>>19364077I don't think that could've been any more contrived than it was now.
If the stilted dialogue was an attempt at some quirky alt-lit pomo sort-of gimmick, it fell horribly flat.
Somehow I doubt that to be the case, though.
There was no flow to it at all. It's rushed, it's bare-bones, it tries too much in too little and it's just as unnatural as can be.
"Ah, I do remember you now. Time has certainly worked in your favour, it seems, I can see why you're a model."
>"Time's been quite kind to you as well; you've filled out nicely, and truth be told, you're more attractive than before.">"Still, it's not exactly like you had to be hot back then, you were the dimensional alien who was dating the hottest pony in school who was also a princess.""All the guys wanted to be me, and all the girls wanted to be with me"
Tell me this was ironic. And not Anon's remark at the end (though that, too, better be ironic).
This conversation as a whole. Hell, this chapter as a whole--if you can even call it that, a third of it being the lyrics to fucking Shot through the heart.
You cannot possibly lack the self-awareness to hear how cringe-worthy it is.
The fuck's a 'dimensional alien' anyway?
