my breathing under control. He was a little over three feet tall, a pony, had a blue coat, was a pony, black mane and eyes, was a pony, and seemed pretty scuffed up. Also? He’s a pony.
“Involved in what, exactly?” I wheezed. I was still out of breath, and that was about all I could manage to say.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6493347 The pony started to explain, but the man at my side cut him off. “You’re going to kill the poor girl if you keep piling this on her. Let’s start with the introductions.” He looked at me. “I’m Micheal, and I’ve been studying medicine at the local university.”
That was about the only good thing about this town; our university had an amazing med program; hospitals from the surrounding states would come and recruit right out of the graduating class. “A-astarielle…I work at the local library, and I got an email telling me to come here.”
Confused expressions crossed the face of my captors. At least, I thought the pony was confused. It was hard to tell what that face meant. The freakishly strong guy spoke up next. “I’m Tyler, and I’m opening a store this fall. And this is-”
“Cobalt. Just…call me Cobalt. So wait, you got an email? Telling you to come here? That’s unusual…” he said, looking at the warehouse again.
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>>6493410 “Why is that?” I asked, still breathless. “My friend told me to meet him here…” I hunched over again, catching my breath. “Why did…you kidnap me…”
The three of them shared a glance, as if trying to decide what to say. The pony, Cobalt, finally moved forward. “We didn’t. You’re free to go, but I think you should hear us out. What do you mean by your friend told you to meet you here?”
I looked up, puzzled. “Precisely that. I’ve been communicating with someone over the internet, and he told me to come here tonight so he could show me something.” Wait, why was I telling anyone this, much less a cartoon horse? I stood up. “I should get over there, actually.”
Tyler put a hand on my arm. “You’re not as smart as you look, meeting someone you only know online.” He commented. I brushed him off, shaking my head
“He’s…he wouldn’t hurt me. I’m sure of it. We’ve been talking for months now.”
Another glance between the three of them. What was I missing out on? Michael shook his head, as if trying to say ‘don’t you dare’, but Cobalt inclined his head a bit, looking back at me.
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Chapter 2 End (Another cliffhanger...) Angel !GraceZDGeM Wed 12 Dec 2012 02:33:09 No. 6493517 Report >>6493464 “Astarielle…I wasn’t always a pony. I used to be a human.” He said, some emotion finally creeping into his voice; fear. I wasn’t the only one scared out of my wits here, and that helped to calm me down. I turned to look at him properly.
“What did you say?” I asked, eyes wide. That was even more impossible. How could a person become a pony?
He nodded, sitting down on his haunches with a long sigh. “I can’t even remember my name, or much of my life before this.” He looked past me again. “The person in there, possibly your friend, has been kidnapping people, and turning them into ponies.”
No. That was stupid. Skies wouldn’t do that to me, or anyone. I wasn’t sure how I was so certain, but I knew that he was a good person. Before any of them could react, I bolted, headed for the warehouse. I was going to see what was going on here, myself. I could hear the three of them calling my name, but I ignored them, determined to get to the bottom of this mystery. Besides, I trusted Starlit Skies more than the people (and pony) who had kidnapped me. That was strange, I knew it was strange, but I had a feeling the only thing I could do right now was follow my heart. If Skies wanted me to see something here, I was going to find out what it was.
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>>6493517 there is going to be so many i told you so's when they save her later
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>>6499100 So many. You don't even know.
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>>6499100 >>6499309 There are going to be so many "Somehow, I'm still okay with this..."s later.
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Looks like that Pon-E's kicking in.
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>>6502662 Surprisingly few. I actually have the climax pretty much written, it's just getting there that will make it hard. I foresee this being about ten chapters or so.
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>>6511626 What's this about Pon-E
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>>6493517 moar
I need moar!
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>>6493517 Good, you're still on the right track as far as keeping my interest. I already wish to know who that group was that tried to save the protag from her inevitable fate.
>Starlit Skies Oh dear, this poor girl hasn't got a clue.
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Got a one-shot I need to get out for a thread, possible new Cuddle Buddies, and after that I am going to get to work on part 9 to Celestia and Luna pick on humans for fun. It has been a busy week, but my schedule will be opening up immensely in the following week, granted I fail one of my GED tests. /information bump
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>It just isn't fair. >the same forces that dragged you into this world of talking colored horses had conspired to make you one of them. >You were frightened, alone, and completely unable to cope with your new form, hooves and tail and... mare-gina included. >You tried to get help from the first authorities you met, but they thought you were nuts! >You were being dragged to an asylum when she found you. >Their leader, the all-mighty queen of the fuckin' sun. >Princess Celestia devoted time, energy, and money to helping you adjust, and once she declared you ready to be one of "her little ponies", you were sent on your way to settle somewhere and start a life. >You've been Gear Box for a year now, doing work on any machine that needs fixing in this po-dunk town. >When you heard the Princess was coming, you were ecstatic, and it was your honor to bow before your benevolent ruler. >Until you saw what she brought. >That doofy grin. That incredible height. Those... hands! >Whatever brought him here decided to leave him be, hands and junk intact. >It's not fucking fair! >You were content to be grumpy about it and carry on, but then he started living in town! >Of course, you saw him around all the time, and the other townsponies loved him near to death. >Ugh. >It got worse when he started talking to you. >"What's your name?" >"What does your cutie mark mean?" >"Would you like to go get dinner sometime?" >To your absolute horror, Anon has decided that you are the prettiest pony. >And he won't. Go. Away. >Gifts, candies, flowers, songs. >He's convinced he can "woo" you sooner or later. >You can't tell him the truth. The whole point of leaving the palace was to be somewhere where no one knew your story. >So that lucky idiot keeps playing his fruitless game. >Fuckin' Anonymous. >Fuckin' Equestria.
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>>6532685 I would love to see this turn into a proper story, done right it could be hilariously lighthearted.
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>>6532803 I second this.
Also Mare-gina is a fun word
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>>6532685 >mare-gina Hah.
You might be able to turn this into something.
Basically everything
>>6532803 said.
>mfw 20 of you read my second clop >mfw some of those hits might have been a repeat visit from someone after a 24 hour cool down period on the counter Anonymous
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>Want to write a TF fic >remember that I suck at writing
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So I was just one Fimfiction looking around things under the "human" tag to find some tf fics, when I found out that a certain writer has just started writing again who I thought was long gone...
can anyone tell me what to think of this
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/69770/friendship-is-optimal-caelum-est-conterentem I feel like reading it but I'm not sure I should.
It's not TCB at least.
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>>6561556 It takes place in a universe where Celestia manages to tear down the wall between the human world and Equestria, and fully intends to convert humanity to ponykind.
It is not TCB, but it has parallels.
Still, I would suggest reading it.
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>>6561632 I'm hesitant because it's Chat and I know her stuff very well, enough that the only reason I'm intrigued here is because it's not TCB and actually acknowledges the shadiness of Celestia in the summary, which she'd never have admitted before in her TCB fics. In fact, she's the reason those fics got so bad that they spawned counter fics portraying Equestria as an invading force.
Why can't we just have a popular fic series about TF and without horribly stupid and pointless conflict and terrorist groups that make no sense?
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>>6562135 because how else would you get people (ponies) that bomb people with water balloons that force a transformation for their own good?
I don't personally /mind/ Chat's work, but it's because I kinda fall into the same view on humanity, though not as crazy.
A wise man once said: A /person/ is smart, /people/ are dumb, panicky animals, and you know it." I like persons, but I hate people.
And yes I did just quote MiB, deal with it. Anonymous
>>6562502 Well if you want that sort of forced transformation then it really is a very roundabout way of doing it. The HLF and PER groups in those fics were always forced and have never been a good idea. Mostly becuase they only exist to fill the false idea that you need some sort of high stakes hollywood action in a fic. I've seen slice of life TCB's that just go off the deep end when they decide the PER needs to make an appearance.
I loved this parody.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45712/The-Conversion-Bureau%3A-What-would-really-happen-if-it -was-canon-Equestria
The whole point of it existing is to point out how silly it all is. Groups like those wouldn't function, wouldn't work well, would hardly be a threat in the way people think. I mean even the "cloudyverse" portrays the groups as well armed military groups capable of things impossible even in hollywood.
A wiser man said I think, "The IQ of a mob is the IQ of the dumbest member divided by the number of mobsters". No reason to hate humanity for impromptu group mentality failing.
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>>6563576 I was kinda trying to point out how absurd some of the shit is in TCB stories, doesn't stop me from liking them for other reasons though. I suppose trying that at 11:30 in the morning doesn't work so well, I need to get to bed.
I need to read Pratchet's work, but that comes after I get done with Butcher's stuff. I'd like to thank the guy that wrote the Dresden Fillies, I would have missed out on my favorite wizard named Harry otherwise. Anonymous
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>>6563986 I love those Dresden Fillies stories. I've even started doing an audio reading of the first one. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jfQyu6soaoE emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6491348 "Amos!" Luna called out as a zebra walked out of the brush and overgrowth.
The Zebra appeared to be wearing a deep red vest, atop his head rested a widely brimmed hat, he seemed to have a slight limp as he walked as well "Ah...princess" his voice was deep, the accent sounding something of the carribean or perhaps cajun sound. "It's been quite some time" he commented as he looked to the both of you "And you have a guard...." he acknowledged you there. "Hmm, he's not originally of this plain is he?" he turned to Luna
"MY sister and I had do pull somepony from elsewhere "This is Anon"
You extend your hoof to him momentarily "Nice to meet you"
His first action is to hold up his left hoof....It's missing. Gone up to the elbow joint, extrening from the joint area was a stong bamboo stick with a small flattend rock tied to the end, clearly a sort of make shift cane "I'm Amos." he tells you
You hesitantly click your hoof gently on the rock at the end of the cane.
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>>6572699 "Well..." amos shifted his stance to his other "hoof" adjusting the tea shades infront of his eyes slightly "How long has it been since I last seen you Miss Luna, I remember last seeing you from the Eve of Harmony."
"The fall of Discord." She gave s light smile, Looking at the Zebra with the same admiration you'd give to a grandparent.
You give them both a bit of a goggled eyed look "Wait wait wait, This guy's how old now?"
"Old enough" Amos said you feeling a slight glare from under the shades he wore
"I appologise, Anon, not got the most training in etiquette, How has life treated you?"
"Well." Amos began "I've spent most my life sense the Zebral migration here." he noted "I think I may be the last one still in equestria."
"Well, we have good news There is one more" She smiled a bit "Closer to ponyville is another Zebra named Zecora
"Ah, I can't remember the last time I've seen a female" he smiled a bit, wrinkles on his face stretching about.
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>>6573036 "Perhaps one day we can formally introduce you to her." Luna told him as you watched the both of them "Unfortunately Her ties to my sister keep me from having her assist me,"
"Ah, Understandable, it would make sense that any Zebra left from our populace would ally with her due to how everything with the migratrion was."
Luna gave a frown to him "I am truly sorry...had I been around I would have tried my best to keep the migration from being so forced."
"Excuse me?" You but in just a little "What happened?"
"Well, boy. Her sister, used her position to make most of the zebra's leave equestria, as helpful as we were I think she saw us all as a liability."
"As always, I still am very sorry for my sisters actions in my absense, however, if it's possible, may I ask for your support in some plans I have for the future?"
"I gladly would, if you would like to follow me to my home for s0ome tea...perhaps assist me in retrieving the traps kill as well?"
>>6572699 >>6573036 >>6573291 And I think...this will be all for the evening. unless I get hit by the stone of inspiration later this evening. I hope it was enjoyable and that the new character seems decent enough.
As alwayts Critique and Comments of any kind are appreciated.
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>>6573348 >Anon makes another social error This kid can't catch a break can he?
That Zebra is quite old. I didn't think anyone but Alicorns could live so long. I'm going off the idea that the Equestrian equivalent of a winged unicorn is known as an "Alicorn" now.
>the migration Now that was an interesting bit of world building. We have no idea where the rest of the Zebras are canonically, but that explanation of a lack thereof is pretty intriguing. It does sort of mar Celestia's character a bit though.
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>>6574742 Well, He's not necessarily That old by choice...I may go into that a bit soon, but I havea weird idea based on the ages of Zebra's.
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Sorry, been catching up on my sleep. Chapter 3: The plot thickens quickly, ho!
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>>6581483 “Not at all, dear Angel. It’s just a welcoming gift.” A gentle male voice drifted from the corner of the warehouse, and a well dressed young man came into view. “I’ve been waiting so long for this moment…you have no idea.”
Wow. This guy was incredibly hot. He was perfectly slender, just the way I liked guys, with that amazing beard stubble and dark blue eyes and…my face heated up. “You must be…”
“Starlit Skies.” He nodded with a welcoming smile, and my heart melted a little more.
“It’s good to finally meet you. Sorry I’m late, there were some…people out there with a crazy story about people turning into ponies. I’m-“
“I know who you are already, Angel Grace.” He cut me off as he moved forward, slipping the bracelet onto my wrist. “And I know about the stories. That’s why I finally called you here.”
I stepped back a bit, a little freaked out. “You don’t have to keep calling me that…this is real life, and I have a name.” I told him. “What do the stories have to do with why I’m here?”
“Because they’re true.”
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>>6581508 Everything around me seemed to slow to a crawl when he replied. I shook my head in disbelief. “N-no, that’s…you’re saying you’ve been kidnapping people?” because, obviously, that was the most unbelievable part of this entire scene. I stepped back again, wanting to run, yet I couldn’t seem to…
The man who called himself Starlit Skies inclined his head slightly. “And turning them into ponies. Yes. Not just any people, though, only those who deserve it. And you, my precious Angel Grace, deserve it.” He made to stroke my hair, but I stepped back again.
“No. No, I don’t want to be a pony.” I protested, a lump in my chest. This wasn’t happening. It couldn’t be; it was some kind of joke, or a bad dream.
“What about the conversations we’ve had? You’re tired of your life stalling, you want someone new, someone who cares about you…” he smiled fondly at me. “More than once, you’ve expressed the desire to become a pony, and I could see the sincerity of your words under the text.”
“That’s just…idle dreams! Lots of people say they want to be a pony, but that doesn’t mean you can…” did I really believe Skies could turn people into ponies? That would explain Cobalt out there. Either way, I had clearly found my way into the clutches of a psychopath. Luckily, he had chosen a large venue for this meeting, one I could escape from easily…
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>>6581548 “Society pressures them to accept the norm. I’m simply giving them a life free of pressure.” His voice interrupted my thoughts. “Besides, there’s not much you can do about it at this point. I already started the process.”
What.
“What?!” I clutched my chest. I thought that my heart had been going fast before. At this rate, it was going to escape from my chest. He had already started turning me into a cartoon horse? How had I not noticed before? I’ve never seen this man before in my life.
“It takes a week or two for the transformation to complete.” He explained. “I’ve given you the first couple treatments already.” He sighed, seeing the panicked look on my face. “Angel, please, just come and see what I’ve created. I promise you, you’ll like it.” He extended a hand.
Despite my fear, despite my revulsion at the fact this man had taken it upon himself to change me into some kind of freak, I wanted to see what he had for me. I took his hand, and he smiled. “That’s my girl.” He led me back into the shadows, pulling open a disguised door. So what was behind door number one? Well lit steps.
“Of course, my primary concern, once I worked out the details of how to accomplish the change, was what would I do once the ones I chose became ponies. I think I solved that problem rather well.” We reached the bottom of the stairs, opening a door into a workroom filled with monitors. I looked at the nearest one, gasping. Ponies were walking around, talking to each other, in a small village. In the background, I could see a forest, and mountains towered above them. “This is live from New Equestria; I own quite a bit of land in the mountains, and there was a valley that was just perfect, out of the way and tucked between two sharp peaks.” he stopped his explanation as two ponies ran in from the next room.
“Master!” they said brightly, nuzzling his leg as he reached down to pat them.
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>>6581508 Time for a good ole fashion helping of >rape with >rape on the side.
>>6581593 >I took his hand All is lost. The suggestions have kicked in.
This Starlit Skies guy is really creeping me out. Not only does he change a bunch of people into ponies, but he builds them a small village outside of the reach of humans? I was taken aback a little bit by "Angel's" description of him. The way she takes to him is okay, but it did feel slightly strong. Were it any character responding to the main one we could have an issue; however, I'm going to say it's alright since it's the main character doing the ogling.
This is some crazy stuff here, and I'm liking it.
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>>6581508 Time for a good ole fashion helping of >rape with >rape on the side.
>>6581593 >I took his hand All is lost. The suggestions have kicked in.
This Starlit Skies guy is really creeping me out. Not only does he change a bunch of people into ponies, but he builds them a small village outside of the reach of humans? I was taken aback a little bit by "Angel's" description of him. The way she takes to him is okay, but it did feel slightly strong. Were it any character responding to the main one we could have an issue; however, I'm going to say it's alright since it's the main character doing the ogling.
This is some crazy stuff here, and I'm liking it.
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>>6581593 >Hidden settlement for people-turned-ponies. Oh my, this is an excellent idea! Please tell me she's going to see it for herself?
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Unfortunately, you did get Netflix, and that was enough to convince Chris that your apartment—by virtue of not being a dingy basement, chiefly—was the perfect place to stay until more permanent arrangements could be made. Your reflexive objection to Bill being anywhere near your apartment is stifled by her newfound fluffiness—and Chris' offer to pick up the tab for dinner. The guy was awfully loose with his money, but that's just what happens when you're a high roller.
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>>6475275 The two of you make your way to the couch, where Autumn is curled up with a book leaned against the armrest. You've made a mental note to find a cerebral hobby, something to occupy your time besides flying and being petted that will hopefully keep your wits sharp.
You would take up reading, but most of the books around here are dense technical tomes belonging to Master or Autumn's young adult selection. You need history! You need science fiction! Perhaps you can ask Master for something next time he goes out somewhere. As far as you can tell he only leaves for groceries and kidnappings, and he tends to stock up on both, so it may be a while. Still, you're sure a pony as good as you can beg herself a present.
Rather than sitting down as you'd expected, Master rouses Autumn for an evening walk. The two of you wait by the door for a moment, but when Master comes back to the hallway you're a little surprised and Autumn is simply floored to see two leashes in his hand.
"Master? D-did Zephyr and I do something wrong?"
"Besides sneaking into my lab? No honey, you've done nothing wrong, and I'm not punishing you. Would you be willing to humor me, sweetheart?"
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>>6611331 "Of course!"
"Good girl. I'll let you run around on your own in a bit."
You had no qualms about it whatsoever, and he had a real problem getting the leash latched to your collar through the flurry of small kisses you can't help but douse him with. It's only moments before the three of you are out in a tight-knit group, taking a few seconds to re-learn walking on a leash. Once you and Autumn have the rhythm down Master begins to pick up the pace, and soon you're forced into a light gallop as he breaks into a run. Something about running in unison with the two of them makes you happy in a strange way. You hate to use the word "herd" to describe anything about yourself given your hooves, but there's a sense of unity and belonging in breathlessly following his lead around the yard. Before long you can predict his turns with near perfect accuracy, and Autumn seems to move in even better sync with him that you do!
The three of you end up sprawled out under one of the trees at the edge of the yard, sweaty and panting. You had fun, but that may have gone on a few minutes longer than it should have. A hand finds its way to your mane, and For a moment you share a smile with your Master and Autumn before he can muster the energy to speak between breaths.
"Is this what you had in mind with the occasional leashing?"
"I was thinking more like long walks, but that was good, yeah."
He offered to let you and Autumn run around free, but he'd worn the both of you out far too thoroughly for that. That run was just what you needed to clear your head, and thinking about it, it was probably the same thing for him. You feel really, truly good, and your compatriots seem just as exuberant as you re-enter the house...
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>>6611356 Until Charlie's screaming wafts up from the basement. Through three doors meant to hold it all in. That can't be a good sign. Master grudgingly goes down to check in on him while you and Autumn wait at the top of the basement stairs, both fidgeting pretty nervously as the continuing shrieks of agony pierce the air.
Master's look of calm and relative relief is exactly what you were hoping for, as opposed to the visions of screaming and violent bludgeoning your imagination had conjured.
"He's actually in better shape than I thought. For a guy who loves handing out pain, he sure doesn't take it particularly well."
"So it's like when I changed?"
"With all the screaming, yes. The actual change is far more intense."
"More intense?"
"Making you a pony is already quite the rearrangement process. Making him a filly is that, but taken much further."
"We're getting a filly?! Oh yesyesyes!" Cries a thoroughly exuberant Autumn.
"You're excited about it?"
"Well yeah! I can't wait to play with her!"
"That might be a while, Sweetie, but we'll see."
Autumn hops off in her excitement, already assembling things for playtime with a particularly small pony, leaving you and Master in the living room. After plopping your head down on his lap, you begin your usual game of twenty questions with your Master.
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>>6611382 "So, why a filly?"
"My friend Ann asked for one."
"But isn't that a little creepy? Even if there's an adult mind in there and it consents, he'll look like a child."
"Why would that be creepy?"
"You... you know what these bodies want. It weird."
"That's actually why I haven't done it yet. Plenty of people wanted a filly, but most of them... it's just too strange."
"You've got some oddly particular scruples for a guy who kidnaps people."
"Hush, you. Ann called me a couple months ago, asking if her two ponies could get pregnant. She's got a stallion and a mare, you see. All three were terribly disappointed when I said it couldn't be done, so I'm going to offer them an adopted filly and see how that goes over."
"Your ponies can't have babies?"
"Nope. I'm making pets, not a new species. I'm sorry to say that even if I left you with a stallion in rut, you'll never have foals."
"That's just fine, there's no stallion whose foals I"d ever want to have. I've got a stallion, and we're already not having kids."
"I'm going to take stallion as a complement, but I do think the look on your face when something starts suckling your little teats would be worth a million."
The face you make at the mere idea seems to be enough, if his minutes of laughter are any indication.
-That's all for this one, folks.
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>>6611331 >Autumn's young adult selection >young adult +500% to Horror factor.
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>>6611424 >Master's ponies can't have foals Thinking about how I mentioned something like this in the first clop for Cuddle Buddies, and how said story was spawned through heavy discussion on this one; this has me giggling hard.
I know it's purely coincidental, but the idea amuses the hell out of me.
>Charlie is going to be the little filly Some monsters have all the luck.
I find it strangely endearing how little Zephyr switches gears so often. One moment she's being adorably subservient to Master, and then she's as intellectually rounded as she was when she was a human. It has the right kind of balance, and I like it a lot.
>>6611523 Agreed.
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>>6610221 This shit right here, man... That's hilarious
>>6611424 MOAR FOR FUCKS' SAKE
captcha: perfecute endahn
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Your name is Cobalt Hills, and humans are idiots.
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>>6621130 The bushes rustled, and you slinked back, ready to hide again. To your relief, it was just the guys. On the other hoof-hand!-on the other hand, they didn’t have the girl. Sparkles.
“She looked right at us, then went inside. Who does that?” Michael said, shaking his head.
“Someone who follows the instructions of an email, without researching it further.” You remarked, annoyed. “He didn’t have to kidnap her because she’s extremely stupid already. I think we should go back to our old plan.”
“Perhaps not.” Tyler said, rubbing his chin thoughtfully. That was a bad look for him. “You said you wanted to study the transformation, right?” he looked at Mike.
Mike looked back, confused. “I did. But we can’t get in there, and even if we could, I don’t have the equipment or the know-how to figure out how he’s doing it.”
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>>6621163 “I can get you a fully-equipped hospital room, but we have to get that girl out of there.” Tyler said, looking at the warehouse again.
“Stop, stop, stop.” You say, holding up a hoof. “Master-damn it, I mean he, has cameras everywhere. It was a fluke that we escaped. You want to go back in, find her, even though she’s likely already starting her transformation, and get out, without being detected?” there was no way. No way in hell that they could escape from Master. You barely made it, and that’s because he took in more victims than normal that round.
“If we time it right, why not? He goes out once a month or so; if he leaves her behind…” Tyler started, but stopped when he saw you shaking your head.
“No way. Master doesn’t leave a subject alone, ever. Even when they’re knocked out, he only leaves when he has to.” You’d seen it countless times, Master had enough food to last a year, and he restocked it between transformation sessions. When he delivered ponies to…wherever during yours, he brought you along. Sure, he kept you in the back, so you had no idea where they were going, but he never left you alone.
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>>6621198 “We’ll think of something. We have to.” Tyler said, sighing. “Shall we get back, then?”
You nod, even though this part is the worst thing about these recon missions. Tyler pulls a large animal carrier from the shrubbery, and you walk in. If you were more of a pony, you’d find this comforting; luckily, it’s actually an annoyance to you. He picks you up, and the three of you walk through the woods for a time, headed for Micheals truck.
“Hey, Cobalt. We’ll save her, you know that, right?”
“Mmm?”
Tyler goes on. “We’re going to get her out of there, like you got us out. We’ll find out how he’s doing this to people, and put a stop to this. And we’re going to get your memories back, too.”
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Gaiden Chapter 1 End Angel !GraceZDGeM Sun 16 Dec 2012 21:06:14 No. 6621249 Report Quoted By:
>>6621230 “Don’t do it for me. I’m already all but gone. Do it for the people who can still be saved.” You pretty much resigned yourself to living as a pony. You had a mind strong enough to resist the instincts of your new body, and you planned to use it, somehow, to stop Master. When the time came, though, you were going in alone. You weren’t going to risk these guys falling to Master as well.
Tyler stopped suddenly. “Mike. Come look at this.” You strain to see past the grate as Masters truck pulls out.
“What, what about it? He’s likely just delivering some new ponies.” I commented, annoyed at the interruption.
“There’s more than that. We may be able to execute our plan after all…”
What Tyler explained to the two of you was incredible, but it just might open the window for a rescue mission. You were getting Astarielle out, while there was still a human girl to get out.
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>>6557730 suck it up and write anyway
everyone sucked once
and we need content if it's *that* bad, we'll boo you and you can leave
updated the index, though i'm sure i missed a few stories' newer chapters in updating recent links.
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It wasn’t the most ideal time to be doing this, Luna much prefered the gentle thermals of the night, compared to the oppressive sun and it’s rough and tumble counterparts. It was unfortunate that she had to get her kicks this way, at least for the time being, but ‘Tia had busted her riding the pastel horse again, and knew that nighttime was when she would use. Daytime was better than no time, Luna decided.
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>>6621794 That you globe??
Is there a chance to see the Pon-E oneshot get added to the index?
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>>6625082 She shaked her head to clear it of those dark thoughts, she didn’t need magic, or religion, she’d found exactly what she needed to fix herself. Who would have thought, the drug that had been her salvation had been floating around in her body all along! PMT wasn’t in plants and animals the way it’s namesake was, but it did exist in particularly high amounts within certain individuals, it needed to be packed with an enzyme inhibitor to have any effect, and was by default, such was probably how it got it’s affectionate nickname. Heck, Luna was such a problem pony off the drug that she was confident she could take just the enzyme inhibitor and still experience the joys of flight, and even ‘real’ magic. The only problem was ‘Tia, she had always been the responsible one, she had to be if she was going to keep her precious Lucy safe. It tore Luna apart going behind her sister’s back like this, it tore her up even more because she ‘knew’ ‘Tia was hurting the same way she did while growing up, she simply never allowed anypony to see that.
Just as she thought, this trip was going south fast, stupid sun, it always brought out the worst of these occasions. She frowned softly when a few feathers fell out of her wings, rotting away almost immediately in mid air. She was losing altitude and started to make way towards her open window, which she managed to dive in expertly, she certainly had practiced enough by now. More feathers fell out as she hit the ground, thank the moon they didn’t leave any discernible evidence, they’d be gone soon.
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>>6625082 She shook her head to clear it of those dark thoughts, she didn’t need 'fake' magic, or religion, she’d found exactly what she needed to fix herself. Who would have thought, the drug that had been her salvation had been floating around in her body all along! PMT wasn’t in plants and animals the way it’s namesake was, but it did exist in particularly high amounts within certain individuals, it needed to be packed with an enzyme inhibitor to have any effect, and was by default, such was probably how it got it’s affectionate nickname. Heck, Luna was such a problem pony off the drug that she was confident she could take just the enzyme inhibitor and still experience the joys of flight, and even ‘real’ magic. The only problem was ‘Tia, she had always been the responsible one, she had to be if she was going to keep her precious Lucy safe. It tore Luna apart going behind her sister’s back like this, it tore her up even more because she ‘knew’ ‘Tia was hurting the same way she did while growing up, she simply never allowed anypony to see that.
Just as she thought, this trip was going south fast, stupid sun, it always brought out the worst of these occasions. She frowned softly when a few feathers fell out of her wings, rotting away almost immediately in mid air. She was losing altitude and started to make way towards her open window, which she managed to dive in expertly, she certainly had practiced enough by now. More feathers fell out as she hit the ground, thank the moon they didn’t leave any discernible evidence, they’d be gone soon.
Oreroi Sancto captcha, some serious 'wizard action there. TwiAnon
>>6625412 She had time to smile and think about all the scientists scrambling to uncover how a drug with these effects could be physically possible, even as her fur fell out in clumps and her wings rotted to nothing. That’s good Luna, keep your mind off of it, turning back the first time is always the worst, but there are exercises you could do to alleviate the trauma. Think of happy memories! Ugh... there’s nothing here. Wait! What about that time back in Canterlot when ‘Tia got caught by a school foal eating all that cake in a most uncivilized manner!? Luna laughed out loud for a brief moment before covering her mouth with a pair of hooves that, even now, were starting to crack in places.
PMT had a laundry list of ‘nasty’ side-effects, all of which Luna had be fortunate enough to avoid, at least so far. The last thing she wanted was ‘fake’ memories. Of all the side effects, schizophrenia was by far the least desirable, at least as far as she was concerned, she was weird enough as it is!
She curled up under a blanket and hunkered down for the rest of the reversal, it went smoother if you couldn’t see what was happening to you. Turning into a pony was graceful, majestic, Luna would even describe it as magical. Changing back was never that pleasant, it was like being dragged back to hell, at least that’s how she’d articulate the feeling, plenty of fellow ponies felt she was exaggerating for the sake of making herself depressed. What do idiots on the internet know about the intensity of her feelings, anyway?
It took about ten minutes tops, and she gave it another five until she was confident the phantom limb issue had abated enough for her to flex her fingers and walk on two legs without tripping over herself.
TwiAnon
>>6625450 “Okay,” she mumbled quietly to herself in a voice that only sounded ‘somewhat’ agonized, “Time for the routine check up...”
That was another side effect of the drug. Sometimes users found that not all of their body was as eager to revert back to ‘normal’. Sometimes things just stayed behind, like hooves, wings, horns, ears, etc. Often, these would still vanish in a few days, maybe a week, typically overnight while the person slept, but there were a few who had claimed that their features stuck around for months, and showed no signs of going away. Lucy hated herself for actually ‘wanting’ that side effect, it’d be like keeping a little part of herself around, a piece of Luna, the real her.
“Ears: check, Eyes: check, Horn is definitely gone, Wings are gone, no fur patches or anything...” She scanned her arms, “Looks like I’m fine!” She stated with glee.
A barely noticeable swishing movement responded to the statement from behind her.
“Oh... Shit,” she clasped her hands over her mouth and tried to decide whether she should be horrified or elated.
TwiAnon
>>6625082 It has been awhile since I've written 'anything', at all. I got home from work and felt like writing this story, though, so I guess for now I am.
More should be coming, I mean, I'm already writing the next part and stuff. Entries may or may not be brief or long, I'm a capricious pony.
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>>6625559 Welcome back! I see the molting, rotting wings motif you mentioned once had worked it's way into a story, and I like it.
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>>6625559 Ooh! More pony drugs!
I can't wait to see where this goes.
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>>6581508 YE BETTER START BELIEVIN' IN TF STORIES, LASS
BECAUSE...YER IN ONE.
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>>6611331 >Begging herself some books. Oh god, I'd be the worst person to abduct. "Hey, hey, heeeey. I'll suck your dick for this list of books. The last batch? I'm done with them. Yeah, I know its only been two days."
>>6625559 Hey, good to see you posting again. Does this mean the convention story is dead?
>>6621230 Hah, getting carted around in a pet carrier is not quite the action-packed life one would hope for as the leader of his little resistance.
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>>6640214 >"Hey, hey, heeeey. I'll suck your dick for this list of books. The last batch? I'm done with them. Yeah, I know its only been two days." And if Master got pony a Kindle or Nook?
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>>6640697 I'm imagining anal.
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>>6640697 Would it even respond to her hooves? I can't imagine that Master would want to keep flipping the pages for her. If her wings act the way they do for pegasi in the show, then I suppose that might work.
>>6641082 Wouldn't that be a first for the thread?
>imagining anal Talk about thinking it through.
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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FyScayKWbYpTEZxVxrVhd1DHbGQ3hg5bnCTBPReMQls/edit Here is the google document, if Globe or anyone else wants to comment on the writing and stuff. I'm trying to edit and make it actually well written for once.
>>6627719 A lot of personally relevant stuff will be in this story, write what you know, right?
Let's just ignore how much I don't know about drugs... >>6629963 I hope you will not be disappointed.
>>6640214 Not necessarily, but I wouldn't count on it returning, I just never felt all that personally invested in it, it was an exercise in getting my thoughts on paper, this is an exercise in getting my feels onto paper.
>>6641576 I imagine them using a stylus in their mouth.
>>6625222 Err, let me go find the link for that. It's usually more sloth than spite when I leave something off the doc.
>>6646888 >Here is the google document, if Globe or anyone else wants to comment on the writing and stuff. If only it weren't finals week!
I'll try to have it all marked up by Friday. Mind if I just add the doc link to the index?
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>>6647044 That's cool with me, I need to make one of those annoying cover pages for it too, I suppose.
I hate google documents so much, they are strange and unusual...
>>6625222 Actually? Having trouble finding the story you're talking about. Relink the pastebin or whatever?
>>6647284 Added your story to the doc and left precisely three comments.
I'd do more, but like I say: it's finals week. TwiAnon
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>>6647437 Noted, and thank you, having you yell at me certainly takes less time than putting it away for a month, so that when I reread it I can see exactly how terrible it is, like I did with those convention chapters.
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>>6647437 http://pastebin.com/u/emmens All listed under Pon-E 11 parts long.
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>>6625475 A tail of horse-like pale blue hair was flicking sporadically, as if in rhythm with her anxious state of mind. She reached out to touch it, marveling at the realization she had never touched a pony’s tail before, not with her own two hands at least.
“Okay, this could definitely be worse. A tail is easier to hide than my ears or something...” She absently ran her fingers through it while contemplating what to do next, “Think, you’ve read enough stories to handle this...”
Her mind raced through all of the old fairy tales. She could already hear her sister’s voice, chastising her for her impractical ideas, but she silenced it fairly easily like she always did. She stepped lightly towards the closet and tore out a long dark blue skirt from the mess inside triumphantly.
“Perfect, now everything will work out fine,” she blushed with concern at her next thought, “Just so long as I don’t get drunk around any samurai...”
It didn’t take much longer for Lucy to get ready. She never cultivated an image the way her sister did, and ever since starting PMT it was hard for her to care a lick about her human appearance anyway. Her timing was impeccable at least, because it wasn’t very long after making herself somewhat presentable that the door to her room flew open. Lucy nearly jumped into the air, but settled for a start when she considered the importance of hiding what was under her skirt.
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>>6651084 “Tia... You could have knocked,” Lucy’s pout was genuine.
“I wish I could trust you enough to respect your privacy, Lucy, I really do...”
Lucy fought back the urge to correct her sister regarding choice of name, but considered it a losing battle. Sophia strode into the room dressed nicely. She had to be if she was going to be presentable for her waitressing job. It wasn’t a glamorous position, but it was a very fine establishment and the patrons tipped decently. Her blonde hair was kept relatively short, reaching just down to her shoulders. She had cut it, then, Lucy realized. Her job must have called for it, she’d been growing it out ever since they were kids. She was always a nut about her mane, ‘hair’ Luna corrected herself.
“You have class today Lucy, you won’t be missing another one. Putting you through college is killing me and you ‘will’ pass your classes...” Sophia said in a threatening tone dripping with barely contained frustration.
“Yes, of course Tia. I’m all ready and everything, I just need to grab my bag,” She moved to pick it up before realizing exactly the kind of situation that would put her in.
“Uh... I’ll meet you in the car?” She smiled weakly.
Sophia crossed her arms. “In the last ten years, I’ve never once seen you wear a skirt, not unless I made you,” Her words didn’t even bother concealing her suspicion, “Don’t act like I haven’t been studying that drug of yours, pick up the bag,”
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>>6651138 Lucy paused to consider whether her sister was that smart, or if she really was that bad at lying, at least to her. She noted for the first time that her skirt would shift slightly every so often, although there was no breeze in the room.
‘Okay, so I’m just a bad liar...’
“Tia, please listen to me...”
“Stop,” Sophia raised a hand to her forehead. She squinted her eyes in frustration before looking back up. “Do not call me that again. I’m not a part of your delusions Lucy,” She lowered her hand and glared at her sister, moving toward her with anger emphasising each step. “What are you hiding?”
Reluctantly, Lucy lowered her skirt just enough for her azure tail to tumble out. It looked beautiful to her, but Sophia’s face registered only disgust.
“You used again, didn’t you?! I told you not to!” Lucy shrunk from her big sister’s words, “Do you want to end up like some kind of lunatic?! Why are you so hell-bent on turning yourself into some kind of animal?!”
Lucy simply nodded her head and took several steps back. Her body was pressed firmly against the wall, and even if she ‘were’ a good liar, her tail was advertising her fear to anyone present. Sophia didn’t even pay attention, she stormed through the room, flipping out drawers, overturning her mattress, the whole nine yards. She was panting with the effort and from her own frustration before spotting something, an old music box their parents had left Lucy after they died.
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>>6651162 Sophia reached out, and tried to open the smallish container. Lucy flinched when her sister cracked it open over the side of the night stand, but couldn’t help feeling like she should have expected that when she started locking it. Small capsules spilled out onto the floor and Sophia cried out in triumph, and placed the somewhat intact container back on top of her sister’s dresser.
“Stay right there, don’t move a muscle,” Sophia threatened before heading out the doorway.
Lucy almost didn’t, until she noticed one of the little capsules had spilled out and rolled far enough across the floor to land near her feet. She bent over and picked it up, squeezing it in her palm like a lifeline. Just in time to go unnoticed by her sister, who returned with a large empty medicine bottle and began picking them up, one at a time, and then placing them into the orange see-through container.
“You and I need to have a talk...” She practically growled.
“I expect to see you in the kitchen in thirty minutes, I need time to cool off before I kill you or something,” Lucy had time to see the tears in the corner of her sister’s eyes, before Sophia could manage to storm off.
She could not remember the last time she felt this guilty.
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Chapter 4 (really Chapter 5) Angel !GraceZDGeM Tue 18 Dec 2012 04:28:32 No. 6657132 Report Picks up right after
>>6581593 “Master?” I asked him, going back into startled mode. That was a little creepy. This guy wasn’t just making ponies, he was making pet ponies. Didn’t he just say they lived in a village in the mountains? What was going on here?
“Angel, I’d like you to meet Lone Blaze” a smallish unicorn, red with a lighter red mane. Not a real looker… “And Zypher Bolt.” Yellow unicorn with a blue mane; worked better than I thought it would. Wait, they used to be humans, why was I admiring his handiwork? “Like I said before, it takes time for the transformation to occur, so I keep my subjects here while it’s going on.” He stood up, beckoning the two ponies to follow, which they did happily.
The room they emerged from was a little smaller than the monitor room. There was a table with three chairs in one corner, a bed in the middle and four dishes on the floor. A tv sat against one wall, but there was no sign of a remote. Of course, I had to turn around and examine the door itself. When it was closed, it could be locked from the outside by not one, but two deadbolts, and there were large dents on the bottom of the door. I shuddered a bit, then shivered. It was really starting to get cold down here.
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>>6657132 My thoughts were interrupted by a ringing noise upstairs, and Starlit Skies (it’s so weird to think of him like that, but what else was I going to call him?) looked at his watch and sighed. “I think I know who this is. Girls, this is Angel Grace, she’s new here. Would you like to stay with her while I take care of something?”
Lone Blaze nodded. “Of course, whatever you like, Master.” She replied, looking up at him with adoration. He smiled at her, then turned to look at me. “I’ll be only a moment, then we can talk more.” He closed the door, and I could hear the sound of both deadbolts engaging. So, for all his poise, I was essentially a prisoner until I became a pony.
Speaking of which, my two roommates were circling around me unnervingly, examining me from all angles. “What, do I look that weird to you?” I asked, before it occurred to me, yeah, I probably did.
“Juuuust a little. Master doesn’t usually bring others like him in here.” Zypher Bolt explained, stopping in front of me. “He said that we would be going home soon. Are you here to take us there?”
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>>6657169 I guess that this “home” of theirs was New Equestria. I wondered how many people-turned-ponies were living there happily, and if what Cobalt said was true; that these ponies had no idea what they used to be. It was kinda scary, but thrilling, too. Skies had been right about one thing; my life seemed aimless, hollow. Maybe the magic of friendship is what I needed…but I wasn’t ready to be erased yet.
“No, silly. He said she’s new, so she’s never been there.” Lone and Zypher were having a bit of a scuffle, trying to decide why I was here with them. Once they figured it out, I would have to ask them if they knew-
“Ah!” I stumbled over to the bed, holding my head. Sudden chills had passed over my body, stronger than anything I’d felt before. The two ponies had gone to the door, calling out for their Master, but I was only barely aware of them. What was going on with my body…was I starting to change into a pony already? He said he had already dosed me once…twice? Who knows.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6657221 I laid there, shivering, trying anything I could to get warm, and was about to resign myself to feeling like I was encased in ice when a sudden warmth spread through my body and spirit. I turned my head enough to see him stroking my side. “There, there, Angel…” he said kindly, smiling down at me. Okay, psychopath or not, this was really, really nice.
“What’s happening to me?” I asked, still shuddering even after the warmth his touch brought me. “Am I really…”
“Changing? Yes…It looks like the shift has begun…” he rearranged the bedclothes, helping me get comfortable. “Faster than I thought it would; your body and mind are just disagreeing on how pony you are right now.” He chucked a bit, stroking my cheek. Oh god please stop doing that I enjoy it way too much. “I guess it just means there was a pony in there fighting to get out. Get some rest, my dear Angel Grace. I’ll take these two up to New Equestria, and then we’ll have all the time in the world.”
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>>6657246 I wasn’t sure if it was the deliriousness, or whatever it was that had made these two ponies in mind as well as body, but that seemed really great to me. He clapped his hands once; Zypher and Lone came to his side quickly. “Why don’t you two get ready? It’ll only be a minute.” They went off to the corner by the TV, picking up some stuff as he turned his head back to me. Once again, I was struck by how handsome he was. Even looking at him seemed to warm me up. “I’m going to have to leave for a little while. I don’t normally leave subjects alone during the change, but I think I can trust you. Can I trust you, Angel Grace?”
I nodded mutely, and he rubbed my head with a big smile. Ah, that felt nice, and not just the rub. The praise he was giving me with the headrub left a warmth that didn’t fade as quickly as he pulled back. “I’ll put on a selection of some of my favorite episodes; should be plenty to keep you busy until I get back. Stay under the blankets, alright? The chills will last awhile, and I don’t like seeing you cold.” I gave him another little nod, still speechless, and he motioned to the two ponies nearby.
“Is Miss Angel Grace going to be okay, Master?” Zypher asked, as the trotted up to join him. He nodded down at her. “Of course she will. I’m going to take good care of her, like I take care of all my friends. But we’ve waited long enough, I bet you’re eager to get home.” They both cheered, and he closed the door behind them, the locks clicking. After a few minutes, the Television came to life, and I laughed.
“Clock is ticking, Twilight. Clock. Is. Ticking!”
This was one of my favorite episodes too. Somehow, the knowledge that he liked it made me happy. I settled down to watch the episode. Perhaps Starlit wasn’t so bad, after all. Even if he was turning me into a pony, I guess it was just so I could be happy.
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>>6657281 >Perhaps Starlit wasn’t so bad, after all. Game over man. It's all over for Angel now.
I'm rather liking all of this quite a bit. Everything seems to be working out so well in terms of how serious business it appears to be. It's a bit feel inducing to watch our protag fall into the inevitable fate she was destined with. I say it was inevitable because it wouldn't really be much of a TF story if she didn't change.
You're doing very well at keeping me interested in your story. Please continue.
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>>6662128 >wouldn't be a tf story if the protag didn't change Now that's not fair.
Look at A Drug and Pony Show.
There's transformations and there's ponies, and the protag takes part, but he's stayin' human.
Showing the transformation from the protagonist's perspective is just the most popular course of action-- not the only one.
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>>6662321 Hang on, you seem to have missed the entire context of the sentence.
I said the story itself wouldn't be much of a TF story if she didn't change. I haven't read A Drug and Pony Show yet, but I'm assuming the protag has some sort of responsibility for the changes? Regardless, with the way things have been going, I'm not inclined to believe her successful evasion of the ponification process could make the story into the intriguing plot it appears to have as a whole.
This is all my own >opinion on it anyway
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Would you read a story where Anon goes to Equestria and turns into a dragon?
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>>6662508 Sure, give it a go.
Also bump.
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>>6657132 >Large dents in the bottom of the door. Gave me chills. Even if it was just Cobalt, that's a bad sign. How desperate must a pony be to buck at a steel door in the futile hope of escape?
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>Bump. >Read stories. >Love it. >Want to write own story. >Sucks at writing. >fuckthisshit.png
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>>6674652 this, also I can't think of anything original
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>>6674652 Goddammit, what did I just say in...
Fuck finding my post.
Write anyway.
If you write, then get someone to help you figure out why it's bad, and then try again, you ought to be able to get better.
>>6674830 So just take an old idea-- like the original prompt, if you want-- and tweak it a bit to make it your own. Fuck. Add local color? Put in a twist, and see if it's not too tacky?
Or run with one of the ideas from the idea bank in the doc; we've got more story ideas than time to write.
If you really don't think you can write a full length story, write a snippet or something. Do it a couple times!
Don't just say "I'm rubbish" and walk away; there's modesty, then there's self-pity. The latter often winds up obnoxious.
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>>6674937 >idea bank Where is this in the doc? I can't seem to find it.
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>>6674937 Ok, might give it a shot
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>>6675011 it is the link by Current / Unstarted works, below the links for the current thread and the chatroom.
also:
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheet/ccc?key=0AlpLL5qAxddWdGFUckRYQzFxYjlOUXg0Mkd3d3AwVFE#gid=0 Anonymous
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>>6573291 So then you Dragged the Mons Gator all the way to Amos' home.
Which was a giant tree.
You didn't get to stay long however due to Luna deciding to have you leave to check on Trixie and Ivory, as well as Twilight were she still in the castle by this point. Luna said that she would use a teleportation spell to insure that she made the trip safely by herself.
the flight back felt particualrly lonely.
You land in the front of the castle, the weather was a bit cloudy...
For some reason all you can do is try to remember how long you've been here.
A week? You feel a week and a half,
Everything has sort of blended together with how tight the schedule you've kept has been.
"Hey, Anon!" You hear Shining from off to the side as you just now enter the castle.
"Hey."
Standing next to Shining was a slightly taller Guard unicorn "Good evenin sir" the man said in a vaguely familar voice you couldn't quite place.
"Evening, How is everything Shining?" you ask as you walk down the halls.
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>>6682010 "Well, I believe it would be good to let you know, we have some Recruits coming in"
"More guard members?" You ask.
"Lunar Guard members." Shining says with a larger than expected smile.
"So more ponies to trian for you"
"For us actually"
You pause "I'm not sure I'm processing this properly. Did you say for us to train?" You look at him "I'm sort of new to this too"
"Well, We're gonna find out, from what I've been told you're going to be getting some more responsibilities from Luna."
"Next thing you you'll say is I'm going to be assigned as captain to the guard" You laugh a bit.
His face sort of doesn't change as you say that, keeping the odd smile.
"...Keep your mouth shut shining." You say.
"Also, for the next few days I'll be attending to various political goings on in the crystal kingdom" He tells you "Until then my position is going to be taken up by my second in command Lance Jousting."
"Lance...jousting." You look past Shining loking at the Guard behind him.
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>>6682569 Pony world....Noun Verb names.
"Well, I'll look forward to training with you for the next few days Lance"
Lance nods a bit "I'll be sure to make them worthwile." he says turning off to go elsewhere,
"I should be back in time to meet you and the new recruits." shinin said
"Okay good." You take a moment to scratch an itch in your mane "Now, I have to go make a check on someone." You say excusing yourself to go walk toward the medical bay.
here came the part that had been nagging at your head since you and Luna had left.`
(Re) Meeting Ivory.
>>6682010 >>6682569 >>6682941 Whoops I cliffhangered!
I finally got to the point where only my sneezes hurt with this cold of mine.
I think shortie gave it to me. Anyhow, I hope this was a goood set of updates, expect another soon, most likely tomorrow after midnight,
Critiques and comments always accepted my email is in the field so feel free to email me.
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>>6683013 "I'm going to spend the afternoon with Luna!"
>"lolnope, you can go home now" Poor Batmane. One day you will get to spend more than 30 minutes with the princess of the night.
>New Recruits This should get interesting
>Lance Jousting There's a dirty pun here, but I'm going to let it go. I'm grinning like a beast though.
>Meeting Ivory Yes. Yes! Yes!! YES!!! Now we'll see just how different Ivory's personality will get after being "mindraped,"... metaphorically speaking of course.
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>>6683013 >More ivory. Hurry.
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>>6687741 I'll write everything tomorrow.
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I'm sure this will sound /soc/-y but..
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>>6700071 That is a proper thing to blame. Ye may also balme the chat room in general.
Anyone seen One of Three Names? I'm worried he got kidanped and forgot to tell us how to turn into ponies.
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>>6700071 Well, if it is any consolation, I'm 4 posts into part 9 for Celestia and Luna pick on humans for fun. I've still got a little bit to go, but I might have it done in a couple hours.
Key word being: might.
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I lied, part 9 begins now!>No, not yet Shiner >You've got to keep it together >Before collapsing, you move your front hooves forward a bit and hold yourself up >Black invades your vision from all angles, but you fight your hardest to remain awake >Joe is trying to say something to you; however, you can't really make it out >Concentrating on maintaining a standing position is eating up all your focus >You don't even feel his hooves trying to hold you up as you cast your fading gaze back up to the princesses >They're back to normal and are currently making their way down to you >Did Joe flag them down or are they legitimately concerned? >The world before you is flickering constantly as their shapes repeatedly shift from one to the other >One moment they're normal, but the next they look like those monsters again >You shut your eyes tight and return to focusing on avoiding the sweet embrace of sleep >Startled by the landing of the princesses before you, your eyes shoot open to identify the source of the noise >Two ponies stand before you, not monsters >Certainly not monsters who constantly like to sniff the flanks of the royal guards >When he's not doing that, he proceeds to pretend his own flank is talking to said guards >He accomplishes this by... ugh pulling upon his flank with those claws in motion with his speech >Your face must reveal the amount of stress you're suffering from as the royal sisters look upon you with what appears to be pity. >Finally getting a grip on reality you shake your head a few times to clean the visual slate
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>>6706961 >Ignoring the weird wolf noises from the monster towards the princesses, you try to listen to what everyp0ny is saying around you >"... are you sure your friend here is alright?" Princess Celestia asks Joe >J:"I'm not 100% sure your highness, but this has happened to him before. It's actually why we're here at the castle." >The princess of the sun looks down at you curiously >Your ears droop a bit as you shrink away from her slightly >That image won't go away >It's like it won't let you forget what you -think- you saw >She looks more concerned now, and attempts to speak to you >"Please Shiner, I only wish to know what happened," she says trying to reassure you >Wait, how did she know your name? Did Joe say it? >No, he looks slightly surprised too, and it looks like he's about to ask >"U-uh princess? Forgive me, but how did you know his name?" Joe cautiously inquires >Both princesses look a little surprised for a moment before responding >"Did you not call out to him as we were descending from our balcony?" Luna asks >The monster lets you know that he doesn't buy it with that word about bulls and their fecal matter >"I-I guess I did... sorry your highness," Joe says while cringing a bit away from the sisters >PC:*giggle* "Do not worry my pony. It was a rather tense moment for you and your friend." 2/7
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>>6706972 >Assuming all was well, you stop drooping your ears, but you still feel highly uneasy >The monster seems more concerned with trying to stick one of his pointy appendages into Princess Luna's nose >Why did she just sneeze, and why did she look towards her sister with a glare for a split second? >The monster turns to you with a grin on his face, and you're suddenly terrified beyond belief >Could he have actually...? No way, it's impossible "Princess Luna?" You ask in order to get her attention
>She responds normal enough with a curious look on her face "That sneeze... do you know why it happened?" You're risking a lot with this question
>The monster's grin can't get any bigger than it is now >She balks for a moment in understandable confusion >"I merely felt something tickle my nose. I assume it to have been pollen or some such in the air. Why do you ask, Spit Shine?" She responds a little defensively >Spit Shine? That's the first time you've heard your real name in a while >Everyp0ny who knew you called you Shiner, even Princess Celestia called you by that name "I can understand you knowing my nickname Princess, but nop0ny has said my real name in years," you say while slightly narrowing your eyes at the Princess
3/7
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>>6706999 >She cocks a brow at you >"I recognized the nickname 'Shiner' to be that of the pony known as Spit Shine. Are you not Spit Shine, Canterlot's number 1 Window Washer?" She asks with a fine tone of confusion >You can only squeak out an "oh" and nod your head sadly >Of course, word of your work has to have spread to the princesses at some point >What the hay are you doing Shiner? You nearly accused the Princess of something on the basis of what the monster was doing >He's laughing hysterically now and you just hang your head in shame "I-I'm immensely sorry Princess. I've been having weird hallucinations lately, and one of them was... poking your nose when you sneezed. I suppose it was a freak coincidence?"
>The spaghetti pouring from your mane could feed the entire guard >Why spaghetti? Forget it, it's not important right now >Princess Celestia starts giggling while Joe chuckles nervously >Princess Luna on the other hand, does not appear to be as amused; especially because she's glaring fiercely at her sister >A young colt would be in tears from the feelings you're going through right now >Why did this have to happen to you? What did you do wrong to warrant a curse of this magnitude? >You're almost at your wit's end from all of this >"It is quite alright Spit Shine," Luna says, "While your hallucinations are rather... troubling, they cannot be of your own creation. What pony would curse themselves with such creatures of beastly behavior?" 4/7
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>>6707012 >What pony indeed, but it's nice to hear her sympathetic tone "We should be going Joe since I'm feeling better. We have to find that specialist as soon as possible you know."
>"Alright then, do you want me to lead the way?" Joe asks while bowing to the princesses "Considering how I'm feeling, that would be for the best." You reply and give the royal sisters your own bow
>The two of you say your good-byes to the princesses and trot off into the castle >You don't notice the argument between the sisters as you leave >Well, more like the sun princess is laughing while the lunar princess is fuming about something >Once inside the first waiting room, you show the note to the mare behind the desk >She gives it a once over and lets you head on through >Incredible >The same thing occurs when you approach the mare behind the desk at the second waiting room >You're also getting escorted by that one mare from yesterday, and it seems she remembers you too >Taking up a cowardly position behind Joe, the three of you make your way down the hall >The monsters finds now to be the perfect opportunity to voice his opinion on the mare ahead of him >Oh, of all the ponies in Canterlot he finds one whose flank is... too big? >You almost shout out your response to that when your hooves decide to invade your mouth >The two ponies ahead of you stop and look back at you >They're both sporting different looks, but at least the mare isn't preparing to "lift" you again "What?" you ask as you put both front hooves back on the floor
>Joe shakes his head while the mare once again turns her nose up at you 5/7
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>>6707027 >You're curious as to why the monster suddenly believes her flank is too big >It actually looks finely toned >You'd confirm what you just said a second time, but Joe's hoof just greeted the back of your head >His wink lets you know that he was aware of what you were doing, but he wasn't going to let you get caught doing it >What a life saver because she just turned around >"Mr. Paper Pusher has been waiting for you two, so please take a seat inside," she says before trotting off back the way the three of you came >You sneeze when her tail brushes against your nose, and you just have to look back at her >That look on her face says one thing, "I know you were looking." >It then turns into a smirk that reads, "I didn't mind." >Wait a second, is this the same mare that nearly put you through a wall yesterday? >You look down for a moment and notice a note at your hind hooves on the floor >Picking it up, you take a look at what it says, and quickly hide it in your saddlebag before Joe sees it >That girl has more things wrong with her than just being surprisingly strong >Better keep this secret rendezvous stuff as just that: a secret >At least for now >Joe is none the wiser as he holds the door open for both of you >Upon entering, you two retake the seats you had yesterday and wait for that office worker to finally look up >He must be really busy since he literally has his face buried in those stacks of paper >Joe decides enough is enough and lets out an appropriately audible cough 6/7
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>>6707043 >"Ah, Doughnut Joe and Shiner. I've been expecting the two of you." He says after finally looking up from those papers >He wasn't this busy yesterday, but it was nearing the end of the day at that time "So, Mr. Paper Pusher was it, were you able to find anyp0ny?"
>"Indeed I have. I must say though, it took a little bit of doing for me to put this together." "What do you mean?"
>"This particular specialist is rather... unusual, but he's quite good at what he does." "Unusual how? Don't tell me he's a quack or something."
>"Not at all; however, some refer to him as being a little strange if that's okay with you. Although, I guarantee that he is the best pony for the job." >You can only sigh in response >This pony better be worth it with a description like that 7/7
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>>6707120 >That look on her face says one thing, "I know you were looking." >It then turns into a smirk that reads, "I didn't mind." This greatly interests me and I want to know what the note said
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The third episode came to an end, and I let out a happy sigh. This was nice. Sure, Starlit might be turning me into a pony, but he was treating me more like a human being than any other person had. Maybe this wouldn’t be so bad…
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>>6709424 “Astarielle. Did you hear what you just said?” Cobalt said, giving me a look that could chill a volcano.
I thought back to it, then put a hand to my mouth. “Okay, duly noted. How the hell did he do that to me?” I asked him.
“I have no idea.” Micheal replied, helping me out of bed; I shivered, and he tossed his coat around me. “It seems part of the change is instilling a sense of submission and loyality to this madman.”
“What’s his name?” I asked, looking at Cobalt. The pony merely shrugged.
“I don’t have the foggiest. I keep thinking of him as Master. Heck, I can’t even remember my own name.”
“And it’s not like we can go up and introduce ourselves. We just keep thinking of him as ‘That guy kidnapping people and ponifying them.” Tyler remarked. “Now, come on, let’s get out of here before-“
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>>6709486 Micheal covered his mouth, putting a finger to his own lips. I could hear someone moving upstairs.
“Actually, you are paying me millions to run experiments.” A pause. “Look, give me a month. I need to perfect the formula, then you’ll get-“ a longer pause. “It’s simply not ready, I’m still showing unexpected results. A month to restructure, and I can have a prototype to you in a couple weeks.”
The footsteps moved off towards another part of the warehouse, and Cobalt urged us onward. We moved up the stairs swiftly, and I spared a glance back as we neared the exit. Starlit was walking out of the shadows again and spotted us, eyes wide. He moved towards us, and Tyler pushed me forward. We managed to stumble into underbrush, and out the other side, where there was a pickup truck waiting. Cobalt leaped into the back seat, and I followed him, the two guys taking the front.
“Angel! Come back!” Starlit Skies called out, as the truck started. Before I could look back again, we peeled away, and my last glimpse of the man was fleeting before we turned a corner, headed into town.
Cobalt pulled me down to the floor suddenly. “Why do I get the feeling of being kidnapped again?” I asked him.
In response, he brushed a hoof over my arm. Well, that felt strange. First off, his hooves were really, really soft on the inside, with a rough outside. Also? I seemed to have a light coating of hair.
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>>6709527 “You’re becoming a pony.” He said, examining my rear. “No sign of a tail yet.” He added, luckily before I whacked him over the head. “But your hair is starting to become fuller and greener. It would be better if we weren’t seen.”
I had to agree with him; people tended to freak out when they saw talking ponies in real life. I was coming dangerously close to being lumped in that category, myself.
“So, everything is set, then?” Michael was asking Tyler.
Tyler nodded. “Yep. All the stuff has been moved to my basement, and a crew just sterilized it. We should be able to find a way to slow, if not stop, the effects.” We pulled into a driveway, and I tried to peek out the window. Cobalt pulled me down again.
“Will you stop being an idiot for one second?” he hissed at me, as Tyler hopped out of the truck. After what seemed like an eternity, he opened the backseat door, holding up a carrier. Cobalt got into it, and Tyler closed the door behind him. “Come on, Astarielle, but move quick.”
I followed behind the two of them, entering the house. Well, this certainly was fancy. The entire house had a very classy vibe, but clearly belonged to an extremely wealthy-was that an original painting hanging on the wall over the fireplace?
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>>6709663 Tyler urged us all downstairs, where a small hospital room had been set up.
“Lay down, Astarielle.” Micheal said, and I did so. He went over my body, giving me a full exam. The thoroughness of it was a little unsettling.
“Don’t worry. He may not be certified, but he’s a medical prodigy. He’s been a big help.” Cobalt assured me. Oh lovely, the pony trusted him.
“Ow!” I looked over to see Micheal pulling blood from my arm. The hair was starting to get thicker, too. Now that I mentioned it, I could feel a pulling at the base of my spine. “Guys? I think my tail is starting to come in.” I said uneasily.
The three of them looked at each other, and Micheal moved up to my side. “I’d like to put you under sedation. I think it will slow the process down long enough for us to find a way to reverse it.”
I sat up a little. “Whoa, whoa, and if you can’t? I wake up as a pony.” I pointed out the obvious flaw in their reasoning.
“If he doesn’t, you become a pony, either way. If the changes are containing to progress like this, you’ve been dosed enough that the rest of the treatments are just speeding up the process, making it easier for you to accept.” Cobalt countered. “Sedation will slow all the processes of your body, including mutation.”
I sighed slightly, closing my eyes. This was unbelievable. I just wanted to go home and cuddle with Master-
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>>6709739 …”do it.” I said, looking at Micheal.
“Excuse me?” he seemed surprised by my sudden conviction.
“The changes are happening in my head, too. If we don’t do it soon, I’ll stop wanting to change back.”
The look on his face was grim as he turned away, coming back with a syringe. “Okay, just relax, Astarielle. When you wake up, we’ll have a cure and that whacko will have what he deserves.” He injected the sedative into my arm, ice water flowing up it. A couple minutes later, the world around me faded as I slipped into blissful slumber.
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>>6682941 The Walk to the door felt like it took miles to move toward.
You dread this. Really, Really dread this.
You don't even know why you dread it. She's not evil anymore.
Maybe you're jsut fearing you'll stop hating her. Or that you didn't hate here fro.. NO...
Dear god that is a load of bullshit she tried to strangle you! You have more likelihood of ending up with Twilight then with the once pony who has came closer to killing you more times than anything else in this crazy pony world.
Before you know it you've came to the door....Oh...
You're panicking....You turn from the door pressing your back against the wall aside it, taking a sitting positon.
Where is this coming from!?
You inhale deeply, exhaling with equal force
YOu can do this. YOu can do this...it's just a pony...
Just ivory.
You can do this.
You're getting vague flashes from the "Hoof slip" incident.
The way her lips felt so soft. God that wasn't bad at all.
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"Anon?" Suddenly you hear a voice call you out of your attempt at pulling out of the panic attack
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"I knew you were here!" she suddenly jumps a bit as every item in the room drops, hitting with a million clattering sounds.
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"Princess Luna has decided to have you join The Lunar Guard" You say with out delay, hoping to slow down the way she was talking, the fact that she was still very....however she was, was not good for you.
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"What?!"
>>6710586 >>6710769 >>6710960 >>6711193 >>6711419 UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!
Yes, I decided to flip the cold I ave the bird and have Ivory lead me through a slightly longer than usual update
Was it good for you?
Anyway, Comments and critiques welcomed. Emails too. Have a good night.
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>>6709782 This just keeps getting better and better. Don't stop.
>>6711519 >This new Ivory She's every bit the pain in the neck for Batmane she was while evil. I believe she still has that spark in her, and I like how she casually talked about choking Batmane again. I'm also digging how Trixie reacted to all of this.
>"Well, I clearly can't go back to living in my jewelry shop now can I?" It's official now.
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>>6712213 I thought it was always official that she worked as a jeweler actually....
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>>6712595 Always forgetting my damn trip.
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>>6712621 Wait, was it mentioned in the story before this part? I remember you being set on it in our e-mails, but I can't remember if it appeared in a previous part. If not, there's no turning back on it now. If so, then I mcfucked up.
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>>6611424 The rest of the day passes in comfort and idleness, with particularly loud action films meant to cover the occasional scream from downstairs.
"You figure by now he'd have just passed out, y'know?"
"I may or may not have thrown a stimulant into the needle."
"Master! That's horrible."
"No, horrible is watching you wake up in terror, even getting hit by the odd flapping wing, every night for a week and a half."
You would apologize, but you honestly don't feel like you're at fault there. You do nuzzle his leg a bit, and shivers run up your spine as his fingers delicately run up the back of your neck and ear. Somewhere in the sleepy daze of a quiet evening of cuddling you even worked up the nerve to ask him for something to occupy you while he worked, and he even seemed receptive! At some point after sharing your likes and dislikes you noticed something quite odd.
The movie's been done for about twenty minutes now, and you haven't heard anything from downstairs. Your fully perked ears and raised head get Master's attention, and it only takes a moment of eye contact for him to understand what you're getting at. Without any prompting or a word exchanged, you remove yourself from his lap, Autumn following suit so he can rise to his feet and lead the way. Autumn stalls at the top of the basement stairs, choosing to wait for you there instead, but you're in one hundred percent. Part of you wants to stop outside and collect yourself, but Master throws the door to the playroom open without even checking the...
No, he did look at the two-way mirror... it's just fogged over?
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>>6713547 Sure enough, there's a healthy wave of steam flowing out the open door to the playroom and for a moment you're at a loss to explain it. But there was steam rising from Opal during her change, wasn't there? Your Master doesn't seem to pause for any of this and heads right into the cloud, and despite your misgivings you're hot on his heels a second later, if only out of concern for him. Not all that logical, considering you're ill equipped to deal with any problem that doesn't need eating or cuddling, but it's your first instinct. You can hear vaguely human noises somewhere in here, but you can't see a thing! Master seems to be having some trouble locating tubby, but then it dawns on you that you can actually help for once!
Master seems a little surprised to hear you flapping your wings like mad, but when the swirling steam cloud begins to dissipate under your crude, pokeymans-esque gust attack you
can see him smiling at you.
"Very clever, Zephyr. Who's my smart pony?"
"I am!"
Oh god, did you really just say that? Yeah, you definitely need some kind of intellectual challenge before you're, well... Autumn. You love her, you just don't want to be her. Small, labored moans catch your attention, and a few more stiff flaps of your best feature finally draw back the curtain over tonight's big show.
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Zephyr Writefag !!e3ActqGNipi
>>6713583 The steam is rolling off of him in waves, to the point that the plush carpet around him is soaked, and he's already lost a substantial amount of overall mass. Sadly, his shrinking and rearranging limbs are a bit smaller than his still rounded, flabby torso, giving him
the appearance of a particularly unpleasant tortoise. You giggle a bit, still enjoying the novelty of being unafraid of him, but another soft moaning sound stifles your laughter. The wrinkly, halfway-rearranged head and neck roll a bit toward the two of you.
Oh sweet pony jeebus, he's still conscious. Master's quick in checking his pulse, and then
really grosses you out by forcing his eyes open to check his response. They're... freakishly, horrifically large, but his irises and pupils are still human looking, leaving this enormous sea of reddened eye around those tiny islands. They even seem... oh no, they're even pulsing and twitching as Master's toys do their thing. That might give you nightmares.
"M-m-m-master? Opal didn't look like this." You can't contain the worry in your voice. Just killing Charlie would have been one thing, but now you're worried the little filly might come out wrong. Malformed, maybe even handicapped. Eugh, wait! No, it's still gonna be Charlie in there, not some innocent child. If you're still the same jerk you have been and Opal's still a panicky worrywart, then this will still, still, be a bastard wearing different skin. Won't he?
"I knew this was going to be bad going in. I'm going to have to stay down here and keep him from going into shock. You should go back upstairs and stay with Autumn."
Zephyr Writefag !!e3ActqGNipi
>>6713630 "B-but Master-"
"No. This is going to be long, difficult and disgusting and you're going to be sick if you stay down here."
"No I won't!"
"The steam you were breathing? That's all over both of us?"
"Yeah?"
"That's Charlie. You were breathing Charlie. You're covered in Charlie."
Your gag reflex is sudden and violent. Oh god, little bits of him are inside you now! Gross! Gross! Gross! Oh ew, oh fuck, this is awful!
"I saw that. Go upstairs and be good with Autumn and I'll give you a bath later."
You don't think you've moved so quickly since falling toward the van. Sadly, your panicked leaps over multiple stairs at a time put poor Autumn in a frenzy until you convinced her that nothing was wrong and Master was fine. Even she looked a little grossed out when you told her what Master said to get you out of the room, but she also took the time to comfort you as only Autumn could. A nest made of every blanket and pillow in the living room all in a pile on the floor, some fruit pilfered from the fridge, and some very, very interesting applications of them once you'd moved past cuddling. Even though you're infected with lardo, Autumn still thinks you're sexy, and for now that's enough.
-That's all for this one folks. Questions, comments, ideas and suggestions are, as always, highly encouraged.
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>>6713793 Somehow, I always check this thread right after you post.
Nothing else to say (my writing's a bit crap, so can't really help in that sense), but just wanted to say that I've really enjoyed everything so far.
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>>6713793 Just read your entire Zephyr's Tale in one crazy late-night binge, and I really wanted to thank you for it! It's cute, and gripping, and hits all of my interests (like seriously... ALL of them wtf are you me?)
Anyway, I somehow hope everything turns out... acceptable for Charlie. I think I'd be sad if your story wasn't all happy endings, it's just too warm otherwise!
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>>6696246 And this is why this fine writer continues to earn his unique tag in the index: [Written on a PS3]
Some Fagit
>>6610221 The sight of you there with the pizza, and your reflexive scowl, silences them in short order. You just shake your head and carry the pizza inside, before dropping it on the foot of the bed. When you turn back around, Chris has removed his towel and his doing his best to look innocent—which is not easily done, giving that he looks like the sort of person who murders white people for sport.
As Bill scrambles up onto the bed, you take a piece of the supreme for yourself and sit down on the couch. Chris had made good use of your Netflix subscription, to set up tonight's entertainment: Friendship is Magic, Season One Episode One—in honor of the occasion, he said. The twin novelties of watching a show about ponies, with a pony, and that pony being the loathsome Bill, weigh heavily on your mind. By Fluttershy's introduction you've had your second piece of pizza—and on a whim, you thump Bill's shoulder.
"Hey! What was that for?!"
"You know this isn't a dream, right?"
"Yeah, I knew that."
"You're a fucked-up guy, Bill.
"Knew that, too."
Between the episodes, Bill strikes up conversation again: with you and Chris both.
"So where are the others?"
It takes you a moment to realize what he means, and you answer with a shake of the head.
"There are no...'others'."
"But there's always...oh, you mean I'm the first one?"
Chris nods, and Bill rubs her hooves in a distinctly disconcerting way; her grin is straight off a hyena's face.
"Aaaaalright. Who's our next mark?"
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>>6716526 _________________________________________________________________________________________________
You probably should've objected to going out to do anything at this hour, let alone something highly illegal that was an affront against God and nature; but the glint in the others' eyes told you they were doing it with or without you, and at least this way you got a cut of Chris' seemingly bottomless wallet—not to mention the chance to prevent them from doing the deed, if the target proved less-than-enthusiastic.
Regardless of whether you should have, you didn't; and now you're standing outside a small apartment in a modestly-furnished college dorm not too many blocks from yours. The mark, Chris had told you, was one "Mr. Miller", a twenty-something who had gotten a little too fond of ponies for his own good. The doll contained inside the box—which you had elected to hold, for fear of Chris bungling it spectacularly—was a blue pegasus colt with a globe on its butt. The poor sod, at the very least, got to keep his genitals.
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>>6717350 You take a deep breath, and stare at the ceiling. Chris is at the other end of the hall, watching intently and no doubt making notes; and Bill, despite her protests, is secured within the van. You sigh and close your eyes, clutching the box to your chest. You're on the spot, now, but you're not entirely sure what to do. Do you just walk up to the man and say "Hey there, sir, can I interest you in becoming a horse because some huge guy dreamed it"?
No, of course you don't. That would be stupid. You shake your head and lean your forehead against the door—and at this very moment, your musings are disturbed by footsteps from end of the hall opposite Chris. With the kind of piss-and-vinegar saved for the nastiest of bastards, a tall white man in a black suit and a red tie—just a Tommy Gun shy of a mobster movie—storms towards you. He is flanked by two others, of a similarly lithe and lanky build. You wish you could describe their faces, but they're wearing ski masks; and either way, your attention is now squarely focused on the finely-polished handgun the leader just aimed squarely at you.
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>>6713595 >>6717350 I'm not sure which of you to curse louder. One of you just made Zephyr's update way too funny by putting in a tacky dancing GIF that lined up perfectly with the tacky music I had on in the background.The other gave me a silly cameo that I'm laughing too much at.
In any case, I believe the index document is up to date again, now.
Zephyr, shouldn't you be putting out a new volume for your pastebin soon, though? Anonymous
>>6707071 >>6709782 >>6711419 >>6713793 >>6717353 When it rains around here, it pours. All this content has brought me a lovely afternoon of reading, thanks to you many wonderful writefags. Kudos.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6712213 Interesting story; I actually have been sedated by injection before. It does feel like ice shooting up your arm, and then you kinda pass out.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6720219 >mfw I'm in that list You give me too much credit.....
;u; th-thanks emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
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>>6722512 I forgot my face.
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>>6720219 I feel the exact same way. There's quite a bit of good content to read here, and it came in just about one 12 hour period.
>I'm on that list I'm stealing your face emms. Seriously though, stuff like that always refuels the fun I have with writing. Thanks for including this bumbling neophyte writer.
I've only been at this for a little over a month. >>6721875 I'll have to take your word on that. All of the times I was sedated were due to gas. Strange to breathe that stuff in, but even stranger when it feels like your consciousness is being stolen from you.
I wouldn't take that gif as my response to your story. I'm not sure how to describe it, but I'm enjoying it to a great degree. I actually forgot the >mfw in regards to that green on the new Ivory. Regardless, I want to see more from you so much. It's a very intriguing story so far. Anonymous
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I have a little something brewing for you guys that shouldwe all still be around come tomorrow should get posted in entirety come morning or so.
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>>6737134 We've survived! That's a bumpin'.
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one good bump deserves another
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>>6739895 Here's your well-deserved bump.
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Bumping once more!
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bumpin' the bumpy bump
Alright, I'll join in! Even if I'm not the world's best writer :/
>>6745933 While you’re browsing around, you find a very awkward thread: “Become your fav. Pony and get a free trip to Equestria!”. Well, ain’t that just a delight? It’s probably just a troll or a joke, right? Well, then why the hell don’t you join? You’ve never fed the trolls: Anytime you see something that’s too good to be true, you usually just ignore it. But this is frickin’ 4chan, might as well play along, just for fun.
You type: “Hellz yea! Sign me up!”. Then, surprisingly, you get get an immediate response: “Ok! It’ll take just a week or two. Have fun! ”. Yeah, sure! [sarcasm]I just can’t wait to go to Equestria![/sarcasm] Does (s)he really think that you’re buying it!? Then, you check out the name of the poster: “Luna”. Ok, that’s just dumb. It certainly would be hard for someone to believe that the royalty would be on 4chan, let alone the royalty of a frickin’ cartoon show!
>>6745954 You soon realize that it’s 1:00 AM. HOLY SHIET, you should be sleeping right now. You seriously need to be aware of the time while you browse. Oh well, are you going to whine about it or go to bed? Going to bed sounds better. You certainly don’t want to stay up all night, nor do you want to oversleep.
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>>6745933 >>6745954 >>6745972 Well, here you go. It isn't too much, I guess, but should be enough for now. I'll upload some more stuff (maybe) tomorrow, since it's almost mid-night.
Feedback would be appreciated, since it's my first fanfic. :)
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Angel !GraceZDGeM
Your name is Cobalt Hills, and you really feel sorry for this girl.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6752141 “What is this?” you ask, looking back at Micheal and pointing. He turns in his chair to look at it, shaking his head.
“Measurements. She’s shrinking as well; again, I’ve slowed the effects, but all the more reason to hurry up with our studies.” He turned back to the microscope, shaking his head. “Whatever it is, it doesn’t seem to be in her bloodstream; or if it is, I can’t see it.”
The next half hour or so passed in silence as Micheal worked and you watched him, hoping the three of you got to the girl in time.
“Grubs here.” Tyler said, opening the lab door and sitting down in another chair. He put a salad on the floor for you, and tossed a bag to Micheal, who ignored it.
“He’s absorbed in his work.” You explain, starting on your own dinner. Sometimes you really missed fast food meat. Not often, but enough. “He really thinks he can help that girl.”
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6752164 “If she had been a little smarter, she wouldn't be in this mess.” Tyler remarked, taking a big bite out of his hamburger. You winced a bit as some sauce dripped down his chin; perhaps an all vegetable diet wasn’t so bad after all. “We did warn her not to go.”
“Can you blame her, though?” you reply, looking up. “She got an email from someone she trusted, telling her he wanted to share something with her. I’m surprised Master doesn’t do it more often.” Once again, you failed to catch yourself before calling that man Master. You may as well give up, it was something to call him, even if it made you shudder. “I wonder what made her so special, though; why not just kidnap her?”
Tyler shrugged between bites. “Who knows how his mind works. This is the guy who doesn’t see a problem with kidnapping people and changing their very bodies, or even their minds.”
“That’s the thing. He’s never been shy about the kidnapping part; he doesn’t try to convince them because his brainwashing ensures they’ll go along with it. But he went out of his way to make sure this girl came to him. If we can understand that, we might have a chance of saving her.”
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6752193 The two of you look over at the wall, thinking about the girl on the other side of it. “You think we got to her in time?” you wonder aloud.
Tyler shakes his head, putting the hamburger back in the bag. “Honestly, as far as she’s progressed, I don’t know. Of course, it brings up another issue.” Seeing your curious stare, he goes on. “All those people he’s changed, you, and her.” He nods at the wall. “What do we do once we stop him, if Micheal can’t reverse the transformation?”
That had been bugging you as well. Living in Tylers place, hiding from the public eye, worked for one pony, maybe two if Astarielle did fully transform. But he had brought over two dozen people to his little warehouse. What had happened to them all, and could they look after themselves if need be? “I don’t know, Tyler. I just don’t-“
A crash from the other room got the attention of all three of you. You were the first one to the door, and the other two were fast on your heels, but all of you stopped dead when you saw who was in the other room.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6752218 Master was standing over the bed, holding Astarielle in his arms, the IV drips dangling uselessly. “I believe this is mine.” He said smoothly, smiling at the three of you.
“Put her down!” You demanded, taking another step forward. He fixed you with a look that stopped you again.
“You’re welcome to come home with me, if you’re so worried about her, Cobalt Hills. You can do much better than this.”
He still had that way of talking. His words slipped into your mind, making you want to skip along beside him and obey his every word. Why couldn’t he be some kind of hunchback villain? His eyes moved upward.
“I wouldn’t recommend that.” Master said conversationally; Tyler dropped a scalpel he was holding. “Shame if I suddenly dropped Angel Grace, her bones have already become lightweight, I doubt she’d be able to stand for awhile afterwards.” He moved smoothly towards the door. “If you’re coming, Cobalt.
”
Once again, you had to restrain yourself from mindlessly following Master. You looked down quickly, growling.
“Why are you doing this?” Micheal asked, stepping aside and shaking his head. “You have to have taken some kind of medical schooling! This is in violation of everything doctors stand for!”
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Gaiden Chapter 2 End Angel !GraceZDGeM Sat 22 Dec 2012 04:45:46 No. 6752298 Report >>6752259 “Primum non nocere.” Master recited, headed for the door. “You know where to find me. I believe you two are worthy of a greater calling.” He glanced briefly at Tyler. “Others, not so much. Farewell for now.” The door closed behind him as the three of you looked on helplessly. Tyler rushed out after him.
Micheal sat down in a chair, shaking. You trot to his side, confused. “What is it? What does Primum non nocere mean?”
“First, do no harm.” Micheal replied uneasily, looking at the door again. “It’s normally applied in emergency medicine, but in medical research, it means ‘Make sure the benefits outweigh the costs.’” He put his head in his hands, silent until Tyler returned. The two of you looked up hopefully, but he merely shook his head.
“It’s no good. The sedative will wear off soon, and she’ll resume changing. She’s already reaching advanced stages…” he walked off, heading toward the lab.
“Where’s he going in such a rush?” Tyler asked, panting. Had he been running after Masters truck?
You watch him leave, your spirits still low from the loss you suffered. “Hopefully to put an end to this madness.”
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>>6745933 >>6745954 >>6745972 Not a bad start! Keep going and see where it goes.
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>>6752298 Master sure found those guys in a hurry. I wonder how he did it.
From the sound of things, those guys were in over their heads anyway. Poor little Astarielle, she never asked for this, yet it's kind of her fault she's in that position. You almost gave me hope for Astarielle, and then smashed what possibility there was into pieces. I'm now wondering how much back and forth she's going to be going through as a result of wanting to get away from master and obey him at the same time.
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Alright, so... I'm done with finals, and I'm trying to decide where to take my story.
So far, we've got a pathogen of some sort that transforms folks into pone and basically causes nymphomania/satyriasis in it's victims, and it has begun it's rampage from a fraternity house mid-kegger.
Hopefully, I'll have an update soon, like, Saturday afternoon, but if my past posting habits are any indication, don't hold me to it.
In any case, I usually type everything out on pastebin before I post here, so here's the link if anyone wants it:
http://pastebin.com/u/the_panic Anonymous
TechnicolorShortie !!ixQQ+plJZ8m
New chapter of Cuddle Buddies if you want to read it. http://pastebin.com/Bx7M2kSW This time the ponies encounter what appears to be a ghost. Can they solve the mystery of the frightful spook? Those two lines make it sound better than it actually is, but it does have a childish charm I think.
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>tfw I'm about to see anyone's opinion about my stories.
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Anyways, time to go back to 4chan! You proceed to turn on the computer, but before that, you haven’t take a shower in a long time, about two weeks. Wait, two weeks!? You really let’d yourself go! You go take a bath rather quickly and then you look at the mirror. Well, you look a lot better than before, obviously, but you quickly find out that there’s something different about you, but you can’t find out what is it. Is it the light brown eyes? No. How about your black hair with blonde marks? Nah… Wait, what? As far as you remember, you always had full black hair. Maybe you just overlooked it. Well, that would be too hard not to notice. Another thing that went on your mind is that maybe it was just ageing. No, that would be really weird, since you’re 30. Maybe you should call a doctor, but you’re a doctor! And you’ve never seen such thing before, so it’ll be hard to diagnose yourself.
I hope I didn't offend anyone on that "mental deterioartion is cute" segment... I've no idea if this story is going too fast paced or too slow. Also don't know if these parts are too small for you.
Anyways (and in a sudden mood swing), here's my pastebin. I usually post the stories there first, then onto 4chan a few minutes after.
http://pastebin.com/u/Acrokids Anonymous
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>>6758549 >"I usually post the stories there first, then onto 4chan a few minutes after. "
Because it takes a while to post stuff on 4chan.
Almost done, when captcha is wrong! Almost done, when image is a duplicate! Almost done, when figure out i'm posting in the wrong thread! (╯°□°)╯︵ ┻━┻ Anonymous
>>6757398 Could you repost the links to all of the cuddle buddies stories?
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>>6764181 Sure thing. http://pastebin.com/1T2Qw9Ye http://pastebin.com/3nv4fuaS http://pastebin.com/ZWFsy7Te - clophttp://pastebin.com/XgQfmUvc http://pastebin.com/FRrgEaAm - clophttp://pastebin.com/Bx7M2kSW There are many reasons as to why they're hidden on my pastebin, but prominently they're usually just something for fun between emms and I. I share them with the thread because it's a TF series, but posting the links is pushing it in my opinion. I also have a terrible prose format for each one up to Ghost Hunting, and even then I'm unsure of that one. There are plenty of errors in the first clop that someone pointed out to me, but he's supposed to talk to a buddy about reviewing them too. I have left the errors untouched until then, so they can see the original product. Anonymous
Human to changeling transformation, with mind control or hypnotism. I don't care how it's done, hivemind, pheromones, whatever.
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>>6768517 One of NetherPony's stories (Day of the Pony, the only one he's posting in this thread) is exactly that. Been a while since he updated it, though.
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>>6768517 Nether's got that story.
THough I imagine you seek something more in the clop category. And that is a story idea I like so I may place that in my list of side projects I got going aside from my normal story.
Also I lied about that one thing I said I'd upload, it's still not done so expect it either later tonight or some time tomorrow.
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Bumps, bumps, bumps, bumps, bump-bump. bumps bumps bumps bump-bumps! bumps bumps bumps bumps! EVERBODY!I most definitely fucked that up
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Angel !GraceZDGeM
I woke up, blinking quickly. Where was I? And for that matter…who was I? Alright, no need to panic. Just, try to calm down and get everything in order. I was laying on a bed, the cover mussed up enough for me to make a little indention in. That was certainly nice. I stretched out my body, my wings fluffing up slightly then settling down. Oh, look, there was a mirror.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6779119 “Hey there, Angel Grace. Feeling better?” he crouched down, rubbing my head. Mmm, that felt nice. I tilted my head, looking at him in confusion. At least I knew my name now. Angel Grace. We were going places.
“Don’t remember, huh? Come on, I have something to show you; I’ll explain on the way.” I trotted along after him obediently. We went up a set of stairs and through a big empty room into another house. “You’ve been out cold for the past week.” Master explained, leading me through the house. “Some people kidnapped you, and it kinda messed up your head a little; that’s why you don’t remember anything.”
I looked up at him, shocked. “Someone tried to take me away? Why? What happened to me there?” I felt like my head was going a mile a minute trying to make sense of all this. We stepped outside, and Master opened the door to his truck; I hopped in the back, and he got in front, starting it up.
“Keep your head down, Angel.” He instructed as we pulled out. “They’ve been bothering me for a couple months now, trying to undermine my work. They tried to convince you that you weren’t a pony, and it hurt your mind. I fixed everything up for you, though.” He smiled back at me quickly and looked back at the road.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6779150 Ah, that explained it. I could actually feel some of my memories trickling back; mostly of Master taking care of me. “But if I wasn’t a pony, what else would I be?” I asked, still curious. I could see sections of the skyline in the part of the window that was visible from down here, and I longed to see more. Still, Master asked me to stay down, and so I did, lowering myself a bit more to try and remove the temptation.
“A human.” He replied, as we turned onto a bumpier road. “They’re convinced you used to be a human; they’re a bunch of bad apples. I can’t really stay mad at them, though. They’re just as confused as you were.”
“Can you help them, Master? Like you helped me put my head back together?” I asked him hopefully.
Master laughed a bit, nodding. “I’m hoping I can, Angel. That’s what my work is all about, helping people and ponies…at least, it is now.” He said the second part so quietly he might have thought I didn’t hear. But I did, and I felt a burst of pride for my Master. He was such a good Master, wanting to help everyone. We rode in silence for what seemed like forever, but just as I was getting really antsy, the truck came to a stop. Master opened the door, and I hopped out, my eyes wide.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6779167 Ponies, as far as the eye could see. We had stopped right outside of a town in the mountains, just chock full of ponies. Some of them were pegasus, like I was, and some of them were Earth Ponies. I even saw a unicorn here and there. “Amazing…” I said in wonderment, trotting up to Masters side. He nodded, leading me onward.
“This is New Equestria, the local pony town.” He explained, ponies greeting him as we passed. A couple of them looked at me, curious. “All the ponies in the area live and play here.”
“Even me, Master?” I asked, looking up at him. There was a certain familiarity about the place.
He smiled down at me, nodding. “That’s right, Angel. Of course, I have something else planned for you, if you’re willing.” He entered a large building smack in the middle of the town.
Inside, even more ponies were bustling around, some of them carrying papers, and others talking amongst themselves. He approached a desk in the back, with a sign above it that said “New Equestria Town Hall”
“Well, if it isn’t the Master!” a dark blue unicorn said, looking up from her paperwork. She peered down the desk at me, then back at Master. “Is there a new resident? We just finished work on another few houses, I’m sure she’ll love them.”
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>>6779191 Master smiled at the unicorn. “Yes, this is Angel Grace, and she’ll be moving in here. It may not be right away, but I still wanted to get her registered with the town. Angel Grace, this is the mayor of New Equestria, Kindly Smiles.”
“Good to meet you, Angel Grace. And I hardly do anything around here, Master is the one that brings new residents here and gives us ideas on how to build the city. We owe him so much.” True to her name, the mayor gave Master a kind smile as she wrote something on a piece of paper. “Here’s her new address.”
“Thank you. Come along, Angel.” He led me out of the town hall, down the street to a row of houses that seemed to glisten in the sunlight. Checking the paper he held, he opened the door to one of the houses, and I bounded in excitedly, looking around. It was everything I always wanted! The celing was high, invoking feelings of the open sky, and everything was in white and green, just like me. I could be very, very happy living here. I turned back to Master, who was leaning on the door.
“Angel, I’m going to give you a choice.” He remarked, hand in his pocket. “You’re the first pony who had this choice. You can stay here right now…or come with me.”
I trotted back over to him, tilting my head quizzically. What did Master want from me, and why would I want to stay here when I could spend even more time with him?
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>>6779209 He went on. “Of course, this is your home. You’ll come back to live here eventually. But I’d like your help in-“
He didn’t even get to finish his sentence. “Anything you like, Master!” I replied, eager to help; I almost jumped on him! I reconsidered, remembering how large I really was.
Master smiled at me, rubbing behind my ears. “I had a feeling you’d say that. There’s just one condition to you coming back and helping me.” He dug in his pocket a bit, pulling out a collar. “You’ll have to wear this. You’ll be the first pony who will be devoted to being my pet. Are you sure you’re willing to do that?”
What a silly question that was. If Master wanted me to be his adorable pet pony, of course I would do that! I nodded eagerly. “I’m willing, Master.”
He nodded a bit, crouching and pushing my head down slightly. As the collar closed around my neck, a brief image flashed before my eyes; another pony I didn’t know. Perhaps another memory? He seemed worried about me…
Master secured the collar, standing up. “Alright then.” He remarked, seemingly surprised by this turn of events himself. “Come on, we have work to do, Angel.” He stepped out of the house, waiting for me to follow before he closed the door.
I trotted alongside him as we headed back to the truck. Master and I were going to have a lot of fun…
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>>6786648 Everyone wants to be the little pony apparently
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I'm not a regular of this general but I'm really interested in this anon's pastebin:
http://pastebin.com/u/Tfanon Does anyone know when its going to update? or what are the last news on this writefag
Anonymous
>>6786702 Oh, Zephyr? Everbody loves Zephyr. He's not an anon, though.
I *told* him he needs to update his pastebin.
No word on when his next post is, though. Hopefully and probably soon.
Anonymous
>>6786720 So his pastebin is outdated in the sense that he posts his updates here but not on the pastebin?
If I lurk the thread will I get to read it earlier?
Anonymous
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>>6786832 Yes.
The majority of us authors are like that, I think, actually.
I'm an exception, in that I write in a google doc, but.
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>>6786720 >>6786832 http://pastebin.com/Gj1AXSEb Here you go! I didn't realize how long it had been since the last time I added a paste. I meant to do it last night, along with an update for the thread, but now it's looking like I won't get any time to write until after christmas.
See you then PTFG.
Anonymous
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emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
It's been months since the introduction of Pon-E,
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
She never used in the apartment you both shared...but occasionally you'd find pills that had a distinct smell of spaghetti sauce.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
The paranoia, worry.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
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incoming unspoilered mild clop.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
That first time every thing felt more alive than they'd been in the three days your girlfriend had beengone.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
You shouldn't of thought about that, Hell thinking it normally would have made you cringe.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
You hear the remote hit the floor, you barely open one eye a bit before closing it, your back hooves splayed out wide as your forehooves rub softly against the marehood between them.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
You're pretty sure the family upstairs could hear you moaning as you rub away at the slit of your marehood.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
You lasted all of 2 days.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
You locked and chained the door behind you on the way in, carrying the note from the land lord about complaints of loud disturbing noises coming from your floor.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
The black out was less falling asleep as it was dreaming. You could hears and see everything but were incapable of influenceing Dew Drop in any way as she managed to improvise a way to unchain and unlock the door using a broom handle.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
As you walk out of the shower you find your door is ajar. You hold your towel tightly across your waste as you look around your room. "Anyone in here?" .
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
"I'm sorry!" Your girlfriend cries slightly as he lowers down onto his belly a bit laying his jaw on the floor "I was so heart broken and all I thought of was how awful it would be going back to being me and not having you and j-just...just, I couldn't take it!" he holds his hooves over his face in shame.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
She then reaches to pull something from her pocket "Or" she pulls something from the small ziplock bag that had been in her pocket, moving something down to the coffee table.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
"And I can see that look in your eyes, You've not slept properly in a couple days...even when you weren't taking the pills you were having weird dreams I bet"
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
"Y-you...that's not possible though"
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
"I'll give you a night to think on it" She smiled up to you, showing sincere friendliness "and if it help's, me and my boyfriend are fans of the show ourselve, so don't think I'm only doing this to get you out of some sick thrill." she explains "Oh, also I live on the very edge of town, so you'd never worry about getting arrested."
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
3 days later a missing persons report was filed.
>>6803580 >>6803605 >>6803622 >>6803668 >>6803704 >>6803726 >>6803758 >>6803775 >>6803802 >>6803825 >>6803847 >>6803866 >>6803894 >>6803916 >>6803939 >>6803970 >>6803985 And thus the Full short story/oneshot Pon-E Blackouts is posted, I'm sure there are inconsistencies and I'm sure the slightly less than happy ending will have turned others off but I felt it was needed to explore the darker parts of this little universe. I also felt it neccesarry to add 2 new rules.
Anyhow I hope you all enjoy it. Feel free to muck about in this little Pon-E universe if you like I'm curious to how others would play with it.
Expect an update for the Regular story sometime tomorrow.
also yesterday(the 23rd) was my birthday. it was great. Anonymous
Blackbox
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>>6804097 hnnnngh! Emms you bloody genius. Happy belated birthday. Now if you will excuse me I've some Pon-E to OD on.
TechnicolorShortie !!ixQQ+plJZ8m
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>>6804097 Simply amazing. The premise and the execution are wildly entertaining. Sure, it doesn't end on a full happily ever after note, but that makes it feel more realistic in a way.
We've seen the lighter side of Pon-E, and now we have the dark side of it. It's a bitter-sweet ending, but at least they didn't wind up with some unsavory bronies.
I enjoy this far more than I should, and I think I agree with Blackbox. I don't think I could stop myself from ODing to be honest.
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
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MUTHAFUCKIN THREAD BAMP!
Anonymous
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Xmas Eve bump
Angel !GraceZDGeM
Shitty Greentext Story Inc>Christmas Morning >Fuck Yeah >Get tons of cool gifts >One more >No tag >Damn it, Mom, I don’t believe in Santa >Open Gift >It’s a fucking Wonderbolts getup >Perfect details >Fabric feels amazing >You have to try it on >To the Pon-Cave
Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6816610 >It’s too tight, won’t fit over tacky PJs >Get those the fuck off, put on Wonderbolt >Damn, that’s nice looking >Still tight >Is it getting tighter? >Shit, it is. >Drop to floor, suit squeezing >Gasping for breath >Hair tumbling down past face >Arms and legs numb >Oh god hands are hooves >Suit still squeezing >And you have a tail >Everythings bigger >Shitshitshitshitshit Angel !GraceZDGeM
>>6816614 >Bones reshaping >Now you have four legs >face extending too >This can’t get worse >Spoke too soon >Stabbing pain on your back >Suddenly, majestic wings >Okay, that’s not too bad. >Prickles all around >Then nothing >Lay on floor, gasping >Finally get up >Surprisingly easy to manage four hooves >Go to mirror >You are the little Pegasus >Suit now perfect fit >Guess you’re a Wonderbolt now >Put on awesome shows >Be the happy little pony >Merry Christmas to all >And to all a pon-night. TwiAnon
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So uh...
Anonymous
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>>6816627 >Suddenly, majestic wings I like this line.
Anonymous
Anonymous
Some Fagit
With the kind of piss-and-vinegar saved for the nastiest of bastards, a tall white man in a black suit and a red tie—just a Tommy Gun shy of a mobster movie—storms towards you. He is flanked by two others, of a similarly lithe and lanky build. You wish you could describe their faces, but they're wearing ski masks; and either way, your attention is now squarely focused on the finely-polished handgun the leader just aimed squarely at you.
Some Fagit
>>6823973 When he turns back to you, his balaclava is split by a smile that is, compounding the eeriness of his laugh, distinctly like that of a shark.
"Sorry, kid. This one's ours."
The mobster-man reaches into his jacket pocket and pulls out a bright red dog collar. You don't need to ask what it does. Behind you, Chris chimes in:
"I don't see your name on him!"
The stranger replies by simply holding up his gun; Chris falls silent. As the mobster lays his hand on the doorknob, you manage to stutter out a reply:
"W-what are you..." Your sentence trails off as he cracks the door open.
"Don't play dumb, kid. "
With that, the mobster pushes his way inside, gun in one hand and collar in the other. One of his wingmen steps inside after him, pistol raised; the third simply waits with his back against the wall. You find yourself fixated on the third man—or rather, his gun—and cannot appreciate the full details of what happens next. You can, however, hear it in perfect detail.
First, the mobster's voice:
"It's your lucky day, pal."
Now there are the sounds of flesh smacking against flesh, a pistol cocking, and a chair being overturned. A muffled scream and a few formless cries of protest, which terminate with a cry of: "NOOOOO! I DON'T ACTUALLY WANT TO BE THE LITTLE HORSE! AAAAAIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEEEE-"
Some Fagit
>>6823988 Now there is a long moment of grim silence—and then the mobster, still carrying his pistol, walks out of the room. His compatriot follows him a moment later, now carrying a disquietingly overstuffed duffel bag. With nary a tip of the hat they start off down the hallway; and for the second time, you muster the willpower to speak.
"Wait! Wh-where are you taking him?!"
The leader doesn't stop. He just points upwards, towards the ceiling.
"All the way to the top, new guy. Tell them Ten sent you."
And with that, they round the corner and step out of sight.
Anonymous
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>>6823998 I hope there's a helicopter.
Getting turned into a pony and dropped off a building sounds awfully unfun, even if you do get wings.
Blackbox
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@HT
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X
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>>6828076 Christmas Bump, Part 2.
Anonymous
Happy day before Boxing Day bump!
Anonymous
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>>6832277 Nice double dubs bump
Anonymous
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Happy Hogswatch~
Anonymous
Anonymous
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I swear I just bumped this.
Anonymuos
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emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>And then emms got Blops 2
Anonymous
>>6768542 >Been a while since he updated it whhhhyyyy
Also, I'd love to see more shorts like these
>>6816610 TechnicolorShortie !!ixQQ+plJZ8m
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>>6852337 >And then emms was never heard from for 2 weeks while he struggles to get that 360-noscope kill I'll be waiting.
>>6853859 Nether always seems to be busy if our e-mails are any indication. Right now I think he's working on a couple things for AiE, his main AiE fic, and then I'm hoping more DotP one day. That guy is a busy bee from what I understand.
In other news: I've been challenged to write more clop for Cuddle Buddies which I'll be doing tomorrow hopefully. After that is squared away, the next part of my main fic will be focused upon. Well, almost fully focused upon as another challenge has to be met at such time too. I'll keep that second challenge under my hat because it's heretical to many degrees. I've also got plans to start up a new TF once my main finishes soon. Given my experiments with prose, I'm going to attempt an all prose story with it. Should be fun. Anonymous
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A heads-up to those who have been using the stinto chat:
Anonymous
Anonymous
Guys, how do become the pone?
Anonymous
Mr.Jared
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>>6867470 be strong, think horse, and eat your carrots...
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>6867470 find a gm and play wu,ah
sell your soul in a faustian bargain
bribe a wizard friend
wish upon a star
study biology real hard
or just ask the fine folks at
>>6620780 Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
Alright, the holiday is over. Writefags, assemble!
Anonymous
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>>6823988 Hah, poor Globe. I'm sure he'll be fine... After obedence lessons.
Anonymous
>>6883917 Form of... a Pen!
Mr.Jared
>>6886973 To the fic Cave! AWAY!
Anonymous
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>>6883917 >>6886973 >>6887615 Nuh nuh nuh nuh, nuh nuh nuh, nuh nuh nuh, nun nuh nuh nuh WRITEFAFS!
Anonymous
SickSpirit
........hhholy shit I've been away for a while. Where was I again?>"Wasn't me what, exactly? You're a...pony!" >He puts a hand to his chin, then takes off his hat. >He is wearing a ski mask that covers the majority of his face. >If you had a spider sense, it would be tingling around now. >He takes off the trenchcoat calmly, then flings it at you with speed you did not expect. >Gripping it midair with your magic, you toss it back just before it hits you. >You can see a glint of metal as he attacks his own coat crazily. >"Shit. Shit. Shit!" >Richie, having noticed, zips down to just in front of you, taking a pose that he probably thinks is impressive and intimidating. >The man, now a lot more visible, stands not too tall, with a short hairdo and a....
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
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>>6907285 >>6907285 >Hacksaw. Welp.
Murder video time
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>6907285 You're back and writing more CC? Excellent! Also, while I'm bumping:
Lyranon! Lyranon! Lyranon!
Anonymous
Mr.Jared
TRUCE: THE GREY CONSPIRACY 3 Mr.Jared Fri 28 Dec 2012 18:03:39 No. 6912752 Report Marriage, such a funny tradition. If you think about it, its just paying a lot of money to have a old guy say you can sleep together. Honestly, I would never want to be married even if it was at gunpoint, which almost seems like it more and more each and every day. Thing was tough, I don’t like many girls, I mean yes, I have a few friends who happen to be girls, and I'm starting to like my brothers girlfriend more and more each day... no, not a good idea, that is his girl, i'd never impose.
Mr.Jared
>>6912752 The two have been going out for a few years now, although the wedding may put some ideas in Kyle's head... Well in the very least, she is not coming, family only. Kyle was almost going to argue about this until Mitch insisted she did not come, saying, and I quote “I might get jealous” to which Destiny smacked him across the back of the head, arguably being the hardest we have laughed in years. Yea, Kyle and Mitch are like two peas in a pod.
Pulling up to the wedding area was almost magical, the morning dew still drying up. Mitch had the right idea when planning this thing, a exquisite view of the water, A perfectly white private beach, ambient noise of the city gone to be replaced with the halcyon tone of nature.
Mr.Jared
>>6912764 “This is amazing Grey! Look at this place!” Kyle was saying with such energy. His eyes were darting around, as if they were trying to drink in every pixel of this landscape from heaven. I looked around as well, taking it all in, trying to remember how long it has been since i have seen so much beauty in such a small area. No memories came to mind, so, leaving Kyle to his little land of wonders, i walk up and enter the building ahead of me. the structure was no less magnificent as the land around it.
A mostly curved building painted white, a bell tower at its tip. The building was a rent-out type of business, “Changing to the needs of the user”, or so it is said on its info card i was shown when I looked this bad boy up, wanting to know directions to get to it and other info. Turns out this place has been used for 17 wedding receptions, 15 baby showers, 13 community projects, and some sort of convention , for what this convention was about I do not know.
Mr.Jared
>>6912779 Well, that is good enough of a quick look over for now, test drove the suit, now we wait, only a day until showtime, but still, a time to wait it is. After looking over the place, I find Kyle and escort him back to the car, and we are off, to the hotel, where we will be staying until the wedding. Kyle got a little peeved at me wanting to leave so soon, but he came with me anyways, such a fellow he is. I hope he enjoys being the best man as much as i think he will. Would be a shame if it turned out horribly, but hey, stuff like that only happens in books. No need to worry about that then to the hotel we go.
Mr.Jared
>>6912789 It has been about 24 hours since we arrived at the hotel, Just getting back in our suits and getting prepared, Waiting for the noon mark to send us off, leaving me with some time to kill. There is not that much to do around here, being we are staying in a lower standard establishment, no side events set up, anything that can be done is not meant for us. With this, I wake up Kyle, who was sleeping up until now, i tell him where i’m going, and then I leave, already fully attired. I sneak away from the door and began my journey throughout the building to the dining hall, trying to avoid other people; It’s too damn early to be sociable The place was already filling up, still serving breakfast I head over to the table and begin to serve myself.
Mr.Jared
>>6912799 I grab my plate filled with all the breakfast essentials, sausage and eggs and toast galore, noting the lack of people taking meats and the lack of fruits. I sit at a table and begin digging in, letting my mind and eyes wander to the nearby tables. Lots of people piling in now, grabbing plates... lots of apples being eaten, 3 bushels already polished off, Oh look someone decided to grab some sausage, he looks a tad iffy about it but im sur- oh god did... did he just eat it then throw up? I look at my plate, then take a bite of the sausage. It’s damn well delicious, why is that guy over there having an episode over it. The guy was carted off and the hall clears out, and, I still don’t know why I did this, but I found myself over to that mans plate, and without a second thought, i picked up the uneaten side of his sausage and took a bite. It was perfectly perfect, so what was his issue?
Mr.Jared
>>6912807 I back away from the plate and rush out with the rest of the people, who all seem to be clutching apples at their sides; so that is where all the fruit went. I take a moment to look around at the slightly agitated crowd and i begin to notice some strange details. I recognized some of these people, and they were looking... different. They were looking paler, their hair longer and a bit discolored. They also keep wobbling on their feet and scrunching up their hands. God, something was going on with these people, but what could it be? sickness? I did not want to hang around with these people for much longer, might catch what they have, so i dodge pass them and make for the stairs, taking them two at a time, until i make it back to my room, slamming the door behind me and sitting on the bed.
Mr.Jared
>>6912815 This startles Kyle awake who then proceeds to poke me with questions like what the hell was going on. I tried to answer but found i don’t even have a clue to what is going on. I simply make up a bullshit story how i thought someone was going to mug me, and Kyle simply stared at me before letting it slide and laying back down. Maybe that is the way I should go, sleep it off, I mean, we still have some time before we need to head out. I look over to Kyle, my wonderful pony loving brother, and think how lucky he is to be a best man. Such a lucky guy. I lay my head down and close my eyes, making sure to do a mental check if i had set an alarm. I drifted to sleep soon after.
Mr.Jared
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>>6912833 That's all she wrote, pastebin is here
http://pastebin.com/NgAPeKQt . you are all pretty, don't ever forget that
Anonymous
Have you guys been following this thread? We've infected the entire board.
>>6867211 Anonymous
>>6914658 It's still going? Wow.
Anonymous
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>>6921326 Turns out, lots of /mlp/ posters want to be the little pony.
Anonymous
>>6922436 I'd love to be the little pony! I'd love my master so much!
Anonymous
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>>6922513 Yes, dear; that's wonderful.
Now would you be a good little pony and trot on over to
>>6921362 so you could keep all your TF-unrelated pet feels in one thread?
We're pretty near the bump limit, and I'd prefer to stay on topic, even if that means nearly dead, until we make the new thread. Anonymous
We also have less than a hundred before bump limit/
Anonymous
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Anonymous
>>6711419 It has been one week.
In this one week, you have had next to no time alone. Except maybe the toilet, and that's a huge maybe too.
You've climbed the ladder from Body guard to Mind dildo. to now, really popular play toy. Almost every second of each day has been a strange show of seeing Ivory and Trixie try their damndest to out do each other into spending time with you.
For the life of you you can't figure out if it's a good thing or not.
You have never been the center of attention of ANY females.
But now today.
Today is the BIG DAY.
Today the reruits will be in today,
Now you're building an army.
Or Luna is. You sort of just told her too. No way you can take credit.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6923093 You and Shining sit just outside the training ground. Inside the castle watching from behind a stained window with clear enough glass to see.
You notice the group of at least 20 ponies standing in the trotted down ground
"That is honestly, a LOT more than I expected to see here" You say aloud
"Who would of thought" Shining says with the smile in his voice.
You look up "Be honest, did you actually expect anyone? Because to be honest" you pause ust a second "I keep thinking Luna's reputation would have stopped it."
He cocks his eyebrow "Bluntly? I expected just five."
You nod "yeah. So, wanna bet a few bits that Sunshine gets it?"
He laughs out loud "I doubt it, Sunshine's just a standard guard."
"Well who better to teach them?"
"Well, let's just wait to see."he says slipping on his helmet "Let's go Rev 'em up"
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6923308 You nod quickly slipping the helmet on as the both of you walk out to the grounds.
"Good evening trainee's!" Shining barks a bit as the both of you make your entrance. Each pony saluting as the both of you arrive"As you know I am the Dawn Guard Captain, Prince of the Crystal Empire Shining Armour."
You both stand infront of the five by five pony alignment of pony's "The Pegasus standing next to me is Anonymous, presently bodyguard to the Princess of the Night, Luna." he points to you as you try your best to maintain your most official stance.
"For now we will be running you through warm ups and standard routines" You almost find mishearing him as a certain hollywood drill instuctor.
"Now, get out and give me one hundred laps over the grounds!"
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6923598 The both of you watch them all run through out the training ground, and about 20 minutes in you start to notice something.
"The routines that they're being ran through aren't anywhere near as rigorous as what you sent me through" You comment
"Nope" He answers "Luna requested I give you a very specific set of training routines for you to be at your best."
"And what exactly is th-"
"She also told me that if you're ever informed that you're being sent through less than normal routines I am to explain no further than it having been her orders. "
"Lovely" you roll your eyes with a slight groan. More smoke screens.
One-Of-Three-Names
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Oh my goodness, it seems Zephyrs story has spawned a general.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
Soon Luna is seen, On each side of her Trixie and Ivory walke behind her in accompanyment.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6924192 "Brothers and sisters of the Lunar Guard!" She lifts her hoof into the air in a salute "Viva Luna!"
"Viva Luna!" the group calls back in salute, the sound of excitement in their yells.
"State your names!" She commands
"Thunder Lane!"
"Spit Shine!"
"Ditzy Doo!"
"Lyra Heartstrings"
"Bon Bon!"
You feel a slight bristle of pride as the ramainder of the group calls their names, the group of twent strong, soon to expand.
But one things strikes you amiss.
"Hey" You whisper to Trixe next to you "Where's the Lunar Captain?" You ask, starting to get worried that the unlucky bastard may have Apple Cidered himself into a coma.
"You'll see Anon." She assures you calmly.
Soon the remainder of the group has introduced themselves And everyone stands waiting as Luna takes a great smile.
"To you all I say thank you, I'm certain that you will al make me proud and become an example of great honour among the Equestrian Army!"
"Yes Ma'am!"
"Now to get to the first major order of business."
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6924569 "A guard is nothing with out their captain. And today you will meet this Pony."
Here we go! You smirk slightly as you look around a moment wanting to see one of the more experienced Bat pagasi walk onto the field.
"A bat pagasi who has proved himself to be the one appropriate to lead you all." she turns to ivory and Trixie "Retrieve the Armor"
The both of them leave your side as the recruits watch you stand their a pause of silence drawing out before The two mares return with a highly shined set of Purple armour contrasting with the standard dark night blue.
"This Stallion has gone and survived and done more in the short time he has been with me than I have been able to by myself."
Your stomach suddenly does a flip as she turns sideways looking up to the sky "Coming from a far land he has proven himself right for the job"
Uh oh.
Angel !GraceZDGeM
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Hey, guys, I haven't forgotten about you. I have a couple chapters in reserve, but I'm run into a problem with the last eighth of the story, mostly perspective. I think it would be better from Cobalts perspective; honestly the stuff I want to do would involve very little interaction from Angel, and I think the story would have a better impact if told from his side.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
>>6924744 Ivory and Trixie take a position to the side of you holding the armour up with their magic, the armour having been enscribed with all manour of unreadable runes
"This afternoon I am presented with the honour, of giving my personal Body Guard a promotion."
Suddenly every eye is watching you as your smirk fell off.
"Anonymous." Luna moves to stand behind Trixie and IIvory as the Armour is presented to you. "I present to you, formerly the NightMare Armour, now. The Lunar Captain's Uniform, today you become, Lunar Captain."
Everything slows to a hault as you look to your new gear.
You've gone from jobless 4channer...to a a captain of a soon to be army...
"I..." your voice squeaks, "Okay..." every muscle in your body has locked up as your vision blanks and you give the ground a hug. fainting in unconciousness.
>>6923093 >>6923308 >>6923598 >>6923775 >>6924192 >>6924569 >>6924744 >>6924922 And thus an update has been sowed for all of you fine folk.
I hope you've all enjoyed it and that I didn't fuck up any army stuff I used. anyhow Comments and critiques welcomed and accepted. Emails too!
TechnicolorShortie !!ixQQ+plJZ8m
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>>6924969 >"Spit Shine!" Are you sure it's wise to take on a potentially crazy window cleaner? That kid has issues you know.
I knew it! I should have caught on the instant you said that Earth pony wouldn't be named yet. >Batmane passed out. Hahahahaha, this amuses me greatly. Best part: he does it in the best beta way possible. So much spaghetti! You did quite a lot tonight in comparison to the usual size of your updates. I am pleased with this.
Entertaining read as always my good friend.
emms !!xEjac6AW1Ce
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Back to page 0!
Anonymous
TechnicolorShortie !!ixQQ+plJZ8m
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Hot off the presses.
Have a craving for some clop? http://pastebin.com/xxhxMQnL Enjoy if you read em. Anonymous
Anonymous
PlushieLyranon
>>6911540 >Start writing while waiting for new episode to load in 1080p. >Write two chunks. Episode finishes loading. >Computer freezes completely >Freak the fuck out, get ready to give up on writing for another few weeks. Then...
>Start up again. >Open firefox. >Motherfucking Pastebin saved everything I had written up to that point. >Still have to wait for episode to download again. You have no idea how relieved I feel right now, PTFG.
My late Christmas present is coming soon, I promise.
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>>6936420 UuuuuUUUUAAAAAAAH HAAA HAAAA!
PLUSHIELYRANON IS WRITING!
IT'S A CHRISTMAS MIRACLE!
PlushieLyranon
>Merry Christmas, you sick bastards. Oh god, I'm sorry it's been such a long time please forgive me.
PlushieLyranon
>>6936616 "Lyra?"
You open your eyes. You're still wrapped around one of Master's legs, but a single bead of moisture is rolling down one cheek. You sniff and try to wipe it away quickly on the leg of Master's trousers, hoping he didn't notice. You feel Master's palm stroking the back of your soft, felt head- his fingers scratching around inside your mane, and look up to meet his gaze.
His warm smile washes over you, and you feel like you're sinking into a soft bed or a hot bath as you stare straight into his kind, but tired eyes. Concern creeps into your beloved Master's voice. "Lyra, is something wrong?"
A moment passes, before you nestle your face back into his shin, nuzzling his inside leg with one cheek.
"No, Master... Everything is alright now..."
"Then do you think you could let go of my leg? I'm tired, and need to go lie down for a bit. We can play later, I promise."
Reluctantly at first, you unfasten yourself from Master's leg. He smiles at you, and turns away to walk into the bedroom, shutting the door behind him. The last thing you see of him, he was starting to unbutton his shirt.
You start to walk toward the sofa, but start to slow as the gears in your head start turning.
We can play later, he said... Maybe you should go play with him now...
The dirty thoughts start rising again, and you giggle to yourself. Then out of the corner of your eye, you notice something odd about the front door. A longer glance confirms your impression- Master left it ajar. It's not obvious, and probably wasn't intentional- anyone could just come and go as they please.
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>>6936637 You hesitate for a second. Just a second.
Then you trot happily over to the front door, lower your head... And push it closed.
Click.
That's better. It was letting a draft in. And you wouldn't want any wild animals or strange humans wondering through.
You can remind Master to lock it later. Right now, you have... Other business to attend to. You canter back over to the bedroom door, swishing your tail one way and then the other in a manner you hope appears quite sultry, and lean your weight gently against the door, easing it open slowly.
As you hoped, you can see Master's work clothes in a poorly folded pile in the corner, and you can hear him breathing gently on the bed, too high for you to see from down here. You wonder what he's wearing.
Maybe he's not wearing anything at all.
As quietly as you can manage, you sneak to the foot of the bed and hook your forelegs over, quickly but gracelessly climbing over until you're fully on the bed. It looks like the duvet is covering Master from the neck down. You'll have to do something about that.
Still as quietly as possible, you sneak toward Master's face, avoiding the lumps in the duvet that must be his body. Taking just a second to make sure he's still asleep, you take the end of the duvet in your mouth, slowly, slowly peeling it back to expose his shoulders... his chest... His well-toned abdomen (oh my! Maybe he ISN'T wearing anything!)... His tight white underpants (drat)... You pull it down to his knees, but stop, deciding that that's far enough. Far enough for your needs, anyway...
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>>6937177 >I'm sorry. I'm really, really sorry. I thought I'd have enough time, but I've got to get ready to go and eat out with the family. >I know this is really, really cruel of me, but I'll try my best to finish it today. >Holy shit, I feel like such an asshole. Zephyr Writefag !!e3ActqGNipi
>>6937312 It's okay, we still love you. You should crosspost your stuff to the pet thread, because they need more stuff to talk about.
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someone posted a nifty image in here a while back
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>>6942285 Got ya covered I think. I love the image, so whoever drew it? I love you too.
In other news:
Part 10 is next up on the assignment list. Will be getting to work after watching the new episode. The specialist will finally be revealed.
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>>6938999 a p-p-p-pet thread? great, now i have yet another thread i HAVE TO go to.
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Here comes part 10!>Your brow couldn't arch any higher than it is right now >"That's right. As I said, he's the perfect pony for the job." >The monster is currently rolling upon the floor with laughter >Joe has the same look on his face as you do >This specialist is considered a bit out there by his peers, weird by Mr. Paper Pusher here, and now has a name like Dippy Mcgraw? >Worry is in big bold print on the list of emotions you're feeling now >"That's the spirit Shiner. With his help I doubt you'll be having these 'hallucinations' for much longer." >At least Paper Pusher is confident about your success >You're about drained of hope by now >It just gets to be too much sometimes >You get up and shake hooves... as only ponies could do mind you >With a good bye and a good luck, you and Joe are heading out >"You're not as convinced about this Doctor as I am huh Shiner?" Joe asks, breaking the silence >Joe lets out a light chuckle and ruffles your mane with his hoof
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>>6949993 >"Just think Shiner," he pulls you to him, "no more waking up to find some weird imaginary creature running his claws along your belly!" >He finishes that line with a poke to your gut "Yeah I know. I just didn't like that 'weird' comment." you respond while escaping his grip
>"Haha, I'm sure it will be alright. Just stay focused on the goal." "I suppose you're right."
>"Suppose? No, I'm definitely right. You won't beat this thing if you don't give it 100%." >He -is- right >No way will that insufferable beast disappear if you're feeling like giving up >If only you could knock that smug look off his face >Ugh, what the hay is he up to now? >You almost gasp as you realize just what he's doing >He's urinating on that potted plant by the wall >Fortunately, he's only a figment of your imagination since the plant isn't being murdered right now >You would set the poor thing on fire out of pity if it actually had to take sustenance from such a liquid >Nothing but a volatile chemical could emerge from a body that behaves like he does >Another part of you dies as he loudly sighs in announcement of completing his foul deed 2/7
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>>6950007 >Once outside, you see Joe off as he has to return to work >He promised to check up on you later, but he needs to get back to his business >Well, you kinda forced him to get back to it because you have something else you need to do >Checking to see that he's out of sight, and that nop0ny else is watching, you reach into your saddlebag for that note >That crazy mare actually wants to see you tonight >You made a lewd comment towards her, and she nearly destroyed you >This doesn't add up at all >Let's see... where did she want to meet you? >Hmm, it's not that far from your place >That's not very close to the castle, but it's also not a home you don't think >If memory serves, the address should lead to a warehouse type building >Oh that sounds real lovely >She's going to exact her revenge finally in a secluded location >Although, that area isn't desolate in the least >Somep0ny would surely notice something wrong if you both went there and she was the only one to come out >You hatch an idea to make sure that somep0ny becomes aware that you're missing should this "date" turn out bad >Heading over to Joe's, you let him know to expect you sometime later >If you don't show up by 10, then feel free to check in at your apartment 3/7
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>>6950026 >He asked what was going on, but all you said was that you might have a date >"Is it concerning that note you found at your hooves earlier?" >Your ears perk up hard, and your eyes take on the size of dinner plates "What?"
>Oh good going, try not to sound so surprised next time Shiner >"Don't think I didn't see that note too. Was it the girl who led us to see Paper Pusher? She actually likes you doesn't she? Hard to believe after she nearly turned you into mushed apples yesterday." >You can't believe your ears as he starts laughing when he finishes "H-how?"
>"Please Shiner, only a blind pony would have missed that note. Your sneeze made it easier to understand what was going on too." >Well horseapples, but it doesn't really matter anyway "Yeah, I'm going to see what she wants, but the place she asked to meet me is a warehouse I think. I wanted to make sure that I'd get found if something like yesterday happened again, except more serious."
>"I got ya. Who knows, maybe she wanted to meet you in secret, and that was the only available place." "I can only hope. Thanks Joe, and I'll see you later perhaps."
>"Go get em tiger," he waves you off with a laugh >Gotta love that guy >You don't even let the monster spoil your mood about this >Who cares if he thinks that mare's flank is so big that it could take a "dollar" and squeeze out four of these "quarter" things by sitting on it >How and why would a mare do such a thing? 4/7
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>>6950041 >It doesn't take long to reach the destination, but it took a little longer than it should've as the monster distracted you for a moment >You can't believe you actually stopped to listen to him, and all he wanted was to ask you to pull one of his claws >Of course, you didn't do it, but he seemed eager about it >To Tartaros with him >There's a note taped to the side of the door too with your name on it >That's... a little creepy to be honest >Whatever, if this is your end, she won't get away with it at least >You knock on the entrance to the warehouse, and find that it's unlocked >Oh joy >It's dark on the inside obviously, so you opt to call out to her "Is anyp0ny here?"
>"You actually came Shiner." >That voice! It's her >Lanterns light up suddenly, and you notice her horn lit up >Unicorns... >"I'm glad you could make it. I suppose you're wondering why I had you meet me here of all places." "I have an idea, but I wouldn't expect to get away with it."
>The mare just laughs before finally responding >"You didn't think... Hahaha, no no Shiner. I didn't ask you here to hurt you. If it's about yesterday, I've gotten over it. However, I was also a little flattered that you were interested." >Her tone gets a little sultry on that last sentence >"It may have been a bit rude, but you wouldn't have said those things if you didn't see something you liked. Right?" >She approaches you with half lidded eyes 5/7
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>>6950054 >You slightly back away and gulp >This is moving a lot faster than you would like >Sure it's flank; however, this is starting to sound like a little much for a simple flank call as they say >Wait... you don't think you've heard such a phrase anywhere before >You snap out of that thought to the sound of the monster whistling and praising you for scoring such a mare >Curse him >Suddenly the mare stops before she closes the distance and begins laughing real hard >"You actually thought I called you here for that? Hah, you're cute and all, but no. That's not why we're here actually," she manages to say after her laughing fit >wut >"I actually wanted to introduce you to somep0ny Shiner. He seems to know you, and asked me to help him meet you in private." >This actually sounds worse than her trying to lift you once more for the last time "And just who would that be? Do I know this pony?"
>She just smiles and shakes her head no >"I doubt you would have met him before. I'm not sure how he knows you either. Oh, here he comes now." >She looks behind her as your ears twitch to the sound of hoofsteps getting closer in the dark >A pony finally steps into the light, and you can't believe your eyes >You can only gawk as he pierces the silence with a sinister chuckle 6/7
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>>6950075 "Running Gag?" you finally mutter
>It's the unicorn that disappeared not too long ago >You remember reading about him in the paper since he also took an entire bakery with him when he disappeared >The reports said he had gone crazy >There's no mistaking that purple coat and green mane, but you suppose you can't really mention the goggles he's wearing >They look like one of those old cheap gag x-ray glasses >"It's so nice to finally meet you Anon. I guess I should say hello to the human as well." >He finishes that line with a psychotic laugh 7/7
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>>6949993 >>6950007 >>6950026 >>6950041 >>6950054 >>6950075 >>6950086 Oops~ cliffhanger. There's part 10 as promised.
Comments and criticisms are always welcome if you have em.
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http://pastebin.com/u/TechnicolorShortie I know what I did, but I wanted to get that unicorn in on it too. Shenanigans is the name of the game friends.
I hope you readers enjoy it.
Til next time PTFG
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>>6950168 >Oops I dont believe
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Just wanted to thank ZephyrWriteFag for his great fic. I look forward to following/finishing it.
